~ Mann Basiya ~ A Drabble-ish - ParvatiRudra ThankYou+NewDrabble Pg4 - Page 4

Sona @mistyrains IF-Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

This is beautiful! I could picture every emotion flitting across her face, her disbelief, her contemplation , the concern in the end, amazing work! :)

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Radhika @YellowBoots Senior Member

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Posted: 10 years ago

Aha! This is lovely. I like the idea of a 'drabble', so much to ponder over and chew on, but with such few words.

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Sarah @P4rveen12 IF-Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

Welcome to the world of RR and congrats on writing your first piece on PaRud, I hope we get plenty more.

The Drabble was simply amazing and superb,

Love the way you wrote this from Paro's point of view, her emotions and thoughts were written and expressed beautifully.

I would loved to read a continuation especially with Paro applying the oil on him, it's okay I shall just imagine it in my head, lol.

Loved the Drabble, awesome writing.

Thanks for the PM xx

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BSRaizada @BSRaizada IF-Rockerz

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

Nice one Rae,
Ya it was so caring n at d same time sensuous too!

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shr1234 @shr1234 Senior Member

Posted: 10 years ago

Rae,

This is fantastic. With your writing, you beautifully portrayed the rugged character of Rudra Pratap Ranawat, yet him taking care of her. Her own conflict when it comes to his harsh ways or caring mind, her urgency to look after his safety. It's so vivid, I could visualise each moment you described.

For me, it was the characters you sketched in here as I am not much acquainted with them as shown on the screen. You built them so very well! I really enjoyed it despite having minimal idea of RR :)

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