Dear Nisha
As I started reading the Gulzar segment a few times , I started savouring the different aspects of your writing
The beautiful poetic elements:
her long braid swung to the front bringing with it a garden of scent... multiple strings vied for his attention..."Look at me" "Oh I am here too"
She reached for them and shoved em, "Shut up and do NOT look at him"
Her lashes tried to blanket her steaming cheeks
Your intricate detailing of everything she wore, we can visualize it as you describe it.
Loved your choice of Sungudi half saree
Your unbeatable sense of humour even in the most passionate of encounters,
This had me in splits:
"If u in as much as touch me, I am going to use Appa's umbrella and u will have to go home using the walking stick"
Your beautiful choice of songs.
Amazingly coincidentally, I was listening to Gulzar's playlist on youtube a day before and I could only think of II and R&B esp on my favourite, "Aap ki ankhon mein kuch" . I was thrilled to see it become a beautiful part of this passionate love story.
The breathtaking romantic encounters
the way you build up the momentum for every romantic encounter between these two. The witty dialogues , the tangible sexual tension and then their passionate "encounter".
Take a bow Nisha ! I have not enjoyed a story so much in a long time. πππ
Dear Nisha
As I started reading the Gulzar segment a few times , I started savouring the different aspects of your writing
The beautiful poetic elements:
her long braid swung to the front bringing with it a garden of scent... multiple strings vied for his attention..."Look at me" "Oh I am here too"
She reached for them and shoved em, "Shut up and do NOT look at him"
Her lashes tried to blanket her steaming cheeks
Your intricate detailing of everything she wore, we can visualize it as you describe it.
Loved your choice of Sungudi half saree
Your unbeatable sense of humour even in the most passionate of encounters,
This had me in splits:
"If u in as much as touch me, I am going to use Appa's umbrella and u will have to go home using the walking stick"
Your beautiful choice of songs.
Amazingly coincidentally, I was listening to Gulzar's playlist on youtube a day before and I could only think of II and R&B esp on my favourite, "Aap ki ankhon mein kuch" . I was thrilled to see it become a beautiful part of this passionate love story.
The breathtaking romantic encounters
the way you build up the momentum for every romantic encounter between these two. The witty dialogues , the tangible sexual tension and then their passionate "encounter".
Take a bow Nisha ! I have not enjoyed a story so much in a long time. πππ