KR OS- MINE...ONLY MINE

Posted: 10 years ago

hey guysss...

m here with a os...

M nahi likhti, but one day kisi ne meri naam ki supaari dedi, and un hone mujhe bahut dhamakaya...and then kanchi and sunil bhai requested for it...maine uss din aap dono ko mana ker diya tha,but then i wrote one...

so, mai yeh OS leke aayi hu...i really dont knw kaisa hai.., read kerne mai kya jaata..give it a try...and read, fir kaisa hai batana...

So,here is the OS...

It was a beautiful morning. everyone in the college were busy, some students were chatting with their friends, some were just roaming here and there. Our  gang was present in the Rehersal  hall.

They were discussing something, no...actually 2 people were fighting, and the rest of them were first staring at them and then at each other with their hands on their head..(confused ki koun hai yeh 2 people joh itni buri tarah jhagad rahe hai??????...wait  baccho wait, thodi der mai khud hi pata chal jayega.)

Person1:-no...hum aaphke farm house nahi jayenge.

Person2:-kyu mere farm house mai koi bhoot hai joh tumhe kha jayege???...

Person1:-haan hai...hum aaphke nahi swayum ke farm house jayenge.  . . .

Person2:-nahi  jayenge..

Person1:-jaayenge...

Person2:-no

Person1:-yes

Person2:no

Person1:-yes

While the 2 people were continuing their  fight, slowly our rest of the gang came out. while  walking in the corridor vicky said.

Vicky:- guyyzz...yeh dono  vaapas shuru ho gayye...

Nil:-yaar in dono ka kuch nahi ho sakta...

Vicky:-in dono ko toh buss ek chotta sa reason chahiye,and fir yeh dono shuru ho jaate hai.

Neha:-right telling babu you are,pata nahi yeh sab kab stop hoing. neha toh tensioning.

Swayum:-guyys.tum log itna kyu soch rahe ho??,look at the positive side. they r back to normal. Toh we should be happy for them..voh dono normal ho gayye hai,jaise phele ladte the vaapas waise hi lad rahe hai...

Sharon:-i  agree with swayum, tumne dekha our rey is back, kriya ke jaane ke baad voh kitna tutt gaya tha, only humare liye voh ek fake smile apne face pe paste kerke  ghumta tha. but from last 1 month sab kuch change ho gaya hai..he is back,our old rey is back..

Swayum:-all thanks to kriya...srif uski hi vajah se we got our old rey back.(confussed?????wait abhi pata chal jayega.)

All:- yeah...

Vishakha:-but guyys  woh dono buhut zada ladte hai, and see abhi bhi lad hi rahe hai.yaar pata nahi rey aur kriya ki yeh ladaii ka the end kab hoga???...

(yes guyys,the 2 people who were fighting in rehersal hall were non other than our KRIYAANSH..

Confussed ki yeh sab kaise hua?????so let me tell you...after pre-valantine incident kriya and her mom went back to dehradhun.kriya used to cry all night and day..she stopped talking to every one,she just talked to her mom that to only- yes mom,no mom,ok mom etc etc...thats it nothing else

Her mom saw difference in kriya's behaviour. she got hurt seeing her like this,so she insisted  kriya to join college.after a hell lot of requests kriya joined college..days and months passed but there was no change in her behaviour.. 1 mid night kriya was trying to sleep but sleep was miles away from her,she just got up and started crying very badly.she remembered everything which happened in pre-valentine day and started crying like hell. Just then door got open and her mom entered and saw kriya crying...and fir,

Kriya ki mom ne kriya ko console kiya and apolozise bhi kiya,fir apna promise vaapas le liya and kriya ko vaapas apne dil dosti dance ke paas jaane ko bola.kriya was first shocked and then hugged her mom tightly as possible and thanked her.fir next din kriya vaapas Mumbai apne dil dosti and dance ke paas aa gai.kriya ki mom ne dehradhun se hi st. Louis ke principal se baat kerke kriya ka re-admission kerva diya.and next day kriya came to college..

It was beautiful morning,our gang was present in the atrium including taani and shivam.

{IMPORTANT NOTE:-guyys yaha pe sharon and vishakha ne just 1 week phele hi college join kiya hai. And swaron and others are official couple. Rey LOVES only and only KRIYA and was hurt deep inside in his heart but  always carried a fake smile on his face. Shivam yaha pe achha hai.and SHITAA ARE DEEPLY IN LOVE WITH EACH OTHER. Note khatam back to story.}

Every one was having a different feeling but they just ignored it. Rey was feeling really restless and kept thinking about the different feeling he was having...everyone was busy talking to each other when suddenly rinni screamed

Rinni:-OMG!!!!!!!...

Everyone stooped talking and looked at rinni highly confused with her sudden change in the behaviour.

Simmi said:-what happened rinni.why did u screamed????????

To which rinni just pointed her finger towards the entrance.every one looked at the entrance and were just rooted to the core.they all were just shocked to see the sight infront of them.

Their  at the entance stood our diva kriya wearing  thin starped baby pink colour frock which ended just 2 inch above her knees and a pair of black colour high heels giving the perfect example of  combination of CUTE+HOT at the same time..

The gang was totally in the shocked state. Neha was the first one to come out from  the shocked state and within few seconds she was found hugging her best friend whom she missed the most in these months,followed by Vishakha, bharat, amar, simmi , rinni, nilesh and Vicky. They gave her a bone crashing hug  to kriya and she equally responded to it..

Then Sharon came forward and gave kriya a tight hug,every one present there was hell shocked including kriya by this move of Sharon.and then kriya also responded the hug.while hugging kriya Sharon said:-m really happy that you r back...welcome back kriya...i really missed you.

To which kriya said:-me too...

After coming back from the hug Sharon saw the confused face of the gang and what???...

Rinni:-guyyys maine joh dekha woh sapna tha ya sach?????...

Shorn:-rinni tumne joh dekha woh sach tha...i really missed her a lottt...woh kehte hain na ek insaan ki importance hume usske jaane ke baad hi pata chalti hai,mere sath bhi wohi hua,i really missed her...to which every 1 just smiled..

Fir kriya swayum ke pass gayi but voh bhavv khaane laga,then kriya ne use sorry bola with teary eyes,and jab swayum ne apni bestie ko rote hue dekha to he just hugged her tightly as possible.and kriya just started mumering sorry..fir kriya ne bhi usse tight hug diya...then they pulled back...then kriya rey ke pass gayyi...

Kriya to rey:-rey..voh...m so...

But before she could complete her sentence rey just walked off from there..actually he was totally numb seeing her back,he was totally happy but also hurt at the same time..he didn't know what to do?how to react?..and when kriya came to him he just walked off from there...

She gave a weak smile to the gang.swayum just hugged her and comforted her and said:-give him some time kriya...to which she just smiled whole heartedly.

After that swayum introduced her with taani and told about shivam and then every 1 left to the canteen.and fir sabne kriya se usske jaane ki vajah puchi and ussne sabko sab sach bata diya...and by the end of the story all were in tears..they had a group hug..but some 1 was missing ,kriya was hurt,so she just excused from there and started walking in the corridor when a strong muscular hand pulled her in the fire-exit...[no price of guessing,it was our hero rey.]

she had closed her eyes then she heard him calling:-kriya..to which she just opened her eyes and hugged rey tightly..at first rey was confused but then he also hugged her...

They stayed in that position for a long time and then  he heard kriya sobbing...he pulled back from the hug and asked her why was she crying to which she said:-

Kriya:-rey...m sorry,mujhe pata hai ki maine aapko bahut hurt kiya hai,plss rey mujhe maaf kerdo..mujhe aisa nahi kerna chaheye tha.mujhe aapko sab sach bata dena chahiye tha,but rey ...plss mujhe maaf kedo plsss...plss rey m really sorry..really really very sorry...

She was just continuously blabbering and our hero was just trying to speak.

Rey:-kri...sunno...its...arrreee...meri baa...

But our diva was not at all letting him speak...at last our rey became highly irritated and pinned her to the wall and said:-

Rey:-u are such a BAATCUTTER...

First kriya was fully shocked and when she heard him saying "BAATCUTTER" she just smiled..and said:-

Kriya:-rey woh m...

But this time rey didn't let her speak and put his finger on her lips and said:- ssshhh...

And said:-

Rey:-kriya its okk...maine sab sunn liya...{yes guys jab gang kriya ke saath canteen mein thi tab rey bhi vahi tha and ussne sab kuch sunn liya tha...and he was very happy} its totally fine...

And then woh dono stairs pe baithe and kriya said:-rey kyu naa hum sab kuch vaapas shuru se start kare a fresh start????...

And then she got up and rey also got up.

She just forwarded her hand and said:-So Mr.Reyaansh Singhania..will you be my friend?????...

Rey was really happy after hearing it,he  was just going to shake hand with her when an idea stuck in his head and he just walked off from there leaving a totally confused kriya behind..

When he reached near the door,he just turned and said:-[with full attitude]TUMHE REYAANSH SINGHANIA KI DOSTI INTI EASILY NAHI MILLEGI...tumhe ek new start chaahiye naa,okk so lets start from the beggenig...and he just walked away...

Kriya's jaw just droped on the ground when she heard that...and then she started fuming and said:-

Main hi jhalli thi aur humesha rahungi...yaha mai unse dosti kerna chahti hu aur voh mujhe attitude dikha ke challe gayye...thik hai Mr. REYAANSH SINGHANIA,KRIYA GHAI bhi abb aapke piche-piche nahi aayegi...

And then she left from there.

Aur fir shuru ho gayyi inki cat and mouse vaali ladaayi, they both know that they both love each other a lott but were not ready to confess and were waiting for the other one to confess it first.

Days passed and inki laddayin badhti hi reh gayyi,yeh dono chotte baccho ki tarah chotti-chotti baato pe ladna shuru ker dete the...jab milte the buss ladte rehte and ek dusre ko deathly glares dete rehte...inke beech baatein kam and ladai jaada hoti thi.

First the gang was shocked to see them like this but later they got used to it...

AND NOW BACK TO PRESENT)

Simmi:-but guys inka kuch zada nahi ho gaya...i mean i know aaj 31th night hai.and voh log is liye lad rahe hai aaj ki aaj party kisike ghar pe hogi..i mean seriously...inti chotti si baat pe...

Bharat:-haa yaar...apun ka toh bejha hi udd gaya hai,inki ladai dekh ker...yaar party chahe rey ke farm house  ho yaa swayum ke kya farq padhta hai..enjoy toh hume hi kerna hai na..toh itni chotti si baat pe ladd baithe yeh dono...

While these guys were continuing there talk lets have a look in the rehrsal hall.in the rehersal hall our kriyaansh were still fighting.(NOTE:- person1 was kriya and person2 was rey.)

Kriya:-rey dekhiye...(cut of by rey)

Rey:-kya kriya????

(while rey was saying all this he was slowly moving forward and kriya backward)

Kriya:-voh...

Rey:-haan bolo kriya...

Kriya:-woh..mai...(and kriya hit the wall.then rey moved forward,and our diva was literally crushed b/t rey and wall)

Rey:-toh tum mere farm house party kerne nahi chalogi?????...(and stared moving towards her face )

Kriya:-woh...nahi...haa...buss...mai...(she was totally stammering while saying all this and rey was literally laughing silently seeing kriya in this state but he was controlling his laughter )

Rey:-toh tum chalogi mere farm house?????(inching forward towards her lips)

Kriya:-hmmm...(she closed her eyes)
Rey was really happy because she said yes and seeing his effect on kriya...afterfew secs when she came back to her senses she opened her eyes and saw him smirking. Then she realised what she had said and pushed him with all her strength..he balanced himself and saw her fuming.she was going to say somthing when they heard a voice behind them.

Voice:-guyys ho gaya tum logo ka????...

They both turned backwards to see from where the voice came,and they saw the whole gang standing there totally irritated with their behaviour.

They swayum came forward and said:-so decided ki party ke liye jaha rahe hai???...

Kriyaansh look at each other and then and then rey said:-mere farm house pe.looking at kriya with a big smirk on his face and kriya giving him deathly glare.

Amar:-so finally decided ki hum sab rey ke farm house pe aaj sham party ke liye jaa rahe hai...

All( except kriyaansh):-yeahhh...

Then sab ghar chale gayye and they decided to meet at rey's farm house at 8:00 pm.

At night...

Every one reached at the party except our diva...

Rey was already present and one by one all couples came..

Gang:-hi rey...

Rey:-hi guys...

Rey kept looking at the entrance...swayum saw this and asked vishakha about kriya...when rey heard the word kriya he automatically dropped his ears in the conversation.

Swayum:-vishakha where is kriya?????...abhi tak nahi aayi voh?????

Vishakha:-i don't know dude...maine  kriya ko kaha tha ki hum ek saath chalte hai but you know na voh kaisi hai...she said ki voh khud aajayegi...but,pata nahi abhi tak kyu nahi ayyi...

A voice from there back:-hi guys...kiski baatein ker rahe ho????...

All turned back to see who called them and were just astonished to see the beauty in front of them...

There stood our diva wearing a black thin strapped shimmering frock which  just ended 1 inch above knees.and a thin silver chain with a heart shaped locket with sophisticated ear rings and a diamond bracelet on her and a black 6 inch pencil hil sandel completing her look.

All Girls went to kriya and started praising her whie our boys werE  just staring at her AND ONE BY ONE SAID

B:-BEAUTIFUL

Amar:-SIZZLING

Swayum:-HOT

Nil:-STUNNING

Vicky:-SE...SUNDAR...HAAN...SUN...SUNDAR LAG RAHI HAI KRIYA..

All the boys looked at Vicky as they were knowing he was going to say SEXY but why did he changed his words and why was he stammering..they saw Vicky constantly staring at something,when they followed hiz gaze they all gulped hard..they saw a highly fuming rey standing there with red face and shooting DEATHLY GLARES to all of them..

Rey was totally stunned to see kriya and was totally lost in her world, but he came back to his senses when boys were commenting on her he was highly fuming and when Vicky was going to say say he just throwed highly deathly glares on him.

To save the moment all the girls along with kriya came to boys.

Kriya-hii boys...with a smile...

All boys(except rey):- hii kriya...tum bahut sundar lag rahi hoo..haan bahut..bahut sundar.lag rahi hoon...

Kriya smiled and said thanks..then she looked at rey and said hii to him and was waiting for his reply but he was lost in her that he could't  say anyting...swayum who was standing near to him wittnesed whole scene and elbowed rey making him coming out of dream..he saw kriya looking at him he opened his mouth to say something when shivam and taani joined them and said hii guys...

All looked at them and said hiii...

Shivam:- hii girls...u look realy very pretty...and woowww kriya u look realy HOTT!!!!!...(REMEMBER SHIVAM YAHA ACHHA HAI AND SAB BAHUT ACCHE FRIENDS HAI)

Kriya just smiled and said thanks...

Rey saw all this and was fuming to hell...

Sharon:-guysss chalee ander yaa new year yahi  banana hai?????

All went  inside and setteled on the couch and started chit-chatting...Party was full on swing...some were chit-chatting some were dancing and some were near the drink couter...drinking...(non-alcoholic drinks thi)...

Soon the dj came to the stage and said

Dj:- guyysss...guyysss...guyysss...hope you all are enjoying the party...

All:-yeah...(screaming)

Dj:-so lets pay a game...what say guys???...

All:-yea...

Dj:-okhh...okhh...before we start the game..plss...all the girl stand one side and boys the other side...

All did it..all the boys were standing one side and opposite to them were standing all the girls..our dearest gang  was also standing there.

Dj:-so...the game is...the lights will be off and 2 spot light will move around and will stop on 2 person..1 girl and 1 boy...the couple under the spot light have to come on the stage and then he has to pick 1 chit from this bowl(he showed them the a bowl full of chits) ..there are dance forms written on the chit and the couple has to perform the dance form witten on it...so guys ready?????...

Alll:-screamed...yeah...

Dj:-okkkhhh hen...lights off pls...

Then the spot light move around and the 1st couple were NILESH AND SIMMI...

They got cha cha cha...and they danced same dance on charity event on tum se milli nazar to asar hua hai aaj ye dil pe...

Next the spot light came on bharat and vishakha...they did some hip-hopp...

Next were neha and Vicky...they got bollywood..they danced same as they danced in diwali special...on mai raste se jaa raha tha...

Next were rinni and amar they also dance.(koi bhi dance soch lo)

Next were swaron..they got TANGO...same wala dance joh dono ne rehersal hall mein kiya tha...

Then they ended it in a beautiful pose,getting a loud cheering and clapping from everyone.

Next,

The spot light came on kriya,everyone hooted for it,and then the other spot light came upon rey...he just smiled wide...but the spot passed by him and stopped on ...on... NON OTHER THaN SHIVAM...everyone hooted loudly...shivam came forward and placed his hand in front of kriya ...she looked  at his hand then at rey, rey saw this and was fuming and cursing his faith and when he saw kriya looking at him he just turned his face other side..kriya saw this and fumed and with a fake smile she place her hand on shivam and went on the stage...they pick out a chit and they got SALSA...

THEY performed salsa..(guys yaad hai dance fest mai Nicole mam ne dance kiya tha on = Banda yeh bindaas hai...wohi wala dance...imagine Nicole mam as kriya and the boy as shivam)

They dance was realy awesome...every-one was enjoying their dance..and everyone hooted for them and clapped for them as they ended their dance...

As they came from the stage and joined their friends who were sitting on the couch and waiting for them...all of them started praising them...taani got up anh hugged kriya and shivam and said..

Taani:-wowww guyysss u really danced well and shivam aap sach mein bahut accha dance kerte hai and kissed him on the cheeks...*blushing-blushing*

Shivam:- thanks dear...kissed her back on cheeks...

Everyone hooted for them...and they both stard blushing-blushing...

Everyone was chatting,enjoying,pulling legs including kriya and excluding rey (yeh hansome hunk sirf aur sirf shivam and kriya ke baare mein soch rahe the and then looking at kriya who wasa busy with chatting with everyone,making him fume to another level..)

ThEn sudenly sharon said which made him come out of his thougt process..

Sharon i:- guyys...only 10 mins left for new year to start,lets hit the dance floor,iss year ka end and next year ki start hum dance kerte karte karenge..wat say????

All:- yupp...lets go...

Eveyone moved towards the dance floor,while going to the dance floor kriya bumped into a waiter who was carrying drinks and was about to wall when a pair of hands caught her by har waist,she had her eyes closed,when she opened her eyes and started smiling..the man who caught her was non othe tha SHIVAM.*hahaahaaahaaa...kya socha tha tumne???????????? Ki woh REY hoga...hahaahaaa* shivam and taani was just walking behind neha and kriya,suddenly he saw her bumping with waiter and just caught her at the right time when she was going to fall.he made her stand and heard kriya telling thanks to which he just smiled..

The whole scene was witnessed by rey and he was just fuming more an more...everyone reched the dance floor and were dancing with therre partners...while kriya just excused herself and went to washroom...

And when she came out of washroom,someone pulled her by waist and pushed her to the near by garden which was attched to the party place..and she was pinned to the wall,her eyes closed and a hand was covering her mouth.she slowly opened her eyes and just found a highly fuming rey infront of her..she struggeled to get out of the grip,but the more she struggeled the more rey tighted his grip..finally after lot of struggling she gave up and looked at rey who was already staring at her.

And their eyes got locked...LOOK LOOK HAWA HAWA STARTED...kriya broke their eye lock and started seeing everywhere except at  HIM..rey slowly reoved his hand from her mouth and finally broke the silence and said naahhh actully screamed :-

Rey :- what the hell do you think you bare doing kriya????

To which kriya just looked at him totally confused.

Rey continued :- yeh kya pehna hai tumne???itni chooti dress...yeh pehan ke party main aane ki kya zarurat thi????and why the hell did you dance with that shivam??? Woh bi itna close dance..and aur aur toh aur your are ignoring me, jab se party main aayi ho sabse baat ker rahi ho but mujhe ignore ker rahi ho and enjoying with him..uski bahho mein bahut mazza aata hai???kabi woh close dance kerke uski bahho main jaati ho aur kabhi waiter se bump hoke...haain???? So you are interested him haan???...just shouted on kriya..

Kriya was totally shocked after listening to it and was deeply hurt too..and after listening to the last line she  was fuming like hell...she just pushed him and came out of his grip and shouted

Kriya :- Mr. REYAANSH SINGHANIA. Who do you think you are????...mai joh chahu woh pehnu...kahi bhi jaau kisi ki ke sath bi rahu,usse tumhe koi farq nahi padna chahiye...naa aap mere friend ho aur naa hi mere se aapka koi relation hai..So mujhe kya kerna hai kya nahi dont tell me,you are just a stranger for me..samjhe aap?? Just a STRANGER..AN...

Her voice got stuck ,She started breathing heavily...she was not at all in her senses, she was super shocked...

She was being KISSED by someone...and that someone was non-other than REY...

Rey was highly angry on kriya, and when kriya told him that he was just a stranger for him, he just lost it...he lost is cool and KISSED kriya...he was letting out all his anger, irritation, pain, jeoulsy in that kiss...he bit her lower lip so that he could enter in her mouth, kriya moaned in pain, rey took this chance and enter into her and kissed her, soon kriya too joined him and both kissed each-other like there was no tomorrow...after a while they pulled back and were taking in air and after few secs rey pulled her again into a breath-taking kiss..this happed 5-7 times and then finally they pulled back and were taking in air and were breathing heavily... finally they both came into senses and realisation struck them. they were looking everywhere except into each-other eyes...

Rey broke the silence and came forward and cupped kriya's face and said :-

"kriya, i know m a fool, an idiot, joh aise hi tum pe chillaya...i was jeolus, jeolus of everyone as tum sabse itne asaani se baat ker rahi thi, i know kriya i behaved like a dumb...and mai hoon bhi dumb...but i cant see you avoiding me,kriya mujhpe chilla lo.maar lo,daat lo,but plz don't avoid me...I LOVE YOU KRIYA I REALLY LOVE YOU..."

After listening to rey, kriya didn't know what to do,so she just hugged him a said :-

"I LOVE YOU TO REY..."

They shared a passionate hug...after sume time they pulled back and rey sai :-

"Happy new year kriya..."

"happy new year rey..."

And then slowly rey pulled kriya into a kiss which was slow and sweet that start but turned to a real passionate one...

*********************************THE END****************************************

 kaisa laga????

plzzz jarur batana...

agar it was total crap..tab bhi batana...

atleast pata toh chale...

agar acchha lage to do like and coment...

{and guysss mai humesha sabke works pe badde comment deti hu, dont u think i shuold also the get same ...}

waiting for your reviews...

Edited by Madhukumari - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
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Aaj Itni khushi hui hai mein bata ni sakta. My Madhu finally write OS.
Madhu thanku for writing this OS. ๐Ÿ‘ ๐Ÿ‘ ๐Ÿ‘
Now coming to update, Ur OS contain everything like Friendship, Love, Fight, Jealousy, Respect nd nt d least Hotness.
Tune pehle to confuse kar diya ki hai koun vo๐Ÿ˜• par vo to nikale humare KR.
Whole gang accept her nd kriya too suffer lot to come bak upto her friends. ๐Ÿ˜ญ

Gang pissed off cuz of there continuous fights nd want to get rid of that. N Reys way to make Kriya nodded with him was awesome. ๐Ÿ˜ณ

Kriya looking stunningly hot at party ๐Ÿ˜ณ nd all d boys ogling at her n also compliment her bt Rey was ignored.

Rey jealousy at peak when shivam compliment on her nd he want rip his head. ๐Ÿ˜ก

Then DJ ne bhi Rey ki band baja di by pairing Kriya nd Shivam in hot dance aur Rey pura jal bhun gaya.

Rey so much angry on her ๐Ÿ˜ก nd one incident trigger him to drag Kriya with him to somewhere.

Both of them blast on each other nd then they kissed seven times. ๐Ÿ˜ณ ๐Ÿ˜ณ ๐Ÿ˜ณ Madhu kuch jyada ni ho gaya kya

hahahahahaha ๐Ÿ˜†

nd they finally confessed each other that they love each other nd can't lived away frm each other.

Lovely OS. ๐Ÿ‘ Edited by Suni1986 - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
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Yay me second... ๐Ÿ˜†
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Amazing os madhu.. Very well written..
Haww rey first rejected kriya.. As in usne usse maaf nahi kiya..
Then. Even kriya gave attitude.. Wow... This is our kriya ghai.. The fighter..
Kriyaansh ke fightss.. Ufff i love themm..
Rey shivam se jealous ho gaya.. Haha.. Well deserved rey.. Kriya ko pareshan karne ki itni saza toh milegi hi naa.. ๐Ÿ˜†
Finally both confessed.. Yay me super happy..
Kriya aur rey kriyaansh ho gaye..

Very well written os madhu.. U r a fab writer.. U should write more such stuff..
Loved it from start till the end...
Amazing..!!
Thanks 4 the pm..!!Edited by arshafever - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
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madzzz๐Ÿค—

d os was awesomeee๐Ÿ‘

rey thinking oly abt kria๐Ÿ˜ณ

kria back to st.louis and her mom allowed๐Ÿ˜ณ

KRand their cutee fights

jealous rey๐Ÿคฃ๐ŸคฃOMGGG i jus loveeddd this part ๐Ÿคฃ

hayeee their kissโ˜บ๏ธ

i totally lovveedd ittt๐Ÿ˜Š

well-written madzz๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ

do write moreee
Edited by aishu3003 - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
well written madhu... loved it... superb and marvelous os...
Posted: 10 years ago
res time Done
 
 
ssimple Awosm ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†
Edited by nature2 - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
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Madhu thank u so much 4 dis os...๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ˜Š
Luv u lot...โค๏ธ

Nw cumng to de update...

as maine tujhe pehle bola tha ki u write amazing nd 
dis os is also amazingly written by u...๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ

Luvd it...โค๏ธ

starting mein dat fight was mast...๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ
mujhe laga hi ki woh kriyaansh hi honge...
kyuki unke siva aise koi lar hi nahi sakta...๐Ÿคฃ

aur bechari puri gang tang ayyagi unke jagdhe se...๐Ÿฅฑ

DIVA'S entry was toh as usual superb...๐Ÿ˜Ž
akhir sabne kria ko maaf kar hi  diya...๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ

Dat fireexit wala part was fab...๐Ÿ˜ƒ
[akhir  fireexit kitna special hai humare kriyaansh ke liye..]

Accha tarika use kiye rey ne kriya ko apne farmhouse par party manane ke liye...
itna paas aaake puchche ga toh woh ha hi bolegi na...๐Ÿ˜ณ


Kria ki entry was stunnig in de party...๐Ÿ˜Š
Sab boys ke woh comment ,fir shivam ka comment bhi...
aur bechara rey kitna jealous ho raha tha...๐Ÿ˜‰

aur uske baad sabne  apne partners ke saath dance kiya lekin kria ne shivam ke sath...
yeh dekh rey aur jealous...๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿคฃ

jab kria ne rey ko stranger kaha aur rey gussa ho gaya...๐Ÿ˜ก 
nd both blast on each other nd they kissed aur woh bhi 7 baar...๐Ÿ˜ณ (madhu kuch zyaada nahi ho gaya...๐Ÿ˜†)

And at last they confessed each other...

In all superb os...
luvd itโค๏ธ
Amazingly written...๐Ÿ‘
Nd through dis os u shwd each element  like friendship,hatered,love,jealoulsy, fight...

And  madhu thanks once again 4 writing such a wonderful nd lovely os...
     Lots of luv...
         โค๏ธ

















Edited by Kanchi.. - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
Res
Jab shock se nikal gaya hu so commenting ha
Unres
Madhu ye hai kya
Pahale ek ff
And
Then
Os
Itne surprises unbealiveable i didn't expected this from u
Comming to the os
Acha tha ha sirf acha tha bas
But mujhe bus nahi train pasand hai
Acha nahi bahut acha tha frist os aur itne acha abhi bhi yakeen nahi ho raha hai
Kriya and rey both are my heart
And
Kriya ki entery
Kriyansh ka firscape
Rey ka frienship na karna fir kriya ka attitude dena
Rey ka jelous hona hahahahaha itna funny
And unki ladai hye kitne cute lagate hai na fight karte hui but rey is rey mana liya kriya ko apne charm se hahahaha
And
Last koi kaise bhoole kiss
Amazing os fully
Masti jhagada and romace three in one
ThanksEdited by pradeep_maurya - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
Supab os
love it
it was mindblowing
love how kr was fighting with each other
n than rey fuming
god that was so so so awsome
n last me kr ka scean
was like charry on the cake
love their confessionEdited by kriapatel - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
awsum os..๐Ÿ‘
loved it..
kriyaansh cat-mouse fight..haha
haye humesha me rey ko sochti hu aur ye bichme shivam ajata hai..
rey geting jealous of shivam..
haye kitne bar ye dono ek dusre ko kiss karte hai..??
its almost 7 times dey kiss each other..๐Ÿ˜ณ
inshort it was a sweet cute os..
love it..
Edited by Abhilashaarsha - 10 years ago

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