ArHi || Boundless; (Of poets and poetry) - Page 5

Originally posted by: Savera84

I loved the first chapter.  Very interesting.  You joined IF to post this story!

I have a feeling you are not new to writing.  Are you an old writer who lost your credentials or are you a writer who wrote on a different platform?

I am just curious.

Your writing style and the plot of the story piqued my interest and I will be with you in this journey.

My knowledge in poetry is zero.

But I will try to read all the poetry flowing between you three.

Cheers.......

I agree, Raji! I also wondered if this could be one of the veteran writers. I have a teeny tiny shaq, who it could be 😁

Shaurya Singh Raizada and Nandini Singh Raizada 😊

Originally posted by: Whats-in-a-name

And I am going to reply to that with an equally corny "Aadab, aadab!" 

The sher you quoted hit me somewhere right in the gut. "tujh se bhī dil-fareb haiñ ġham rozgār ke"- Sigh! If that ain't the bitter pill of truth!

 

Begangi toh apni jagah hai, par ye bhi irshad hai ke-

uTh kar to aa ga.e haiñ tirī bazm se magar

kuchh dil hī jāntā hai ki kis dil se aa.e haiñ. 

I think that’s the most beautiful part about writing, a simple line written by someone from a different era and might’ve gone through something very different in life, but still renders you awestruck. 

maiñ ne samjhā thā ki tū hai to daraḳhshāñ hai hayāt

terā ġham hai to ġham-e-dahr kā jhagḌā kyā hai

I don’t think I can get over this ever, so would probably end up quoting this nazm very often! 

Originally posted by: cheers2all

I agree, Raji! I also wondered if this could be one of the veteran writers. I have a teeny tiny shaq, who it could be 😁

Shaurya Singh Raizada and Nandini Singh Raizada 😊

Dheere dheere kaan mein boldo, who is it?

Birds of a feather flock together.😊

Loving it already.

Could not see cutie pie Arnav in distress.  It turned out to be 26 year old Arnav is no different.  He received a big blow even after trying to control his anger and after deciding not to fall in love.

Cheers....

Originally posted by: ansak

Very interesting, would love to read more. Thanks

Thank you!

Originally posted by: sammymas

Beautiful and intriguing start....love to see how it goes. Please do continue.

Thank you so much :)

Originally posted by: Savera84

I loved the first chapter.  Very interesting.  You joined IF to post this story!

I have a feeling you are not new to writing.  Are you an old writer who lost your credentials or are you a writer who wrote on a different platform?

I am just curious.

Your writing style and the plot of the story piqued my interest and I will be with you in this journey.

My knowledge in poetry is zero.

But I will try to read all the poetry flowing between you three.

Cheers.......

Thank you so much! No, I'm not new to writing. To be honest, this is not a new piece either. I had written this a while ago for another platform with different character names, but owing to certain circumstances was unable to carry the story forward then. 

Knowledge in poetry should be immaterial in making your presence felt welcome here. A willing ear is just as precious as a rhyming tongue :)

Note: Newbies aren't allowed more than 11 posts a day, unfortunately :/ And not quote more than thrice either. Will re-join the mehfil in 24 hrs.

Originally posted by: Whats-in-a-name

Thank you so much! No, I'm not new to writing. To be honest, this is not a new piece either. I had written this a while ago for another platform with different character names, but owing to certain circumstances was unable to carry the story forward then. 

Knowledge in poetry should be immaterial in making your presence felt welcome here. A willing ear is just as precious as a rhyming tongue :)

Wonderful!  Boundless love for Arnav and Khushi and comments filled with poetry, what a combination! 

I just want to add some thing which I found in google while searching for Mirza Ghalib's poetry.

hazāroñ ḳhvāhisheñ aisī ki har ḳhvāhish pe dam nikle

bahut nikle mire armān lekin phir bhī kam nikle

MIRZA GHALIB

Poetry is one subject I always stayed away from.  This is getting interesting.

Cheers..........

Interesting start

Interesting start . I would love to read this story 

Beautiful start...waiting for the story to unfold...:)

Originally posted by: Whats-in-a-name

Note: Newbies aren't allowed more than 11 posts a day, unfortunately :/ And not quote more than thrice either. Will re-join the mehfil in 24 hrs.

Nai subah par nazar hai magar aah ye bhi dar hai

Ye sahar bhi rafta rafta kahin shaam tak na pahunche

- Shakeel Badayuni 

Originally posted by: Arshi67

Nai subah par nazar hai magar aah ye bhi dar hai

Ye sahar bhi rafta rafta kahin shaam tak na pahunche

- Shakeel Badayuni 

Oh this one's a favorite in its entirety!

Unhein apne dil ki khabrein mere dil se mil rahi hain, 

Main jo unse rooth jaauṅ to payaam tak na pahunche

ye adā-e-be-niyāzī tujhe bevafā mubārak

magar aisī be-ruḳhī kyā ki salām tak na pahuñche.

Aur seher-o-subah ki baat ki hai toh -

kabhi to subha tire kunj-e-lab se ho aaghaaz

kabhi to shab sar-e-kākul se mushk-baar chale.

-Mirza Ghalib

Originally posted by: Savera84

Wonderful!  Boundless love for Arnav and Khushi and comments filled with poetry, what a combination! 

I just want to add some thing which I found in google while searching for Mirza Ghalib's poetry.

hazāroñ ḳhvāhisheñ aisī ki har ḳhvāhish pe dam nikle

bahut nikle mire armān lekin phir bhī kam nikle

Poetry is one subject I always stayed away from.  This is getting interesting.

Cheers..........

You have just quoted one of my favorites from Ghalib's collection. The wistfulness and the insatiable thirst of human desire has been so beautifully captured in these two simple lines. In this same piece, there is another sher which happens to be very close to my heart-

Mohabbat mein nahin hai farq jeene aur marne ka

Ussi ko dekh kar jeete hain, jis qaatil pe dam nikle 

(Please do let me know if you need help with translations. Oh and it's never too late to fall in love with poetry!)