Geet - Hui Sabse Parayee

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Posted: 3 years ago

Nice update

Maan drunk and geet taking care of him can't wait to see what happens now update soon

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Posted: 3 years ago

Part 15

Wow Di Maan sach me zyada talli hogai aur Geet bhi pareshan hai ki yeh ajib bande ka kya karu ab... You are absolutely right about the "What ifs ki duniya, drunk mind plus loneliness deadly combo" plus woh anxiety aur depression bhi extra fitting me ayega bhi ab Maan ko ghar nhi jana aur kahin Geet Maan ko apni ghar lake galat nhi kar rahi hai.... Aur yeh Maan sach much akela hogaya par ab nhi Geet haina šŸ˜‰

Ab dekhte hai kya hoga.... šŸ¤£thanks for the update and award Di šŸ¤—

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Posted: 3 years ago

Superb update....

Totally loved it....

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Posted: 3 years ago

thanks for the pm....

Congrats to all the winnersšŸ˜Š

the writer also deserves an award for her hard workšŸ‘


Part 15

superb update..... awesomely written

glad that Geet was honest with Maan about hookups.

can understand why she hates hotel rooms

why does Maan not want to go home?

Geet's dilemma is well poytrayed. 

liked Geet's concern for Maan

so Maan's thoughts understandable

I knew she would not leave Maan alone

Gosh Maan drank so much

great that Geet shouted the manager 

surprised that she did not correct the manager when he said that Maan is her boyfriend

well Maan does not want to be alone 

so she is taking Maan to her house....

loved that she assures him that she is there with him


update soon

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Posted: 3 years ago

Star Commentor Award (Part 15)

Winner:   Khwaishfan, Creampuff

Runner-ups:   Umadevi97, ferdouz

Special Mention:  coderlady, NeenaDd

EarlyBird Award (For readers havingf irst 3 comments): aparna3011,mkd.70, ferdouz  

 

Congratulations to the winner and the runner-upā€™s šŸ‘smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32




Note

 

Letā€™s continue the guessing game& song game to double the fun

 

Writerā€™s two cents: Notice Geet jitnabhi uncaring & sassy dikhaye...she cares for Maan....cares ki he might bedrunk & all...they are just an unexpressive coupleā€¦.(Readers: Thoughts and discussions please)

 

Guessing game: After reading the parts, please add a guess that what do you think will happen in the next part. Letā€™s see, who gets it most right 

 

Song game: So, for each part suggest a song you think goes with it. I base each part or story with a song on my mind. Letā€™s see part padhke sabke mann mein kaunsa song aata hai


Mujhe somehow ye part post karte huye Kalank ka title song zehen mein ghum raha hai. Specially the lines: 

Hawaaon mein bahenge

Ghataon mein rahenge

Tu barkha meri

Main tera baadal piya

Jo tere na huve toh

Kisi ka na rahenge

Deewani tu meri

Main tera paagal piya

Hazaaron mein kisi ko

Taqdeer aisi 

Mili hai ik Ranjha 

Aur Heer jaisi


And the line: 


Main gehra tamas tu sunhera savera

Main tera o, main tera

Musaafir main bhatka tu mera basera

Main tera o... main tera

Tu jugnu chamakta

Main jungle ghanera

Main tera

O piya main tera, main tera, main tera

Ho... main tera

Ho... main tera, main tera, main tera


 

 

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Part 16

 

 

Geet removes the drink from Maan's hand

 

G-Enough Maan. We have to leave


Maan protests with his gibberish ki ghar nahi jaana ye wo...nahi jaana...dont wanna be alone

 

G-You wonā€™t be alone. I will be with you.

 

She says sincerely looking into his eyes

 

She grabs his coat and mobile

 

G-Get up now

 

He stumbles while standing up

 

M-f*ckā€¦.i am so...dru-nk

 

She smiles ki isko ab pata chal rahi hai

 

Geet is in two minds ki Maan ko pakde ki nahi coz she has never held him...also he is broad & heavy

 

She doesnā€™tā€™ know how to take care of a drunk man

 

He is holding onto the chair for now

 

He stepped away from the chair and was about to fall...

 

Geet holds him

 

G-Maan! God! You are heavy

 

She heaves giving him support

 

G-Try and not fall on me please. I will fall if you just keep your whole weight on me. You weight double

 

He moves away...ki i am ok...i am ok...

 

M-i am...verfectly...fi-ne...

 

Maan stumbles back few steps

 

Geet wants to not hold him & let him be even he is drunk coz she is doing enough and holding him is a cliche that she doesnā€™t want to do

 

But she also doesnā€™t want to injure him in this little experiment of hers

 

Is there any doā€™s & donā€™ts, she can google she is wondering

 

She tried holding him as shown in movies...bit it seems he is crushing her with his weight...

 

She feels either he is stupid, or she is

 

Maan every time makes her doubt her intelligence.... Maan ka superpower that he himself is not aware of

 

Not even all the bullies in hospital and society can do it

 

Maan stumbles backwards

 

G-Donā€™t fall!

 

He falls on his back & starts laughing drunkly

 

Geet rolls her eyes thinking this was such a bad idea

 

She leaps to help Maan

 

G-Are you hurt?? omg..what? why are you laughing? Idiot!

 

She sighs

 

G-I will kill you someday

 

She mutters

 

G-or maybe you will

 

The bar staff help Geet to help Maan get up

 

Manager- Mam I guess instead of going to parking lot...we can arrange a hotel room...

 

G-Fine!!...hotel room


She also thinks she canā€™t endure this till the parking lot

 

She asks Maan

 

G-Where is the key to your hotel room?

 

As Maan had mentioned going to the room so she knew he had already booked a room

 

Maan starts talking gibberish...while going for another drink at the bar...

 

She slaps his hand

 

She searches his coat pockets for the keys

 

Kuch nahi mila

 

Geet thinks seriously- I am not searching his pant pockets

 

But she has no choice

 

Geet ke dimaag mein aaya hi nahi ki Front deskke paas extrakeys rehti hain.... 

 

Thatā€™s why she calls herself idiot when she is with Maan

 

She thinks Maan ke back pocket mein wallet hoga

 

She thinks she is a doctor...she has done & seen more

 

She navigates her hand into his back pocket

 

His drunk mind thinks Geet is openly groping me in public.Reason- I have a nice assā€¦ She wanted to grope it... she finds the chance and did it... she is super attracted to me

 

M-Geez...you...(he gives her a huge smile)...i like...you like..?

 

She is flabbergasted how can Maan reach this conclusion

 

G-F*ck you! idiot!

 

She takes out the key

 

She thinks, isko baaki kisi ka sense nahi hai, bakwaas ka sense hai

Edited by NilzStorywriter - 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: ferdouz

Part 14 and 15 were intriguing. 

Both have started caring and feeling for each other but like stubborn mules don't want to accept it šŸ˜…

Let's see how Geet is going to handle a drunk Maan šŸ¤­

She has promised him not to leave him alone. Wada ki hai tho nibhana padega šŸ˜

šŸ¤£stubborn mules! I love this line

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: khwaishfan

thanks for the pm....

Congrats to all the winnersšŸ˜Š

the writer also deserves an award for her hard workšŸ‘


Part 15

superb update..... awesomely written

glad that Geet was honest with Maan about hookups.

can understand why she hates hotel rooms

why does Maan not want to go home?

Geet's dilemma is well poytrayed. 

liked Geet's concern for Maan

so Maan's thoughts understandable

I knew she would not leave Maan alone

Gosh Maan drank so much

great that Geet shouted the manager 

surprised that she did not correct the manager when he said that Maan is her boyfriend

well Maan does not want to be alone 

so she is taking Maan to her house....

loved that she assures him that she is there with him


update soon


Thanks for such kind words dear. The readers like you reading and commenting are my most precious awards

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Posted: 3 years ago

Part 16 

Omg di what a hilarious update !!!!smiley32smiley32

Drunk maan is totally hilarious...... he is totally cool & he has lost his arrogance smiley37

He is making sensible geet lose her marbles & over think the simplest things smiley37

Where should I hold him ..... wait I should google it !! smiley37smiley37smiley37smiley37

Should I go into his pockets for the keys ..... for goodness sake you are a doctor smiley37smiley37

Maan falling & cracking up laughing continuously....... smiley37smiley37smiley37

my favorite where maan thinks geet is groping her ass ........... di I couldnā€™t stop laughing smiley37smiley37smiley37smiley37smiley37smiley37

ā€œ you like , I likeā€ smiley37smiley37smiley37

Omg di you outdid yourself , this update was extremely funny !! smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32

Thank you for the award & congrats to everyone & thank you for the update 

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Posted: 3 years ago

Awesome update..

Thank you for pm..

Waiting for next update..

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Posted: 3 years ago

Funny update šŸ˜€

Maan is so cute while drunk loved this part


Update soon