OS: Shattered

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Posted: 6 days ago

Okay, so this is the first time I have tried writing something serious and maybe kinda emotional and that too in the first person... Pata nahi kaisa hai.

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So, this OS is set at that time when Nishant found the dead bodies of Divya and Pia. Also, here Nishant and Divya have only three kids, Pia, Saavi and the one whom Mo killed. Ayush is not there. I have written this in first person, as Nishant's thoughts.

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                      Shattered

I sat there on my knees, shattered as four hospital staff members placed two dead bodies in front of me... The dead bodies of my wife and my Gudiya...

I could not believe that my wife and daughter had left me forever...

I saw a ray of hope... Their faces were charred beyond recognition. I thought that maybe they were some other mother-daughter duo. I looked at the investigating officer with a ray of hope in my eyes... But all my hopes were dashed to the ground in the most cruelest way...

He produced a locket... THE locket which I had gifted my daughter, my Gudiya on her birthday... There was absolutely no doubt that the bodies in front of me were of my wife and daughter only...

This was a cruel joke that Fate played on me... snatched away my wife and my daughter.

I still remember the day my daughter was born...

We were all so happy... After all, she was the first daughter to be born in our Reevavanshi clan after several generations. Oh how happy we were!! How we had celebrated her birth...

She was my doll... Just seeing her face brought a smile on my face even when I was sad or tensed. Both me and Divya loved her a lot. She had become the centre of our world.

When she used to be sick, we used to even forget food and sleep... None of us used to leave her side. We could not tolerate a single tear in her eyes.

Our happiness increased when Divya gave birth to a son and then again to another daughter.

We were a really happy family...

Then came the fateful day when that Daayan killed my son. I could still have got over that shock had I not got another, even bigger shock...

Divya was a Sarpika and she had killed all of my fellow Reevavanshis... I could not believe it!! The woman with whom I had been so much in love had killed all my fellow Reevavanshis... She had killed my family, my friends and my colleagues...

And I had fallen in love with her!!

I did not know on whom I was more angry... Whom did I hate more? Her for killing all the Reevavanshis or myself for falling in love and marrying their killer?

I was so angry that I cut off all ties with her... I still remember that day when she took my Gudiya away. It felt as if someone had ripped my heart apart... I was heartbroken, sad and angry...

I can never forget that sad look on my Gudiya's face and those tears in her eyes... She looked back at me when Divya was taking her away with a hope that I would stop them. But I was so angry that I did not even allow Divya to touch Saavi, let alone stopping them.

I never knew that it was the last time I was seeing my daughter's face...

And now that I sit here, mourning their death I don't know whether I hate Divya or not.

Yes, I am definitely angry with her for killing my fellow Reevavanshis, for lying to me... But I don't hate her!! I can never bring myself to hate her... because love is way more powerful than hatred.

I will never be able to hate her...

But today, I promise Divya and Gudiya that I will avenge their death... I will find that Daayan who snatched them away from me, who tore my world apart...

I promise.

Edited by Nikki_srk - 6 days ago
Posted: 6 days ago

It's amazing dear!!!


You brought out the emotions brilliantly and I could literally see them playing in my mind. smiley19 smiley19 smiley19


Nishant's feelings for Divya and Piya was beautifully described. 


I wish I coul hug you right now! Absolutely brilliant! smiley32 smiley32 smiley32 smiley27 smiley27 smiley27

Posted: 6 days ago

Originally posted by nushy1995


It's amazing dear!!!


You brought out the emotions brilliantly and I could literally see them playing in my mind. smiley19 smiley19 smiley19


Nishant's feelings for Divya and Piya was beautifully described. 


I wish I coul hug you right now! Absolutely brilliant! smiley32 smiley32 smiley32 smiley27 smiley27 smiley27

Thank you so much... smiley31

I still can't believe I actually wrote one serious and emotional OS and it didn't turn out to be a total crap. smiley36

Sending a virtual hug to you... smiley31

PS. Even if you were here, you couldn't hug me... Social distancing, remember? smiley36

Posted: 6 days ago

Nikkismiley31smiley32

You have brought out emotions and desribed the turmoil beautifully!! Loved it, emotions and breakdown Nishant had. Great job.

Posted: 6 days ago

Originally posted by Madhura..


Nikkismiley31smiley32

You have brought out emotions and desribed the turmoil beautifully!! Loved it, emotions and breakdown Nishant had. Great job.

Thank you so much... smiley31

I am glad you liked it.


As I replied earlier to Nushy, I still can't believe I managed to write it without messing up with it... 

A miracle indeed... smiley36

In SRK's words from Om Shanti Om:

I am feeling like the King (Queen) of the world...

Edited by Nikki_srk - 6 days ago
Posted: 6 days ago

Originally posted by Nikki_srk


PS. Even if you were here, you couldn't hug me... Social distancing, remember? smiley36

smiley36 

Posted: 6 days ago

Originally posted by Nikki_srk


Thank you so much... smiley31

I am glad you liked it.


As I replied earlier to Nushy, I still can't believe I managed to write it without messing up with it... 

A miracle indeed... smiley36

In SRK's words from Om Shanti Om:

I am feeling like the King (Queen) of the world...


smiley27

Of course, you did so well. Hence you should explore different genres.

Dialogue, definitely you will feelsmiley4

Posted: 6 days ago

Originally posted by Madhura..



smiley27

Of course, you did so well. Hence you should explore different genres.

Dialogue, definitely you will feelsmiley4

Well I will definitely try to explore different genres... Now that this one did not turn out to be a total bakwas, I might try some more...

Of course!! I definitely feel so... smiley4

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