Flight of the sparrows ~ ArHi OS (NOTE Pg10)

Edited by AngelTeen - 9 years ago

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I had to take a couple of minutes to compose myself before I could even begin to gather my thoughts. When I read the note saying this was related to Mora Angana I'd already started bracing myself for an emotional storm to pass through me and nothing could have prepared me for this.

It was heartbreaking and heartfelt and all that bottled sorrow and pain...it's there is every word, unpretentious and raw, and I started crying long before I knew what I was crying for. How'd you do it Rae? Sometimes you make me squeal and giggle, and sometimes I become all quiet and contemplative, like I am now. This OS is going to weigh in my mind all day.

The emotions were so real. I loved how the story began outside Shantivan, slowly moving inside it, like metaphorically peeling away the exterior to show the pain hidden beneath the show of strength. I love the Raizadas - the fact they were all mourning, but mourning in private, all because they needed to give strength to Sama - it just makes me absolutely love the people they are.

But the person I love most of all is Arnav. That flashback of Khushi's words, of Khushi breaking down and saying she couldn't do it again - my throat is seizing up just thinking about it. It's a projection of what Sama must be feeling but is unable to let out...and it's also a moment of honest vulnerability to remind us that no matter how strong Khushi may be, she's also human, she can also be weak. But what made my heart swell though was how Arnav took it upon himself to be Khushi's strength when she fell weak - when he moved to shoulder his family's grief even though he was breaking just as much as everyone else.

He's such a wonderful, amazing man. You've portrayed him as a wonderful husband, father, grandfather, and a beautiful human being without mentioning exactly that and showing us instead. I can only imagine how hard it must have been to speak of Pari - but he did anyway, because he realised that now was the time to touch upon something he'd tried to suppress, now was to unravel himself a little so he could unravel the daughter he has in the form of his bahu. God, that was just the most beautiful scene...I couldn't stop crying as I read his soulful words and it touched me more because it's so realistic and so true...it won't be OK immediately, but someday, someday it will be. They'll never forget Jiya but they would learn to move on and learn to be happy again. Such a sensitive, true, emotional thing which so many people have passed through before, depicted so eloquently and tenderly...

The silent conversation between Ayaan and Arnav, the fatherly love and support, the moment Sama finally breaks down and releases the anguish, and Ayaan isn't brave enough to face it...so real, I could see it, feel it, felt like I was there too, hiding somewhere with my tears.

There was so much grief and sorrow here and yet, with Sama's wail, Ayaan's breakdown and Khushi's hug in the end...one can't but help feel hope that it will all be OK again someday.

A masterpiece Rae. You deserve a standing ovation

PS : you probably already now my brother's called Ayaan...and Sama happens to be my childhood friend :)Edited by -doe-eyes- - 9 years ago

This has to be one of you most well-written pieces, and to handle an issue like this with such sensitivity is commendable. I was teary-eyed and almost crying when I reached this line-

I have cried as I read this , as I think about the 5 year old girl who didnt even know what was happening to her

res Edited by preethi28 - 9 years ago

Rae this was so soulful, one of the most brilliant emotional pieces I have ever read. Every character strung so beautifully in a single thread, staying together, caring for each other so that the thread doesn't break. To say that it touched my heart would be an understatement, because whoever reads this will feel that unexplainable tug right there. Edited by Amethyst. - 9 years ago

that was heartbreaking Rae i was very emotional the death of a child i had tears in my eyes loved how arnav refused to let his strength break his khushi loved how he went to sama that was so touching and told her about their first baby showing her time can heal all wound not completely but that impossible but it heals and you note at the bottom that so sad when our innocent children can be protected from the monsters out there well done Rae