Originally posted by: EuphoricDamsel.Lovely one Poorva!
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It would be very nice and fresh to see the story unfold according to our wishes for once. ❤️😆
The very reason I thought of writing this story. There is so much of potential in Cheel veer and Adi Naagin Bani ❤️
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Hello Vani Hearts ❤
Poorva here.
How are you all doing? As said, I have come with the first chapter of this FF. This is two days of hard work. I had a great time penning this down. I hope you enjoy reading this as well. Do let me know how you feel about this update as your feedback will encourage me to write more.
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Bani was carrying a big platter of sweets when she stopped in her tracks to admire the beautiful bride Noor. The wedding rituals were about to begin. Bani knew all of her pre wedding jitters. Even now she was looking a little restless and hesitant. She had made her "Haven't had a proper night's sleep" face. Bani giggled and then smiled. She was so happy for Noor. Today marks the beginning of Noor's new life. She will be a wife. She will have her own family.
"Tumhe dekh kar aisa lag raha hai Noor ke falaq se chaand khud zameen par utar aayaa hai." Bani spoke to herself.
"Sach kahoon sweet heart? Uss chand se zyada khoobsurat ho tum." Veer whispered in her ear. A shiver ran down Bani's entire being. She thought her heart just stopped beating for a second because of the momentary shock. Where did Veeranshu come from?
"Main Noor ki baat kar rahi hoon." Bani took one step away from him trying to calm herself down. She looked him in the eyes in one moment and looked down in the other. Those eyes captivated her. The warmth in his eyes invited her to marvel in their simplicity. His eyes held such strength but also a promise. A promise to comfort her. Why is there such honesty in the eyes of someone who is evil? Or is her judgement getting the better of her? Why is she feeling such feelings? She should not. He is an enemy.
"Bilkul, Aankhon mein noor bhi hai, chehre par guroor bhi hai aur mera chand mujhse zara sa door bhi hai. Agar ijazat do toh main tumhaare kareeb aa jaau, dekho falaq ke chaand ke paas bhi toh sitara hai." Veer smiled so confidently. As if he knows something that she does not.
"Tum jaise dil phenk aashiqon ko bohot dekha hai maine. Abhi bohot betaab ho rahe ho mujhse dil lagaane ke liye lekin thoda sa waqt guzarne do, tumhaare mizaaj bhi badal jaaenge aur shauk bhi." Bani was visibly displeased. She was about to walk away.
Veer extended his arm to stop her. "Main tumhaari raah rok kar apna hi intezaar kar raha hoon sweet heart." Bani's eyes truly gave away everything. They were the mirror of her soul. It was the kind of beauty that expands a moment into a personal eternity, a heaven he wished to be a part of.
"Kya chahiye tumhe Veeranshu?"
"Ladoo" Veer eyed the platter of sweets in her hand. Bani gave him one ladoo from the platter. "Bass ek sahi kaam karne se pehle mooh meetha karna chahta hoon." Bani raised her brow. What does he want to do?
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"Noor Beg kya aapko yeh nikaah qubool hai?" The maulavi asked.
"Nikaah qubool karne se pehle sach bolo Noor. Tum mere dost ko dhoke mein nahi rakh sakti Jhoot ki buniyaad pe rishtey nahi judte." Veer interrupted. Everyone's attention was diverted towards Veer. What does he want to do and what truth is Noor supposed to confess?
Noor strained her vocals but nothing came out, she wanted to scream, but she knew no one would hear her. Her worst fears were about to come true. She was gripped in silent panic. Her heart was racing and her brain felt like it seized up. Suddenly, her body wracked with raw sobs and she shook like a leaf. Fright consumed every cell in her body, swelling them with terror. With every second she practically felt the rise of her blood pressure, but she knew that this was the least of her worries.
"Kaisa sach Veer?" Anwar, Noor's to-be husband asked.
"Kal raat Noor mere paas thi, meri baahon mein." Veer announced throwing out Noor's corset from his jacket.
"Yeh kya bakwaas kar raha hai Noor?" Bani asked Noor angrily. "Kal raat ko toh hum teri bachelorette party celebrate karne club gaye thhe. Veeranshu ko jawaab do Noor. He needs to shut up. Woh tumhaare baare mein aisi bakwaas nahi kar sakta."
"Veer sach keh raha hai Bani. Kal raatko tum sabke jaane ke baad mila thha woh mujhe. Mujhe yeh shaadi nahi karni thhi. Bohot pareshaan thi main aur nashe mein bhi. Aisi haalat mein galti ho gayi mujhse." Noor's eyes welled up. She had a feeling that Veer was going to something like this. After all she had continuously ignored his calls and messages.
"Noor..." Bani took her name in disbelief. Bani had no idea of what Noor was going through. Bani knew Noor's parents were really insistent but she did not want this marriage? And the way Veeranshu chose to disclose Noor's truth right now will ruin her life.
Disgusted and humiliated, Noor's mother came to her. "Yeh kya kiya tumne Noor. Kya yeh din dekhne ke liye tumhe naazo se paal poskar bada kiya tha tumhe. Apni nahi toh kam se kam humaari ki izzat ke baare mein socha hota." She held her and shook her. Noor stood numb." Humme apni hi nazro mein gira diya tumne. Kahi ka nahi chhoda. Iss harqat ke baad jahaannum mein bhi jagah nahi milegi tumhe. Khuda maaf nahi karega." She cursed.
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"Itni ghatiya harqat karne ki himmat kaise hui tumhari Veeranshu Singhania? Tumne soch bhi kaise liya ke tum iss tareeke se Noor ki zindagi barbaad kar sakte ho." Frustration and anger brimming in Bani's tone. She picked up Noor's corset and walked towards Veer.
"Sach bolna kabse ghatiya harqat ho gayi sweet heart aur mera koi irada nahi hai uski zindagi barbaad karne ka. Main toh bass wahi keh raha hoon jo humaare beech kal raat hua." Veer spoke so seriously. His tone unaffected.
"Kyon karna chahte ho yeh sab Veeranshu? Kya milega tumhe iss tareeke se Noor ki badnaami karke?" Bani asked him.
"Mere pass koi choice nahi thhi. Maine kahaan thha Noor se ke mere dost ko sab kuch sach sach bataade apna nikaah padhwaane se pehle. Kitne phone kiye, kitne messages bhi lekin Noor ne sab ignore kiya. Yahaan aakar bhi maine usse kahaan ke woh sach bolde lekin usne nahi kahaa. I had to do what I did." Veer said in finality.
"Insaan ho ya jaanwar? Samajhte kya ho apne aap ko? Na koi lihaaz hai na kisiki parwaah. Kya tumhe zara sa bhi andaza hai ke tumhaari wajah se kitna bada tamasha hone wala hai. Yeh baat iss waqt iss jagah kehne ki kya zarurat thhi?" Bani's heart was breaking. She knew circumstances are going to go from bad to worse.
"I don't want to bloody care. Agar shaadi se kuch ghante pehle apne hone waale pati pe cheat karne ki himaat ho sakti hai toh sach bolne ki bhi himmat ho sakti hai." Veeranshu spoke coldly.
"Noor meri best friend hai Veeranshu. Ek baar mujhse keh diya hota. Iss situation ko hum better tareeke se handle kar sakte thhe." Her voice sounded so pained.
"Main tumse yeh saari baatein kyon kehta?" Veer gripped Bani's arm. "Kya kal raat ko tum aayi thhi mere paas." He pulled her closest to him. She could sense his agression from the heat emanating from his body. She thought it would feel like something brutal and hurting but the proximity felt familiar.
She reminisced the glimpses of Aakesh. Of how he had admired Naageshwari's beauty. Of how he had seen Naageshwari in her human form before she could see herself. Images flashed in Veer's mind. There was a man so whimsical. There was a woman so graceful. Somewhere in the middle of nowhere, he was not there, Bani was not there. But Veer felt that they were. What is that place and who are those people? Veer realised that a strong memory was trying to invoke itself. It was delicate, but just as chaotic. Did Bani see the same people and place he did?
Their trance broke when Meera yelled to inform that Noor had run away from the venue. Tapish, Meera, Daksh, Ponky, Veer and Bani rushed out to look for Noor. Her family could not care less. And all the guests were busy gossiping.
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Noor was walking aimlessly in the jungle. She can feel it. Her guilt and regret building like an unstoppable fire ball in the pit of your stomach. She cannot even concentrate on the way in which she is going. One of her shoe is removed and forgotten. In another instant, her anklet is left behind. Thorns prick in her feet. Her heart started to beat harder and faster, all the humiliation tries and crawls up inside her body and her brain starts to fire out negative thoughts. As sweat starts to drench all of her body. The negative thoughts keep coming like waves on rocks. She started moving irrationally. The arguments in her head got so fast and so disturbing that her brain shut down her body. The sweat has completely covered her body and her heart feels like it is going to explode. So many thoughts have turned her brain to a mental soup of conflicting instructions. She could not walk any more. She stood at the edge of a cliff. This was the end.
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Bani frantically screamed Noor's name yet again as she ran in the jungle. Veer was behind her. Bani felt so overwhelmed with fear. Her duppataa got stuck in the bushes, she pulled it back so violently that some part of it ripped. Bani's hands trembled. Her eyes watered. With every move in the jungle, she felt more terrified. Sweat started trickling down her neck. Her breathe quickened. Negative thoughts arose in her brain. She felt as of the only thing she could do right now was to pray for Noor's safety.
Veer stood still. His brain worked itself into a prescience of it's own. He was able to look in the near future. He could feel Noor, he could feel sweat drench her skin, the throbbing of her own eyes, her ringing internal screams vibrating in his ears, and the thumping of her heart against his chest. Veer's fingers are curled into a fist, he felt so helpless. He cannot hear his rapid breathing, but he can feel the oxygen flooding in and out of his lungs. Hesitantly, his eyes look at the Noor's dead corpse lying before him. She jumped of the cliff. Fear tortured his guts, churning his stomach in tensed cramps. Fear engulfed his conscience, knocking all other thoughts aside. Fear overwhelmed his body, making it drastically exhausted.
A single tear slid down Veer's cheek. He knew there is nothing that he could do. Like every other time. This vision will give him a bad memory to live with like so many others. His visions were inevitable. Like some higher power just letting him know whatever is bound to happen in the future. Precognition became more of a curse than blessing to him.
He silently walked towards the direction he felt right and Bani followed him. On the way Bani saw and recognised Noor's sandal. She even got hold of her anklet. There was some hope in Bani's heart that she will be able to find Noor. Little did she know about the truth. Fear gripped her heart when she saw the cliff. Where was Noor? She desperately called her name and kept looking for her. Veer kept staring at the unending depth below the cliff.
"Kya hua beta? Kuch dhundh rahi ho?" An old man walked towards Bani and asked her in a weak voice.
"Haan, meri dost Noor. Doobli patli si ladki hai. Shaadi ka joda pehna thha usne. Kya aapne dekha hai usse?" Bani asked trying to control her tears.
"Haan beta, ek ladki thi. Hare rang ke jode mein. Kood gayi waha se." The old man pointed towards the cliff. His expression horrified.
Bani was devastated.
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Noor's body lay there. Lifeless. Her face scarred and her bones broken.
Words left Veer. He kept staring at Noor's dead body. What had she done? He could see Bani burning in anger, her eyes staring at him in horror. He felt stuck. His body, unwilling to move. His mind trying to accept the death even when he saw it, felt it. He did not have the slightest idea that Noor was capable of doing something like this.
Bani was not in control of herself. She was about to break down. She felt nothing, just empty rage that tasted so bitter. It felt as if her terrified soul had unleashed an inner demon. She stepped towards Veer and slapped him with all her might. She knew nothing better.
"Tumhari zid aur paagalpan ka nateeja dekh liya Veeranshu?" Bani screamed at him.
"Maine Noor se sach bolne ke liye kahaan thha khudki jaan lene ke liye nahi." Veer had nothing else to say.
"Ab bacha kucha sach yahi hai ke marr chuki hai woh, she is no more." Tears rolled down Bani's eyes.
"Kuch nahi kar paayi main, nahi bacha paayi apni Noor ko." She felt so powerless. The Sarvashreshtha Adi Naagin even when having all her blessings and abilities was not able to save her best friend. She hid her face in her palms and cried.
"Bohot kameene insaan ho tum Veeranshu. Tumhaari wajah se Noor iss duniya mein nahi hai. Jee chahta hai main tumhe bhi aisa dard doon, aisi chot pohochaaun, jaan le lu tumhari." She blurted venomously.
"Marne se darta nahi hoon main Bani. Agar tumhe meri jaan chahiye toh ek baar maang ke dekho, khushi khushi tumhaare kadmo mein rakh dunga. Tumhaare liye maut bhi manzoor hai mujhe lekin tumhara ilzaam manzoor nahi hai." Veer stood his ground.
"Tumhaare mann mein jo aayaa tumne kar liya. Meri best friend ki maut ke zimmedaar ho tum Veeranshu. Ek bohot hi zyada gire huye, bure aur ghamandi insaan ho tum. Apni ameeri aur taakat ke nashe mein choor. Ghinn aati hai tum par, nafrat ke laayak bhi nahi ho." Bani gripped his collar.
Veer gripped her wrists. "Main maantaa hoon main bura hoon. Bohot bura. Lekin tumhaare kehne se criminal nahi bann jaunga. Main tumhaari tarah nahi hoon, jo apni buraaiyon ko chupaane ki koshish karta rahoon. Jaisa bhi hoon, khudka sach jaantaa hoon. Tum mere baare mein kuch nahi jaanti. Meri maano toh apni buraaiyon ko itna bhi mat chhupana Bani ke meri buraaiyon ko apne gale mein lagaake ghumna pade."
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This really was very good.
The vision scene was something unexpected and it surprised me very much in a good way of course.
All in all a pretty darn good update.I always felt Ponky/Daksh/Monil killing Noor was an unnecessary occurrence in the show and I personally connected with Noor's death here more.
Plus Veer's actions had a reason behind them here which in show was totally ignored.
Loved the interaction of Vani too. :)
Update soon again.
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