One Shot (OS): Mini's Mission Manofying Arya

Posted: 4 years ago

Hello Members, 

I hope all are well, and finally, the weekend is over. Its Monday today..! I know many members are excited to watch the upcoming track, and after watching the spoiler and Ashnoor byte, the excitement level is double. But in my case, after watching the spoiler, I was badly in thinking mode, spoiler doesn't make me happy, I don't want MiNeil marriage scene right now, sometimes later after progression in their relationship, when they actually fell in love...😆  

As in spoiler video and even in Ashnoor byte she said she'll slap her Chutanki Arya😔.. bas meri sui wahi atak gai thi 2 din se.. 🤣

So I've written an OS, plz do read it and tell me in comments how it was written..! As I'm, not a writer, this is my first-time I've written something. Well, I do imagine countless scenarios, but I cant penned it down myself, I give suggestion to others, give them prompt ideas and they write well more than my expectations.. 

Guys my vocab is not so good, plz do let me knw if dere is any grammatical errors...


PS: don't through tomatoes/ eggs/ shoes, sandals on me😆 read at ur own risk, although I've the confidence ur response will be +ve... 

 OS BELOW IN NEXT POST

Edited by SuryaIshraholic - 4 years ago
Posted: 4 years ago

Kyunki Tu Dhadhkan, Main Dil

Scene after Mini slap Arya in anger. Arya started crying and ran to her room, Pooro di following her. In aangan, Kammo aunty starts her taunts while Mini replying to her and other gossips aunties in full aggression mood, afterward they left the place smiley12

Neil: said to Mini you've not done well by slapping Arya in front of all smiley15

Mini: she is my sister and I knew how to deal with her. If she misbehaves, I've to teach her discipline manners 

Neil: but ye koi tarika nahi hota hai discipline sikhane ka.

Mini: Mr. Neil Oberai, you are no one to teach me how to deal with my own sister stay of out it, I already warned you.

Neil leaves from there, to calm down himself to get some fresh air. smiley36

Preet: Mini shant hoja, i understand Arya ne jo bhi kaha use aisa nahi kahna chahiy tha, but vo abhi bachi hai usko samaj nahi hai ye sab baton ki, use tuje hi samjhana hoga, shanti se. Aur..!

Mini: Aur.. Aur Kya..? smiley5

Preet: Aur ye ki mai bhi Neil ki baton se agree karti hu, tuje yun sab k saamne Arya par hath nahi uthana chahiy tha, pata nai iss chiz ko vo kese react kr bethe.  

Mini: Preet kaure tuje b aise lagta hai mene galat kia uss par hath utha k.. apni Chutanki par.! Yaar mai kya karti.. use chup kara rahi thi na mai shanti se, but nahi ussne b meri bat nahi mani, aur gusse mai mera hath uth gaya bas.. 😢 I.. I understand muje aisa nai karna chahiy tha but mai rok nai pai khud ko.. (started crying smiley19 Preet consoles her)

Preet: bas tu rona band kar ab, ander kamre mai teri Chutanki ne b ro ro k bura haal bana lia hoga, uski VeerBalika ne jo use maara hai, jaa k tuje hi manana hoga use.

Mini: Preet kaure yar abhi nahi hopayga mujse mai khud bahut disturb hogai hu ye sab ko lekar, tu jaa k dekh le ek baar use plzz... smiley9

Preet: Mai chali jaati use dekhne but vo meri nahi sunegi abhi, aur ghar se b mummy g ka call aagya hai kaafi late hogya hai muje, so muje nikalna padega, veer bobby g bhi bahar gaye huye hai. So u go and take care of urself and ur Chutanki. Mai chalti hoon, bye Good night.

Mini: Good Night.. 🙁 Hey babes ki matarani muje himmat dena Chutanki ko manane k liye, pata nahi Pooro didi usko kese sambhal rahi hogi..!😕

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In  Arya's room,

Pooro Di: Bas chup hojao arya, ache bache rote nai hai..

Arya: Pooro di aapne dekhna na VeerBalika ne muje kese sab k saamne chata mara, 😭vo pyar nai karti mujse, use bolo vo wapis chale jaaye Australia, mai akele rah lungismiley15

Pooro Di: Aise nahi kahte hai Arya, vo badi hai tumse, tumhari badi sister, socho agar aaj mumma hoti aur tum kuch galat bat bolti ya gaalt zidd krti toh vo b tumhe aise marti na..? toh iska matlab ye hojata kya ki vo aap se pyar nai karti.?

Nahi na..? toh bas aise hi aapki Veerbalika b aapse bahut pyar karti hai, aapko galat kaam galat demand karne se rok rahi thi, aur pir aapne b apni di ki baat nahi suni unhe gussa dila dia aapne, aur mini ka hath uth gaya.

Arya: but vo toh meri sister hai na mere demand puri kar sakti hai, kya galat kaha mene use, Neil se shadi krne ka hi toh bola tha na..? Ha bolo ab..smiley14

(all this conversation were heard by Mini as she was standing near the door)

Pooro di:  she tried to give her ans but Mini stops her. 

Mini: Chutankiii.. smiley9

Arya: Pooro didi ise bolo ye chali jaye yahan se, muje koi bat nai krna isse.. smiley24

Pooro di: Arya aise nai bolte hai, bado se respect se bat krte hai na..

Mini: Pooro di, kaafi rat hogai hai aap ghar chale jaiye mai hoon arya k sath

Pooro left the room..  To avoid Mini, Arya turns her face to the opposite side of the bed and try to sleep, Mini comes to her side, she again shifts to the other side of the bed. This time Mini hugged her tight from back and says sorry to while kissing the cheek where she slapped her. (both the sisters are crying smiley19

Mini: Plz Chutanki, apni Veerbalika ko maaf krdo, dekho mene apne ears b hold kr liye, Veerbalika tumhe sorrry b bol rahi hai plzzz... smiley13

Arya: she turns and hugged her back, says tum bahut gandi ho Veerbalika pahle sab k saamne aise jorr ka chaata maarti b ho aur sorry b bol rahi ho tum, mai beeji aur daadu se shikayat b krungi tumhari ki tumhe bahut joor se daante.. aisa koi karta hai kya bachi k sath.?

Mini:  ha thik hai jab beeji daadu aaye tab tum meri shikayt kr dena unse ab khus.. now u forgive me or not.?

Arya: Pahle tum muje ye btao ki tum Neil se shadi q nai kr sakti.? Vo toh tumhara hero h na, usne kitni help ki hai tumhari.!

Mini: Tumhe kis ne kaha ki vo mera hero hai..? Ha i agree usne hamari help ki hai kitni bar, but that doesn't mean na ki mai uss se shadi krloon.!  I explained you earlier na, as a good human being he help us that's his moral value his kind of nature, but iska ye matlab toh nahi h na Chutanki ki koi b aise aa k hamari help krdega toh mai us se jaa k shadi krloon..! Aur wese b tum bahut choti ho ye sab baten samjhane k liy, so let it be, aaj tumne ye bat boli hai, nxt time se aisa nai bologi tum promise me..

Arya: Excuse me.! mai koi choti bachi nahi hu.. muje sab samaj aata hai. 😐

Mini: Acha g..! So madam ko sab samaj aata hai.! So btao kya samjhi tum.? smiley2

Arya: yahi ki tumhe Neil se shadi krne se darr lagta hai.. tabhi tum shadi karne k liy mana kar rahi ho.!smiley36

Mini: smiley3 1st of all Chutanki, Mai tere Neil viel se nai darti hun.. aur muje abhi kisi se shadi vaadi karna b nai hai.. Shadi ka matlab b pata hai tumhe..? 

Arya: Ha pata hai, ladka ladki jab bade hojate hai toh ek dusre se shadi kr lete hai.. smiley37

Mini:  Chutanki, Shadi jo hoti h na most beautiful, fragile sa and precious bond hota h (remembering past of babes marriagesmiley6) aur sath hi vo huge responsibility b hoti h 2 persons k liy, ye samaj le tu ki ye very special wali friendship hoti hai between the two people, jo zindagi bhar sath rahne k kasme wade karte hai, happy nd sad moments har emotions share krte hai, life k up-downs tough situations mai ek sath ek dusre ko support krte hai, teammate ki tarah, jise hum apna life partner kahte hai aur ye life long commitment chalti hai jab tak ek dusre k sath loyal hai. Aur the most important thing jab dono ek dusre ko true love krte ho. Samjhi Chutanki..!smiley4

Arya: Ohh..! smiley13 Iska matlab tum Neil se love nai krti..? smiley22

Mini: G nai..! aur tumhe aisa q laga ki mai Neil ko pyar krti hu..? Tumhare dimag mai ye bat aai kese, ki muje aur Neil ko shadi kr lena chahiy.?

Arya: tum dono ek dusre ki itne care krte ho aur help b krte ho prblms mai so muje laga .. isliy mene bol dia, wese b Neil na muje bahut pasand h, aur pir tumhari shadi uss k sath hojati toh Neil hamare saath hi rhta, hamare ghr mai  ..smiley16smiley4smiley40

Mini: Q..? tumhare t.v. serial mai ladkiyan shadi kr k dusre ghar nai jaati h..? apne hi ghr rhti h.?smiley36

Arya: Matlab..?!

Mini: Matlab ye ki shadi kr k girl ko boy k ghr jana padhta h, apna khud ka ghr chod k, new life new responsibilities.! smiley12 (teasing mode) Haaye ..Chutanki tum muje mere ghar se bhejna chahti ho, kisi aur k sath..? tum khud krlogi pura manage? itni sari responsibilities, ye haweli b babes ka restaurant tumhare studies, games everything ..? aisa h toh bta do mai Australia hi chali jati hu uss k liye Neil se shadi karne ki kya jarurat.!? Mai wahan maje se apna fav8 job krungi travel photography kasmiley42 Bolo chali jao mai..? smiley2

Arya: (talking to herself) ye sab toh mene socha hi nahi mere dimag mai hi ni aaya.!smiley5 

Arya: (to mini) Ohh Veerbalika tum itni chotu si bachi par itni sari responsibilties daal k bhagna chah rahi ho.. 

Mini: Mai ni tum khud bhaga rahi thi, mai toh tumhe actual fact realise krwa rahi thi.. smiley2already tumhari Veerbalika itne saaare responsibilities sambhal rahi h, aur tum uski shadi krwane jaa rhi thi 1 aur new responsibility, ye na hopayga mujse.. Aur nahi Veerbalika apni pyari c shaitan Chutanki ko chod k kahin jaa sakti h, u knw y..? (Arya nods her head in no) (Mini smiles smiley4n says) Because You .. are the heartbeat... I'm the heart smiley27smiley31 she tightly hugs her Chutanki nd give kisses

Love uh Chutanki.. Veerbalika will never ever leave you alone.. (she closes her eyes nd reminisce the day when she was leaving for Australia)

Bg Music 

Aashiyaana mera saath tere hai na

Dhoondte teri gali mujhko ghar mila

Aab-o-daana mera haath tere hai na

Dhoondte tera Khuda mujhko Rab mila

Tu jo mila lo ho gaya main qaabil

Tu jo mila to ho gaya sab haasil haan!

Mushqil sahi aasaan hui manzil

Kyunki Tu.. Dhad.kan.. Main Dil…

Arya: Lovee u too Veerbalika..!  (wiped tears off mini) holding her own ears saying sorry to Veerbalika for not listing to her in the party.

Mini: Its ohk Chutanki, nd m sorry too.. 

Arya: Veerbalika tum sorry mat bolo, galti mene ki thi naa..

Mini: ok fine, chalo mai tumhari dress change krne mai help kr deti hu, pir tum Neil k pass jao aur use b sorry bologi. smiley14

Arya: Neil ko q..?

Mini: Tum usi se zidd kar rahi thi na shadi k liy ha bolne ko kah rahi thi na..? Socho use agar tumhari ye baat buri lagi hogi aur vo ye haweli chodh k chala gya toh..? restaurant b chodh dia toh..? Hume toh pir se new chef find krna padh jayga naa..! Aur pir tum toh use kitna miss krogi..! smiley6

Arya: nahi Neil kahin nai jana chahiy..! smiley36 mai jaldi se dress change kr k uss k pass jati hu use b sorry bol dungi pir vo kahin nai jayga..

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Arya Neil Scenes, Neil is sitting outside with the thela wala guy, Arya spots him dere, nd ran to him and stands in front. 

Neil: Arey choti madam aap yahan ..? all ohk..? ya pir se aapki veerbalika ne kuch kaha kya..? smiley5

Arya: (hugs Neil) nd says sorry Neil, plz tum ghar chodh k mat jana kahin.. 

Neil: Kisne kaha aapko mai ghr chodh k chala jaunga..?

Arya: Veerbalika aisa kah rahi thi, shyd tumhe meri 3rd wish k baare mai bahut bura.. aur tum chale gaye toh..?

Neil: ha baat toh buri lagi thi, but mai Choti madam ko chodh k kahin nai jaa rha.. smiley4

Arya: Yay yay yeah,, sachi Neil tum nai jaaoge na..? smiley41

Neil: han han sachi muchi..! smiley4

Neil: Choti madam, muje ek bat jan na hai aapse..! Aap k itne chote se dimag mai ye shadi ki bat aai kaha se..? Shadi ka matlab b pata hai aapko..?  It is the basic ingredient for the successful life of a person. 

Arya: Matlab..?!

Neil: Kese samjhao tumko ki kya matlab..? Isko aise samaj lo tum ki ye ek dish hai, mouthwatering and tasty sa dish. Ab iss dish k sath 3 chizen ho skti hai, 1st ye ki agar sare ingredients, masala stuff, food color, its aroma everything mixes up in equal proportions, toh bahut achi dish hojaygi. Dusri ye, ki agar usme thoda sa b namak jayda hogya, toh pir muje adjust ya compromise krna padega apni dish k sath ya somehow by manage krta aur teesri aur last bat ye ki, agar kuch b yani none of them mixes well properly with proper tym then I can't taste, I get raged over me for making such a dirty dish. (he was dreamingly explaining to Arya, but she left the place, poor girlsmiley37)

[ps. sorry if this explanation is not up to the marksmiley14]

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Balcony Scene, Arya was standing there looking at the bright shining twinkling stars. Mini comes with a glass of badam milk, founds Arya is not in a room and sees she is in the balcony, watching the sky and in deep thinking mode, she kept the glass in the side of the chair and went to her,  warmly hugs her from behind and asked her 

Mini: Chutanki yahan kya kar rahi h vo b bina sweater ya jacket pahne..? thand lag gai toh..? hmm.!

Arya: tum tension mat lo Veerbalika, I'm a strong girl muje kuch ni hoga, bas nind ni aarahi thi toh yahan aagai.. (sad face smiley13)

Mini: Mumma papa ki yaad aarahi h..? smiley9

Arya: she nods in yes, nd says pata hai Veerbalika last year na hum log new year k 1st day Mela ghumne gaye the, bahut maje kiye the wahan par

Mini: acha.. aur kya-2 kia tha..? sirf mauj masti hi ki thi ya kuch khaya b tha.?

Arya: han khaya b tha bahut saara aur bahut saare jhule mai beth k ghume b the.. 

Mini: (after some thinking) Agar arya ko pirse iss saal b mela mai ghume jana h toh ye milk finish krna padega..! smiley2  

Arya: Sachi Veerbalika tum muje lekar jaogi mele mai..? 

Mini: Ha Chutanki mai tuje le jaungi, but pahle ye milk finish krna hoga pir kal school se aane k bad hum chalenge.. now happy.. finish the milk fast.. smiley1

Arya: she was happily drinking the milk (mini admires her)smiley42 

Meanwhile,Neil was feeling very restless, he wants to talk to Mini abt the evening blunder, so he came out of the room was going upstairs.. 

In Balcony, Arya drank half glass of milk and give back to Mini,

Mini: Chutanki this is cheating han.. finist the full glass varna mai kahin nai lekr jaungi tumhe..

Arya: Veerbalika vo kya hai na, ye mene tumhare liye choda hai, agar tum kuch khaogi piogi ni, toh pir healthy kese banogi aur muje ghumane kese lekr jaogi..! smiley2

Mini: Tumhe kisne kaha ki mene kuch khaya pia ni h..? smiley5

Arya: Mene sunn lia tha jab tum preet didi se bat kr rhi thi tumhara mann ni h kuch khane ka.. so ab tum jaldi se ye half glass milk finish kro, varna pirse bimar padh jaogi aur (teasing way she say) pir wahi badi c injection lagwane padegi tumhe.. smiley36smiley37 she says this and ran, mini behind her catching her doing tickling.. smiley27  

Both the sisters happily enjoying their moment, Neil admired both of them standing near the stairs then went to sleep. smiley4

Bg Music

Rooth jaana tera

Maan jaana mera

Dhoondhte teri hansi

Mill gayi khushi

Raah hoon main teri

Rooh hai tu meri

Dhoondhte tere nishaan

Mill gayi khudi

Tu jo mila lo ho gaya main qaabil

Tu jo mila to ho gaya sab haasil haan!

Mushqil sahi aasaan hui manzil

Kyunki Tu.. Dhadkan.. Main Dil…

Edited by SuryaIshraholic - 4 years ago
Posted: 4 years ago

Guys I know I've drag this shadi explanation vry much..

even Neil ask the same que, after all MiNeil ki kuch habits same hojate h isiy I mention that que again.. but tried to explain it in chef-style..

 

I don't knw abt marriage thing nd especially how to teach children abt the beauty of marriage..! 

Google baba ki Jai ho yahan par bahut research krni padhi mujhko.. 😆kabhi socha ni tha yeah b krna pdega 🤣

Waiting for ur comments.

Posted: 4 years ago

Pehle toh ...

You deserve🌹🥀🌷🌷💐🌸🌸🌺🌺 and not 🍅🥚😆

Because it's just beautiful 👏


Typical MiYa moments

I could imagine the scene plus unke voices ke saath 👏

You have kept thier mannerisms ,style in each and ever frame .  i liked how you explained about shaadi and convo there was 👏 

Haye pyaare MiYa❤️

And beech beech mein  Miya ka comic , nautanki 😆 🤣perfect .

ArNe scene 

The way Neil explained🤣 

Bechari Arya 🤣  kuch samajhi nahi hogai🤣

Yet again you kept the style👏

I could imagine them 

And the last scene 

beautiful closure . typical MiYa 

Neil neeharna 


You should keep writing more 🤗

This was very good .

Beautiful

Aisa laga maine epiode dekh liya

Edited by zalima - 4 years ago
Posted: 4 years ago

Wow first os of season 2🤗

I still remember we both join  pb forum on same day

You asked others to write os for season 2 also 


But beautiful thing is that 

First os is written by you only 🤗


And wow it's amazing

Dialogues of everyone written so beautiful 

I am feeling like waching original episode 

You should keep  writing more 


Neil ka explanation  about marriage 🤣

Our  chutanki and  veerbalika ❤️❤️

Posted: 4 years ago

Originally posted by zalima


Pehle toh ...

You deserve🌹🥀🌷🌷💐🌸🌸🌺🌺 and not 🍅🥚😆

Because it's just beautiful 👏


Typical MiYa moments

I could imagine the scene plus unke voices ke saath 👏

You have kept thier mannerisms ,style in each and ever frame .  i liked how you explained about shaadi and convo there was 👏 

Haye pyaare MiYa❤️

And beech beech mein  Miya ka comic , nautanki 😆 🤣perfect .

ArNe scene 

The way Neil explained🤣 

Bechari Arya 🤣  kuch samajhi nahi hogai🤣

Yet again you kept the style👏

I could imagine them 

And the last scene 

beautiful closure . typical MiYa 

Neil neeharna 


You should keep writing more 🤗

This was very good .

Beautiful

Aisa laga maine epiode dekh liya


Even I feel same thing as you mentioned 


🌷🌹 flowers from my side also🤗

Typical miya moments 

Even I could imagine the scene with their  voices 

About marriage 👏


MiYa ka ruthna manana 

Closure me balcony scene 👏

Everything just amazing ❤️

Edited by Sushdvj - 4 years ago
Posted: 4 years ago

Wow its awesome 😳⭐️ I can imagine all the scenes, u right it beautifully!! But what happened after Neil came upstairs!! Is their a second part?? 

Posted: 4 years ago

It's very good .All the 3 characters were well written .You had kept the essence of the original characters .We could connect to it very easily.

Posted: 4 years ago

Loved yours one shot , you kept essence of all the ckt and loved your detailing.

Keep writing more 👏

Posted: 4 years ago

This os is fan--freaking--tastic

Keep writing please!!



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