Nice update
Maan drunk and geet taking care of him can't wait to see what happens now update soon
Nice update
Maan drunk and geet taking care of him can't wait to see what happens now update soon
Part 15
Wow Di Maan sach me zyada talli hogai aur Geet bhi pareshan hai ki yeh ajib bande ka kya karu ab... You are absolutely right about the "What ifs ki duniya, drunk mind plus loneliness deadly combo" plus woh anxiety aur depression bhi extra fitting me ayega bhi ab Maan ko ghar nhi jana aur kahin Geet Maan ko apni ghar lake galat nhi kar rahi hai.... Aur yeh Maan sach much akela hogaya par ab nhi Geet haina š
Ab dekhte hai kya hoga.... š¤£thanks for the update and award Di š¤
ā¤
Superb update....
Totally loved it....
thanks for the pm....
Congrats to all the winnersš
the writer also deserves an award for her hard workš
Part 15
superb update..... awesomely written
glad that Geet was honest with Maan about hookups.
can understand why she hates hotel rooms
why does Maan not want to go home?
Geet's dilemma is well poytrayed.
liked Geet's concern for Maan
so Maan's thoughts understandable
I knew she would not leave Maan alone
Gosh Maan drank so much
great that Geet shouted the manager
surprised that she did not correct the manager when he said that Maan is her boyfriend
well Maan does not want to be alone
so she is taking Maan to her house....
loved that she assures him that she is there with him
update soon
Star Commentor Award (Part 15)
Winner: Khwaishfan, Creampuff
Runner-ups: Umadevi97, ferdouz
Special Mention: coderlady, NeenaDd
EarlyBird Award (For readers havingf irst 3 comments): aparna3011,mkd.70, ferdouz
Congratulations to the winner and the runner-upās š
Note:
Letās continue the guessing game& song game to double the fun
Writerās two cents: Notice Geet jitnabhi uncaring & sassy dikhaye...she cares for Maan....cares ki he might bedrunk & all...they are just an unexpressive coupleā¦.(Readers: Thoughts and discussions please)
Guessing game: After reading the parts, please add a guess that what do you think will happen in the next part. Letās see, who gets it most right
Song game: So, for each part suggest a song you think goes with it. I base each part or story with a song on my mind. Letās see part padhke sabke mann mein kaunsa song aata hai
Mujhe somehow ye part post karte huye Kalank ka title song zehen mein ghum raha hai. Specially the lines:
Hawaaon mein bahenge
Ghataon mein rahenge
Tu barkha meri
Main tera baadal piya
Jo tere na huve toh
Kisi ka na rahenge
Deewani tu meri
Main tera paagal piya
Hazaaron mein kisi ko
Taqdeer aisi
Mili hai ik Ranjha
Aur Heer jaisi
And the line:
Main gehra tamas tu sunhera savera
Main tera o, main tera
Musaafir main bhatka tu mera basera
Main tera o... main tera
Tu jugnu chamakta
Main jungle ghanera
Main tera
O piya main tera, main tera, main tera
Ho... main tera
Ho... main tera, main tera, main tera
-~-
Part 16
Geet removes the drink from Maan's hand
G-Enough Maan. We have to leave
Maan protests with his gibberish ki ghar nahi jaana ye wo...nahi jaana...dont wanna be alone
G-You wonāt be alone. I will be with you.
She says sincerely looking into his eyes
She grabs his coat and mobile
G-Get up now
He stumbles while standing up
M-f*ckā¦.i am so...dru-nk
She smiles ki isko ab pata chal rahi hai
Geet is in two minds ki Maan ko pakde ki nahi coz she has never held him...also he is broad & heavy
She doesnātā know how to take care of a drunk man
He is holding onto the chair for now
He stepped away from the chair and was about to fall...
Geet holds him
G-Maan! God! You are heavy
She heaves giving him support
G-Try and not fall on me please. I will fall if you just keep your whole weight on me. You weight double
He moves away...ki i am ok...i am ok...
M-i am...verfectly...fi-ne...
Maan stumbles back few steps
Geet wants to not hold him & let him be even he is drunk coz she is doing enough and holding him is a cliche that she doesnāt want to do
But she also doesnāt want to injure him in this little experiment of hers
Is there any doās & donāts, she can google she is wondering
She tried holding him as shown in movies...bit it seems he is crushing her with his weight...
She feels either he is stupid, or she is
Maan every time makes her doubt her intelligence.... Maan ka superpower that he himself is not aware of
Not even all the bullies in hospital and society can do it
Maan stumbles backwards
G-Donāt fall!
He falls on his back & starts laughing drunkly
Geet rolls her eyes thinking this was such a bad idea
She leaps to help Maan
G-Are you hurt?? omg..what? why are you laughing? Idiot!
She sighs
G-I will kill you someday
She mutters
G-or maybe you will
The bar staff help Geet to help Maan get up
Manager- Mam I guess instead of going to parking lot...we can arrange a hotel room...
G-Fine!!...hotel room
She also thinks she canāt endure this till the parking lot
She asks Maan
G-Where is the key to your hotel room?
As Maan had mentioned going to the room so she knew he had already booked a room
Maan starts talking gibberish...while going for another drink at the bar...
She slaps his hand
She searches his coat pockets for the keys
Kuch nahi mila
Geet thinks seriously- I am not searching his pant pockets
But she has no choice
Geet ke dimaag mein aaya hi nahi ki Front deskke paas extrakeys rehti hain....
Thatās why she calls herself idiot when she is with Maan
She thinks Maan ke back pocket mein wallet hoga
She thinks she is a doctor...she has done & seen more
She navigates her hand into his back pocket
His drunk mind thinks Geet is openly groping me in public.Reason- I have a nice assā¦ She wanted to grope it... she finds the chance and did it... she is super attracted to me
M-Geez...you...(he gives her a huge smile)...i like...you like..?
She is flabbergasted how can Maan reach this conclusion
G-F*ck you! idiot!
She takes out the key
She thinks, isko baaki kisi ka sense nahi hai, bakwaas ka sense hai
Originally posted by: ferdouzPart 14 and 15 were intriguing.
Both have started caring and feeling for each other but like stubborn mules don't want to accept it š
Let's see how Geet is going to handle a drunk Maan š¤
She has promised him not to leave him alone. Wada ki hai tho nibhana padega š
š¤£stubborn mules! I love this line
Originally posted by: khwaishfanthanks for the pm....
Congrats to all the winnersš
the writer also deserves an award for her hard workš
Part 15
superb update..... awesomely written
glad that Geet was honest with Maan about hookups.
can understand why she hates hotel rooms
why does Maan not want to go home?
Geet's dilemma is well poytrayed.
liked Geet's concern for Maan
so Maan's thoughts understandable
I knew she would not leave Maan alone
Gosh Maan drank so much
great that Geet shouted the manager
surprised that she did not correct the manager when he said that Maan is her boyfriend
well Maan does not want to be alone
so she is taking Maan to her house....
loved that she assures him that she is there with him
update soon
Thanks for such kind words dear. The readers like you reading and commenting are my most precious awards
Part 16
Omg di what a hilarious update !!!!
Drunk maan is totally hilarious...... he is totally cool & he has lost his arrogance
He is making sensible geet lose her marbles & over think the simplest things
Where should I hold him ..... wait I should google it !!
Should I go into his pockets for the keys ..... for goodness sake you are a doctor
Maan falling & cracking up laughing continuously.......
my favorite where maan thinks geet is groping her ass ........... di I couldnāt stop laughing
ā you like , I likeā
Omg di you outdid yourself , this update was extremely funny !!
Thank you for the award & congrats to everyone & thank you for the update
Awesome update..
Thank you for pm..
Waiting for next update..
Funny update š
Maan is so cute while drunk loved this part
Update soon
comment:
p_commentcount