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chap 2

To retrospect, i suppose they (as in Madhav and Devika) themselves are not aware of the harm they have done to tehir child, in a way its not sinister but still neglect is a crime of its own. As pareants they have failed.

What did Madhav mean by creating fuss? I dont get Devika really, maybe need to analyse her more. Madhav seems to be the type to blame also, i dont know but rather than pushing her away he should have made her undertsand. But i get it was probably uncommon at that time also they are form the village.

So marriage is set on the cards in the hopes of Devika returning, i really like the son's personality. He is very accomadating but what about the train girl, the girl within me is saying he'll marry his train girl or atleast so is the hope lol

oh wow so his wife is exactly liek him, i dont know how to feel. I mean i like it but he needed someone to protect him too even from his parents if need be, can his wife do that considering how cant like him cant voice her wish. But then again with them being so similar, atleast they understand each other without the needs of words

Thank you and looking forward to more


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Originally posted by: Twenty1st

I like the title, theres this longing that goes with it. Maybe i think of family and ties hence the feelings. Anyway good luck with this adventure, i suppose this is my first story of yours. Thank you once again for the PM.

Part 1

Set in 1950's hmmm, two questions arises: is the story set in that period or is it the story of Maan/Geet's parents. I see you havent named the young boy making it even more impossible to guess lol, that dont help my job.

The miscarriage was a hard blow to the parents, so its understandle but iddeially they should have pulled together for teh sake of tehir son, hence teh title namesake. He was just there, the heir but there was no emotional or physical ties there. He himself saw him as a extension of ther servants. I do feel for him, Madhav in a way was already embedding himself in his grwoing inductry, food catering i presumed from what i read. WHile the wife, shunned away fearing a heartbreak but in the end she's the mother, she should have been there, sorry they should have been there for tehir only child.

He has grown to be a man by himslef, i like that, but lets see the differing views and emotions. i hope they are not namesake parents like he is a namesake child, nor are the feelings withering away namelessly


Thank you...
yes you are reading my work for the first time...
Welcome aboard
You will get more options to guess...maybe you will have clarity in next update


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Originally posted by: Twenty1st

chap 2

To retrospect, i suppose they (as in Madhav and Devika) themselves are not aware of the harm they have done to tehir child, in a way its not sinister but still neglect is a crime of its own. As pareants they have failed.

What did Madhav mean by creating fuss? I dont get Devika really, maybe need to analyse her more. Madhav seems to be the type to blame also, i dont know but rather than pushing her away he should have made her undertsand. But i get it was probably uncommon at that time also they are form the village.

So marriage is set on the cards in the hopes of Devika returning, i really like the son's personality. He is very accomadating but what about the train girl, the girl within me is saying he'll marry his train girl or atleast so is the hope lol

oh wow so his wife is exactly liek him, i dont know how to feel. I mean i like it but he needed someone to protect him too even from his parents if need be, can his wife do that considering how cant like him cant voice her wish. But then again with them being so similar, atleast they understand each other without the needs of words

Thank you and looking forward to more



You may say that... let's see if they get to know in future


Just like husband she was ...
Let's see how she would protect him...
Wait for it...
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I know I am late But life becomes busy suddenly
And when you have festivals in the mid ...you get super busy
Anyways Updating today..
Anyone interested??
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Interested toh jyada nahin hoon.. Phir bhi padh loongi agar update dogi toh.. Comment bhi mil hi jaayega tumhaaritnext update se pahle 😆
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Waiting . Jaldi karo..ho sakta hain meri update bhi mil jaaye aaj
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Part 3


Time runs very fast, she was a newly wed but as she entered this home she become one among them. Her routine was getting clearer as the time ticked. how many people lived, what were their requirement at each time. she was getting all those details in her heart. Slowly but steadily she started to understand each and every requirement of the house members. Servants used to take care of everything and Devika used to give instructions but as she came in. She took the reins of the house, though it was Devika's order which she followed, the personal touch was what she added to everything.


As the time elapsed she was providing things even before they were asked for. She made sure the water was drawn out from the well for cooking, bathing, washing, cleaning. Keeping the hot water for bathing, Flowers for puja, vegetables for breakfast, lunch, snacks and dinner. In short she didn't wait for anyone to ask her a thing.


She did everything for everyone at home. Neither they appreciated her nor gave credit to the efforts she put in. Just like one thing didn't change, that was her mother in law's complaints. Whatever she did for her mother in law, there would be one of the other complaint or taunt with it. Even though she did as she was asked Devika would make sure to find a reason to taunt. Maybe another women in the house would take up her place had made her insecure.


But she was not the only one who could hurt her. There were many to point out. As things started to happen before hand, people start to expect more from her and also start taking you her granted. She became the salt of the house. Neither anyone noticed her nor her presence felt. She was quiet but millions of things she carried out in a jiffy. Her service oriented mind and endurance was something no one understood.


Her inherent nature to accept things the way they are had helped her in life. She didn't expect anything so never did she mind their words. She always took them as to mend her ways to please them. They were her elders and they knew what was right for the younger ones. That was her belief, which was instilled in her veins since birth.


She always looked forward for her husband return as that meant she got her dose of energy from him. Smiles, that too lots of smiles, with just his presence next to her. He did get her few petty gifts but those were just priceless for her. It pumped her spirits thereby carrying on her duty with easy. they acted as silver lining to her life.


25th October 1981


Today was no different from the day it was few decades ago, today also Madhav was digging a hole again in the hall with his walk and this time too the reason was Devika. Only difference was it wasn't Devika who was delivering but her daughter in law. He was scared if anything wrong happened, what else would he do to bring his wife back from the depths of sorrow.


He had enough pains already and prayed the almighty that let the happiness of this house return. As he prayed a new cry emerged out of the room inside, bringing the smiles on everyone face except Devika. She wouldn't care, already from past month she was having tough time managing the servants as many left owing to her temper.


Her DIL used to take the wrath and servants would have been grateful of her but now situation was different. She was asked for bed rest in the end days as the midwife was expecting some complications in her delivery. And following the birth of the baby, she was wondering what else held in future.


As she was still in her own thoughts, she heard her husband, Madhav ask the nurse to hand the baby first to Devika. She wondered why this sudden care for her and she didn't want to bound with that tender one. Before she could utter a thing she had the small one in her hand. Her mind told her heart not to surrender but then her hands against her will held the small one very carefully. Tears flew out of her eyes blocking her view to see her grandson, as she was still trembling with her new feelings.


Madhav said "Finally, we got our son back."


She starred in to his eyes to get confirmation of those words and as he kept on repeating the same, she finally bit by bit started to accept that it was indeed her son, who had returned. Nothing else registered in her mind.

Tears which were accumulated for years started to pour from her eyes. She became too emotional as she struggled to talk but finally said "My Ranjit is back."


She had weaved so many dreams to the extent that she had decided on the names too and how she would bring up her son. Of Course her dreams had been to take care of the whole family at that time. But as that broke she was shattered to no avail.


Even the baby cried along with her feeling the pain. Madhav tried to pick the baby from her as the midwife came to take the baby for the first feed. But Devika resisted it, and fearing her reactions he signalled the midwife to wait for a little bit more time.


However the baby was not in the mood to listen as it was very hungry.


Madhav taking the opportunity heart too cried as he witnessed his wife said "Devika, control yourself by that time let him get his fill his stomach.


That was it, she was back to her form as she ordered a glass of milk to be prepared for the baby. She would feed him but wouldn't let anyone take him away from her again.


Seeing the situation midwife got the milk from his mother and let the grandmother take care of the small baby. Anyways the mother was too tired after the delivery to take the responsibility.


Away from all but still in one corner a man was rejoicing for having a boy of his own. Worried for his wife, he had held his breath till he had heard the cry of the baby.


He was eager to take him in his hand but before he could pull himself to do the same, he had witnessed his parents getting emotional with the baby. Seeing them so much attached, he kept himself away.


Jeevana.



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Edited by Jeevana - 5 years ago
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Posted: 5 years ago
It's good to see that you opted for the BG of decades back.. issliye ye sab suit ho raha hai characters ko.. lalita pawas jaisi saas aur nirupa roy jaisi bahu😆
That DIL of madhav and Devika was so mature that she accepted everyone so easily.. Even after doing everything for the fsmily she was not able to please her MIL.. Saas jo hai ..istni asnaai se kaise pighlegi..😡
but her husband was her strength.. she could get her all spent energy back just looking at his smiling face.. He was not like his mother,,He was very soft towards her..though we hadn't seen them talking ..tumne seedhe bachha paida karwa diya bina ek bhi conversation dikhaaye😆
But what the hell.. Devika?
Is she real?
She is still crying over her dead son?
and now that small infant who just entered this world was being snatched by Devika?
She gave the name of his dead son to that new born without thinking once about baby's parents?
Devika's son..I feel for him now.. He so much wanted to hold his son in his arms but he could nt voice his heart and before that his son wa staken away by his mother..
JP
Iss devika ko please kuchh akaal de do

how can she do this to her son and DIL?
Poor DIL
how will she react when she will know the reality?
Mere Maan aur Geet... have some mercy on them JP😡
Edited by Ggorgeousqueen - 5 years ago
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Posted: 5 years ago
. Me first
But
Commnet ke liye Wait karna padega 😆
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Posted: 5 years ago
Nice
Devika is too rude
Even baby father not getting chance to take baby in his arms
Thanx for pm
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