Indradhanush - Page 21

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Posted: 5 years ago
Most heartwarming moments of ID in this short journey so far,
Ironic that I still feel a certain kind of nostalgia.
Perhaps cos it's 9 /10 updates in two months or so.

Neel's last line of "then it's on my way" is one of the significant moments where when if Neel and SUV reflect , would go bk to this moment a few years down the line as one that's a catalyst or a shift in
Momentum to moving on . Small and random yet significant.

To go bk, I remember your post that said a little girl crying out aai kuthai was the single idea that inspired you to spin on it.
From that story concept or idea , to building it to be a awesome story premise , it's wonderful, the characters , plot all structuring out so beautifully.
Just like how you get to hear about in a rough diamond acquiring cut, symmetry and polish of top quality that lends to it's finest sparkle.

We have a fine cut in SoSy already .Build on Nisha. This is so good.
Edited by Errantnomad - 5 years ago
Posted: 5 years ago
Aadhya pulling out the iPad to give it to Nihaar and the little boy trying his best to keep the little girl happy. This is how open children are isn't it?. Sooo goood.

And not to miss mentioning Suv having an eye for Neel's looks and being self conscious about the inners she is wearing .
Neel is definitely Dapper Nisha in his style of dressing. I go bk to your describing him in a white shirt and a navy combo. Dapper... Surely Big smile
Posted: 5 years ago
Kalpana
THANK YOU
I thought, HOW would it be if they both started to fall in love without conflict. You know... its not something they want to do, he is still grieving
She has been betrayed, but how would it be if they were to fall in love?
She or he, both are devoid of arrogance
He is the top boss, but has no airs about it
Posted: 5 years ago
Originally posted by Nisha0604


Kalpana
THANK YOU
I thought, HOW would it be if they both started to fall in love without conflict. You know... its not something they want to do, he is still grieving
She has been betrayed, but how would it be if they were to fall in love?
She or he, both are devoid of arrogance
He is the top boss, but has no airs about it



This kind of love actually is the real life parallels that it would base itself on.
I love this. Most conflicts in marriage and life is actually later when one gets used to the other person's presence in their life . After which comes the willingness to work it out through the differences and build a life together, if one sees a purpose that way from there.

Everything that I read about Neel, I feel like I know him from the bk of my hand. He is a good man to be around for Suv.
And she for him. Embarrassed .

Posted: 5 years ago
Lovely update Nisha..and lovely story.  
While SoSy is an absolute addiction, I have to say Indradhanush is becoming one too...I kept looking for updates and then felt I shouldn't put too much pressure on you...LOL  You already have your hands full with a million things going on!  

Thank you!!
Posted: 5 years ago
Lovelyyy
One more!!!!
Posted: 5 years ago
Nisha, request to pls step on it here like in a home stretch.
Posted: 5 years ago
Fear of being lost & losing


A week passed by and Suvechha did not hear about the Trademax
copy she left on Neel's desk, the client called her thrice before she could call them back.
She "owned" everything creative, the budgetary, production and client coordination were not her responsibilities
It was like being saddled with Tai

A lying stealing pile of shit

She hated her Aai that very moment, her Aai's attempt to "protect" her from the world by making TAI her custodian
Suvechha smirked cynically
Asking the robber to hide the wealth came to mind
She was extremely afraid of leaving Aadhya alone with Tai for more than an hour

Press wala, fish market, Mother Dairy was fine

NOT any longer duration

She suspected Tai might lure Aadhya to the balcony and push her down

And send Suvi to jail

She got up, unable to think along those lines any longer

WHERE could she send her?
Tai hadnt said a WORD about the relatives she talked to al day long
Her phone was ALWAYS locked
She pretended not to have any "expenses" of her own by making her family call her.
Money went missing regularly
Better than losing the TV or the iron or camera

Suvi wandered down towards the lunch time hawkers at the corner of Barakhamba Rd

The juice wala, she wandered towards Super bazar along the bylanes

She noticed Neel walking towards her, carrying three or four bags, really heavy

"What a good husband" she thought

He paused by her

"How was lunch?" he asked

She noticed he had nicked himself on his chin

A flirtatious wife caused it? Suvi wondered

He immediately moved the bags to his left hand and felt the nick

"Subah jaldi thi" he said

"Yeh to achhi baat hai ladies ko shave nahi karna padta, warna abhi taq to main bachti nahi" she said encouragingly

He looked startled when she smiled

The full lower lip stretching like a strawberry being pulled from both sides

He felt something stir down below

He grunted

"Is ur daughter happy to go to school?" he asked

"Tamasha to ek athvada (one week), (she stumbled) "one week mein khabar hoyega" she finished in
 a Mumbai cabbie lingo


"Hafte mein pasand nahi aaya to badal to nahi sakte?" he smiled soulfully

"Barobar" she said soulfully

She cudnt help stare at his bags

"Nihar ko fruits pasand hain, to Super Bazar se lekar aaya, gaadi mein kharab ho jaayenge, must put it in a frig" he said

"Mujhe bhi jaana hai, main kabhi nahi gayi.." she said looking towards Super Bazar

He turned and looked at Super Bazar too

"Mujhe kho jaane ka dar hai" she said somberly
Unaware he was staring at her boldly

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
She should have spoken about Trademax, because by the time she came up, the "department admin" said there was the 4th call from them
She walked over to Payal to ask if she can fit her in on Neel's schedule for 15 minutes

Payal looked at her like she didnt even work at the agency, she walked over to Neel's door and looked, he was in a meeting with Gomez and a couple others
She returned to her office and called Trademax and promised to wrap up the decision making by the end of the week
Called the playschool to check on Aadhya

Scrolled to Varsha's number and felt it with her thumb
And set on the side

Picked it up again and felt the "Aai Baba" Contact
She felt a lump in her throat

When she was done for the day at 6, he rode the elevator with her
She noticed the 6 bags and smiled

He smiled back cheerfully and raised his right hand with the bags

"Main aneka vela bhoolti hoon" (many times)she had declared on their way up to the office after lunch hour


"Mujhe bhi yeh bimaari hai" he had laughed like a child displaying good teeth

She nodded
He walked behind her quickly

"U live in Trans Yamuna right?" he asked

"Tuesday (when he gave her a ride from Apeejay) se lekar aaj tak (today being Friday) nivasasthana nahi badlee hoon" she spoke broken Hindi and teased him

He smiled sheepishly

Mujhe, NOIDA real estate agent se milne jaana hai, I can drop u he said

She looked startled
Pehle yeh ghar par rakh doon, Nihar ko le lete hain then we can go"

She looked more surprised
"I meant I WILL DROP YOU on my WAY to NOIDA"

Her expression relaxed exponentially

He drove up to the gate of the bungalow in Nizamuddin
It was rusty and creaky, but a guard opened it
It looked like the unrenovated 1970s cousin amongst shiny NRI cousins on the street

"Main Tai aur Adhya se baat kar loon?" she said unwillingt o go up with him
He nodded and brought back Nihar in 10 minutes wearing, a headphone and holding his PS3

AND eating an apple
She got off the passenger seat

Nihar smiled shyly and said a Namaste and went to the back seat

"Where is the little girl?" he asked

"We are coming from work jaan" Neel said

Nihar had the SAME expression when sheepish

Neel offered her a bottle of water and apple
She nodded and accepted the apple

"Adhya ka favorite hai" she chuckled

He drove her to her complex behind Mother Dairy
30, 40, 50 something women wearing Nike and reebok knockoffs pretended to "walk" as they gosspied by the gate

Suvi got off politely, they didnt speak much since there was so much traffic
She didnt tell him to drive her to her play school all the way at the back of the society area towards Ghaziabad Rd

She would take a rickshaw she decided


"Was your wife happy to see the fruits?" she asked to make conversation

"She would have been... but she passed away a year ago" he said unable to meet her gaze for some reason

Suvi stood rooted to the spot, stunned.

When she didnt turn to go in to the society, a rickshaw wala who she hired frequently rang his bell and pedaled up to her
The ladies began to gossip about Suvi for the first time
Suvi stared at Neel's car as he made a U turn and merged into traffic going back towards Mother Dairy

Edited by Nisha0604 - 5 years ago

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