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Posted: 10 years ago
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Lookie who's here?! It's Mugs!
Remember me ya bhool gaye humein itne jaldi?
Oh well. Inspiration struck me, and it seemed on the lines of KiSha, so I wrote it.
AU drabble. KD's POV.
Here we go, voila!

***

Stranger


The changing beats of the music, the twists and turns, the rustle of dresses, and there she was- in my arms.

I'd recognize her anywhere, with or without the feather mask she had on...

She smiled what would have been her most winning smile at me, except that it wasn't, for it didn't reach her eyes.


When did all the fire turn colder?


Her eyes which seemed to sparkle when they looked at me- with mirth, happiness, love, lust, whatever- were blank...


When did your heart start to beat slower?


I pulled her close, her chest to mine, but the gasp I expected from her at our proximity, never came. Neither did the pumping of her accelerated heartbeat...


My whole memory of me in love's gone so far from me, it's not fair


Then again, as I put a little distance between us, I felt no pang of sadness. I felt no loss, no emptiness that I expected myself to feel without her closeness...


And I can feel it almost start to change


The air around us was cold, or seemed so to me. The heat I always felt around her, especially when we danced, was missing. So was the tinge of pink on her cheeks and the smirk on my face...


But it just hurts too much, I let it go away


The realization stabbed me in my heart, cold and merciless. We were no longer in love with each other. The beats changed again as I twirled her, and her hand slipped out of mine...


No we' anymore


She never looked back even once at me as she fell into the embrace of her new partner. She was his till the beats changed again and it was time to exchange partners once more.

I looked away, turning my attention to my new partner instead.

After all, we were no longer in love...


She's a stranger that I used to know...


***

Okai. So yeah, this was it.
Short and not really making much sense... but I don't know. Happens.
Lyrics used were of Amnesia by Justin Timberlake.
Damn, I'm in love with that song!! :O

Anyway, that will be all. Mind you, this doesn't mean that I'm back to watching TBP. Just wrote it coz I felt like it.

Thank you for bothering to read.

Indebted,
Mugs.

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Posted: 10 years ago
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OMG!!! KIDDO!!!
Why does it always happens that our thot processes match I was thinking of writing a KiSha Breakup OS...or rather a perfect closure to their...not so perfect relationship n bam... I read ur OS!!
So much depth...no much hurt ...so much pain... and yet a perfect closure...
I loved it Kiddo...n I mean it
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Serendipity-

OMG!!! KIDDO!!!
Why does it always happens that our thot processes match I was thinking of writing a KiSha Breakup OS...or rather a perfect closure to their...not so perfect relationship n bam... I read ur OS!!
So much depth...no much hurt ...so much pain... and yet a perfect closure...
I loved it Kiddo...n I mean it


Radsy!! 🤗
Thankyou!! <3
I'm so glad you liked this! :D

And yeah, our thought processes do match. :P
Do write yours. I'll read. :)

Love,
Mugs.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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res
*unres*
Mugsy! 🤗
You're finally back to writing. :D
Well, you did tell me but I'm still surprised. 😆
Coming to the OS,


To begin with, the title when I saw it was intriguing because one word holds a lot of meaning and to see Stranger being used on KiSha, I was kinda amazed. And yes, I could tell this is going to be one of your better works by the title. 😆
I loved the transition from his recognizing her with the mask on to him being amazed at her expressions or rather her being expressionless and then them feeling numb even at after their proximity and distance too and finally the realization of being no more in love with each other and then they move on, in this case to their respective dance partners.
The choice of words conveyed the perfect emotion at every part, be it regret, confusion, realization, each and every thing was depicted perfectly!
This has got be my favorite sentence,
"Then again, as I put a little distance between us, I felt no pang of sadness. I felt no loss, no emptiness that I expected myself to feel without her closeness..."
This is one of your best OS'es according to me, maybe because I'm sadistic or maybe because this work is a piece of art!
I fall short of words whenever I comment on your OS'es because it is MIND-NUMBING, though I wouldn't say it is perfection since the saying goes, 'Nobody's Perfect' but I can say, you're getting there. ;)
This break has surely improved your quality of writing! 😆


P.S. I loved the song!
P.P.S Damn, I'm sadistic. 😆
P.P.P.S I miss your long A/Ns! 😆
Well, I'm done. I hope my comment made sense.


Love,
Ananya or as you know me, kid/kiddo 😆
Edited by ARandKJFan - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Mugziee. <3
Where were you? Remember me. I'm suma.
I loved this os soo much OMG! Such a amazing os.
How do you write these? :o Anyways. why did u leave this forum missed you like hell.
Lovely os, :D
Love, suma. ❤️
Missed u. 🥺
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Infinity-

Mugziee. <3

Where were you? Remember me. I'm suma.
I loved this os soo much OMG! Such a amazing os.
How do you write these? :o Anyways. why did u leave this forum missed you like hell.
Lovely os, :D
Love, suma. ❤️
Missed u. 🥺


Hey Suma!
Changed your username? :O
Thank you! <3

Arre, just felt like it so I wrote it.
And no, I'm not back yaar.
Not interested in TBP anymore.
I watch Paanch now. :)
You tried it?
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I loved this os soo much

Such a amazing os.

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Mugsy!!! God this is <3 <3 So angst filled so...
Mein ACTUALLY speechless ho gayi. I hate you😳
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: ARandKJFan

res

*unres*
Mugsy! 🤗
You're finally back to writing. :D
Well, you did tell me but I'm still surprised. 😆 When I said I'm thinking of getting back to fanfiction, I didn't mean KiSha. :P This one just... happened.
Coming to the OS,


To begin with, the title when I saw it was intriguing because one word holds a lot of meaning and to see Stranger being used on KiSha, I was kinda amazed. And yes, I could tell this is going to be one of your better works by the title. 😆 I was kinda confused over the title. It should relate to the OS, and yet, not give away anything of the actual content, either. So I decided on keeping the word "stranger" from the lyrics.
Then again, you know my prowess when it comes to titles. ;) :P
I loved the transition from his recognizing her with the mask on to him being amazed at her expressions or rather her being expressionless and then them feeling numb even at after their proximity and distance too and finally the realization of being no more in love with each other and then they move on, in this case to their respective dance partners. Drabbles are hard. They're bloody hard! Coz you can't stretch them to more than 500 words. You have to be precise and every single of the few words has to convey every little thing that you want to!
The choice of words conveyed the perfect emotion at every part, be it regret, confusion, realization, each and every thing was depicted perfectly! Thank you! <3
This has got be my favorite sentence,
"Then again, as I put a little distance between us, I felt no pang of sadness. I felt no loss, no emptiness that I expected myself to feel without her closeness..."
This is one of your best OS'es according to me, maybe because I'm sadistic or maybe because this work is a piece of art! Am I rubbing off my sadism on you or what, kid?
I fall short of words whenever I comment on your OS'es because it is MIND-NUMBING, though I wouldn't say it is perfection since the saying goes, 'Nobody's Perfect' but I can say, you're getting there. ;) Flattery. It'll get you everywhere, darling! Always remember that. Be subtle. Don't sugercoat. Don't make it sound like you're trying to flatter someone. Drop it like a normal statement. And yeah, that's my advice to you. ;)
This break has surely improved your quality of writing! 😆 Aaahh!! JUST what I waned to hear! That I'm improved!


P.S. I loved the song! I know, right?! <3
P.P.S Damn, I'm sadistic. 😆
P.P.P.S I miss your long A/Ns! 😆 Aww, I miss them too! :/
Well, I'm done. I hope my comment made sense. Yes, yes it did.


Love,
Ananya or as you know me, kid/kiddo 😆

Haha, thanks kid! :*
Love ya!

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: ..DamonCrazy..

Mugsy!!! God this is <3 <3 So angst filled so...

Mein ACTUALLY speechless ho gayi. I hate you😳


Shazziee! :*

Thank you! <3

But you hate me? Whhhyyy?? :/
Hum depress ho gaye! :/
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