OS: The other shoulder - Page 2

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Posted: 8 years ago
you did again! awesome.
Posted: 8 years ago
I am so glad I stumbled upon this one shot. The character of Lavanya always held a soft place in my heart, perhaps more than Khushi ever did. In the beginning I hated her because she was cruel with her words and dumb to a certain extent. However, the transformation that took place in her was comendable. The way she grew as a person in that little time she spent at RM made her journey much more connectable. Her past was never shown but it felt as if something happened in her life which may have changed the way she was. Like someone pointed out, Arnav got Khushi but he lost Lavanya. And when he broke up I thought about it...maybe Lavanya and Arnav would have been able to work out. She had evolved and could have been his companion throughout his life if Khushi hadn't been there.

Coming to the OS, I loved  it. Your vocabulary is versatile and far-fetched, making the read more enjoyable. The way you captured Lavanya's thoughts and her essence was just brilliance. The little hints you used through out, like the mention of Khushi's bag holding a lot of weight, was very well thought out. The last part was my favourite with Lavanya's conclusion on the dilemma. An amazing OS.
Edited by -3raser- - 8 years ago
Posted: 8 years ago
Nicely done, you reall wrote the feelings and thoughts of Lavanya,  she loved and lost but exited gracefully. She observed everything so well.
Posted: 8 years ago
Utterly brilliant! This is the first Lavanya piece that held me rivetted to the end.
Posted: 8 years ago
The transformation of Lavanya & the improbability of it all in the end...a journey in itself and beautifully illustrated by you, RB. Sheer brilliance!  

& Its always interesting, and different to read about a character that perhaps has been explored so little...your mere words, and your depiction of her thoughts makes this read even more vivid, and enjoyable!
Edited by nyxx - 8 years ago
Posted: 8 years ago
That was a beautiful piece of writing RB. Your words add depth to almost anything...hence I'm not surprised you made Lavanya seem more poignant and thoughtful than she ever was in that show. 

You voiced the thoughts of a modern, educated, in many ways a vain girl who came to value friendship beyond anything else in a touching fashion that is so you. 

To tell you the truth, for me it is your writing that added an extra dimension to this character, than the charcater itself that was presented on the show. I say this because they made her out to be a bimbo who didn't think beyond ways of  clinging on to Arnav. Vanity I could understand because we all are in our own ways (be it physical, emotional or intellectual) but ignorance or the pretense of it I cannot.

It is the thought process of a human that differentiates people. But there are people in this world who do not think too much. They merely act. I'm trying my best to not generalize here.  I'm also trying my best to not judge those who give less time for their thoughts than necessary. It is merely an observation and I know I maybe totally off in my approach.

Once again, brilliant writing Thumbs Up
Edited by AquaSandhya - 8 years ago
Posted: 8 years ago
Thank you for the PM - I almost missed this and that would have been a crime!
How many people actually strive to have an identity, whether consciously or otherwise? Or even change that identity by our 'tastes' for music, food, fashion, friends, boyfriends etc etc? How many people find that surety of their identity fly out of the window, particularly if they aren't sure at all (deep down) of what they are, when a guy or gal enters the equation.

The way you described Lavanya making Arnav the pseudo-centre of her universe was so real. The way she recognized that Khushi and Arnav were a certainty and she stepped aside, instead of going down another route was admirable - you described her thought process in such a believable way.

If there's one thing I loved about Lavanya's character despite the beginning, is the way she was woman enough and sensible enough to not pursue a man as broken as Arnav, when it became clear it wouldn't work out. As I see it, Arnav was the broody aberration in Lavanya's life; she deserved someone who wouldn't see her as second best.
Posted: 8 years ago
La was what she was and never pretended to be someone else, except maybe when she tried to be the daughter in law that the Raizadas were craving.  She was a real person who wore her emotions naturally unlike Kushi the ever suffering heroine.  I think this is why many liked La over Kushi, because she was a real person who did see the goodness in Kushi when they became friends and who had the grace to cut her losses in a relationship that was not meant to be.  She knew she deserved better and had the guts to end the relationship and moved on in search of the better.  I am sure she found it too.  The truth of the matter is no one has to change who they are to be accepted in a relationship.  She bent over backwards and realized it was not enough and like the modern girl that she was, she ended it.  You captured her spirit beautifully!

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