Posted: 8 years ago

Grey Sky, Grey Home


Dark clouds loomed in the sky

He walked underneath them on the empty road

The atmosphere was stll, with no signs of life, not even an unearthly cry

He carried on, undeterred, striding in his long black overcoat.


The sky rumbled, a nearby swing creaked

A chilly wind rose, unwelcomed by the ancient trees

The downpour began and rain into his hair, seeped

The perfect companion for an environment so bleached


A huge gate welcomed him into a land long forgotten

He stood outside it, inanimate, contemplating

Lifeless trees peered at him from inside, the shrubs beneath them rotten

The watery wind forced him inside filling his heart with despair.


The stone stairs, grimy, were slapped with his boots

The wooden door stood forlorn, holding the crumbling place

He grasped the knob, it broke and rolled away, revealing the creeper's slimy roots

With all his military strenght, the door was kicked down


The house reeked of mud and death

Like he had that day, firing at will, unaware of the same fate for him

And despite the grey sky, the thunderstorm and his family out of breath

In the split second, he was home.


And despite the emptiness and destruction in the city

His homecoming brought him satiety.

Edited by Rhapsody. - 8 years ago
Posted: 8 years ago
Beautiful Nishi.
So much depth and emotion in this.

Easily the best poetry, I've read on this forum. 

Wonderful writing.

Keep honing that talent. You've got something special. 
Posted: 8 years ago
Originally posted by Propinquity.


Beautiful Nishi.
So much depth and emotion in this.

Easily the best poetry, I've read on this forum. 

Wonderful writing.

Keep honing that talent. You've got something special. 

Thanks a ton! :)
Posted: 8 years ago
i Simply loved it nishi 👏

awesome work 👍🏼

but you seem really late in sending PMs 😆
Posted: 8 years ago
Beautifully written. Very deep, as your works always are. :)
Posted: 8 years ago
You write brilliantly well, Nishi! I had no idea you wrote so very well. One of the best poems I have read around, do keep writing. 
Posted: 8 years ago
Originally posted by --lavanya--


i Simply loved it nishi 👏

awesome work 👍🏼

but you seem really late in sending PMs 😆

I forgot to send for this. 😆

Thanks a lot though :)
Posted: 8 years ago
Reserved. 
Unreserved. 
 
And despite the emptiness and destruction in the city
His homecoming brought him satiety.

The atmosphere you created was awesome.. 

You have beautifully described,  his homecoming. 

A brilliant piece of work! 

Great work! 

Edited by --Ecstasy-- - 8 years ago
Posted: 8 years ago
Wow...beautiful poem 
The way you have penned it down is just amazing 👏
Keep writing and thanks a lot for the PM!
Posted: 8 years ago
Originally posted by bookworm-ALS--


Beautifully written. Very deep, as your works always are. :)

Hey, thanks a lot. 😳

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