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Posted: 6 years ago
Coffee Lover

Ashvin couldnt meet him eye to eye, he turned and walked away towards the biggest balcony, hands tucked in his pockets
Trisha was almost ready to "enter her world" shut the door and work on her research

Chirag had indeed visited at an unusual hour

She squirmed standing in the corridor leading to her bedroom

"Khaana khaaya?" he asked

She smiled for the first time in his house Ashvin noticed

Way way way way back there by the balcony... his eyes were really sharp

"I eat at 8" she said

"Can I get coffee?" "Konkan coffee?" Chirag smiled disarmingly

"I did not bring any coffee" she said sadly
Chirag was bummed he made her sad

"Umm.. how about you make the coffee this guy has in your own way?" he grinned

She walked into the big kitchen, and tried to find coffee powder
She couldnt bear to drink coffee so she wasnt drinking anything

There was nescafe instant and Bru instant where the cook had left it 

"Setlle ho gaye?" Chirag asked hoping she would talk

"I have only one bag" she said

"We should go shopping we can get more bags" he joked

Not clothes... just bags

She smiled again...

She made the coffee quietly as Chirag admired how gorgeous she looked

"Us din ek haath jala tha abhi dono?" he asked

"I dont know to cook. I cook means I burn myself" she said softly

"Main bhi KHA sakta hoon" he reassured

She laughed

"That also I can do" she said struggling to speak fluent Hindi like him

She poured his coffee out in a big mug and pushed it across the white quartz counter

"Umm.. how is everything?" he asked

She nodded and stopped

"Busy?" he asked trying to talk

"I am going to ullal" she said

"Oh?" Chirag was shocked

"why?"

"Umm.." she didnt answer

"I have never been to Ullal" he said

"Its very beautiful. The beach is the best" she said longingly

Chirag was cute, short broad shoulders, glasses with plump  cheeks, he looked affable

"Did you go everyday?" he asked

"Aanu... I mean my father has a restaurant OK?" she said

"OH? OK" Chirag teased

She realized he already knew all that and smiled sheepishly

"Its at the beach only" she waved her slender arms to prove it

"woww" he said
Not sure if he said that for the sea or for how mesmerized he was when she spoke

She told him about high and low tide and about the local festivals, and the popular words in Konkani

They talked for a good 47 minutes

"Will you bring Konkan coffee for me?" he asked leaving the kitchen

She nodded reluctantly... a piece of home? why? she thought bitterly😭
She followed Chirag out
Ashvin was watching TV he barely nodded to Ashvin and waved to her and left😆

"Is there any coffee leftover?" asked Ashvin😳 as she turned into her corridor without paying him a second look

She paused and turned "No" she said softly

And went back to her room shut and bolt it...




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Posted: 6 years ago
Iyer coffee served in a davara tumbler...now Konkan coffee and poor Ashwin receive a slap on his face for trying to reach out.
Lovely to read an update sipping over tea. Thank you Nisha for the updates...47 minute Coffee pe charcha was endearingly cute.
Who is the coffee Lover though?
Edited by moonwearer - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
Aaah..the buildup from my previous post..
.keep it up Chirag my boy !! You will do the needful unwittingly by asking for coffee, landing up at unearthly hours and waking up our sleeping,  reluctant warrior ðŸ˜Š
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Posted: 6 years ago
Chirag is mesmerised with Trisha
Can we set these two up ?? ðŸ¤£
Ashvin is a bechara...god knows what he is doing to himself.
Next pleaseee
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Posted: 6 years ago
Originally posted by: Ashu25

Chirag is mesmerised with Trisha

Can we set these two up ?? ðŸ¤£
Ashvin is a bechara...god knows what he is doing to himself.
Next pleaseee


Sone  do Nisha ko, yahan raat ke 12 baj rahe  hain, wahan one at night.  waise bole to Kal chhutti hai...sorry Nisha , but what to do, what you write , how you write Is mesmerizing and addictive, it's become a need. 
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Do Akele (not deewaane yet)  sheher mein, raat  mein aur dopahar mein, Abudaana dhoondhte hai, ek Ashiana dhoondte hain...two tortured  souls looking for comfort, it won't be long before they find each other. 
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Posted: 6 years ago

She smiled for the first time in his house Ashvin noticed
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Way way way way back there by the balcony... his eyes were really sharp
She followed Chirag out
Ashvin was watching TV he barely nodded to Ashvin and waved to her and leftLOL

"Is there any coffee leftover?" asked Ashvin
Embarrassed as she turned into her corridor without paying him a second look She paused and turned "No" she said softly And went back to her room shut and bolt it...


Hmmm ... do I see a green monster creaking out ? Or left out for coffee ...
😆Edited by jaschick - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
Me waiting for magic to happen 😳
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Posted: 6 years ago
The magic would indeed be  refrshingly new.
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Posted: 6 years ago

REWARDING FAILURE


"Yes, she must. She must know you dont take it easy when you feel slighted and you do extreme things" he said hanging up


Ashvin lay back on the white sectional outdoor sofa, yanked a half white half navy rectangle cushion from under his back and flung it across the balcony"


The old pop sure knows how to go for the jugular. 

The old pop sure knows how to deliver a crushing body blow

The old pop sure knows how to BEAT/ CHEAT A MISSION.


His grand pop has got a number on him and he's hitting on Ashvin"s nerve, the nerve  that's prone to extreme imbalance or fury on and off and he's delivering a body blow by saying 'for all your mom's blowing the trumpet of the changed man that  you are today and penance and stuff, you still are imbalanced and will be one forever'.

  

The young scion has to come up with new ways to get his exasperating old man off his back  ... to get his grandpop to react not as if it's a rain but a flood or a storm or a hurricane But one cannot escape the reality that THERE'S NO GAME TO BE WON OR LOST IF YOU DONT PLAY IT.




Nisha, this twist was truly nach. Neither is Ashvin R&b nor do I want to equate your third baby to a  Harlequin. This is your top  brand of spicy tadka. The writing keeps going notches higher and reading this chapter was such a delight and it's truly a REWARDING TRIUMPH. Just loved the update's nuances and its flow in terms of expression. Best wishes.😊





Edited by Errantnomad - 6 years ago