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Part 14 - Random Scene

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After the emotionally drained episode, it must be actually quite difficult for the actors to perform so brilliantly. Please find my take on it.

Part ' 1

Scene starts once Priya leaves KM and goes to her home.

Priya knocks on the door, Her Mother (Shipra) opens it.

Shipra ' Priya aandar aa beta, tum kahan thi? Aur itni thaki hui kyu lag rahi ho? Tu thik toh hain na?

Priya ' Sitting on the sofa...Ma mera sar bahot dard kar raha hai, ek adrakwali chai pilaogi please ...Aur Pihu kahan hai Ma?

Shipra ' Haan bas 2 minute de mujhe...abhi chai  lekar aati huon...aur haan Pihu toh abhi tak soyee hain...kal raat teri raah dekhkhar badi mushkil se sulaya usse...

 Shipra ' ye le beta teri manpasand adrakwali chai...

Priya ' (putting a fake smile, looking down not able to meet her Mother's eyes)...

Takes one sip from the cup and keeps the cup on the table.

Priya ' Ma...(sobbing ...aapni  Ma se lipat kar rone lagti hai...)

Shipra ' (putting her hand on Priya's hair)...Priya...Kya hua beta ...Aur tu roh kyu rahi hai?

Priya ' Ma...mujhese badi bhool ho gayee...(and she narrates the night incident)

Shipra ' (also somewhat disturbed seeing Priya's plight...Aakhir Ma to woh dono betiyoon ki hai...)

Shipra ' (Seeing Priya so emotionally drained...) Priya dekh beta...tu bahot thaki hui lag rahi hai...hum log iske bare mein baat zaroor karenge...lekin tu abhi zara aaram kar le...ja...Pihu ke paas jake aaram kar)

Priya ' (nodding her head in affirmation...)

Till then Pihu wakes up and comes out of the room and sees Priya crying...

Pihu ' Mamma aap roh kyu rahe ho...last time aap aise roh rahe they tab aapko aapke Papa Mummy ki yaad aa rahi thi...ab toh aapke paas woh bhi hai toh phir aap kyu roh rahi ho?

Priya ' (not able to answer her question)...woh ab Pihu ko apni bahoon mein lekar aau zyada emotional ho jati hai...

Shipra ' Pihu...aap Nani ka ek kaam karogi?

Pihu ' Haan Nani, boliye na

Shipra ' Dekh beta...Mumma bahot thaki hai na Neha Aunty aur Vikram Uncle ke shaadi ke bhagdod se...jaise Mumma aapko sulati hain...kya aap bhi Mumma ko andar lekar jakar sulaoge...

Pihu '  Achcha Nani...Mumma andar chalo...aap jaise Pihu ko sulati ho...waise aaj Pihu bhi aapko sulaagi

Pihu holds Priya's hand and takes her inside bedroom.  Adjusting the Cushions, makes Priya sleep on the bed...Puts the chaddar on Priya...and slowly puts her small hand on Priya's forehead and taps it for sometime (like how Mother does for her baby to put her to sleep)...

Pihu ' Mumma mein yehi aapke pas baithi huon...aap jaldi se so jao...aur fir aapki sari thakaan dur ho jaigi...phir aap ekdum fresh fresh ho jaogi...

Priya ' (moving her head in affirmation)...goes to sleep

 

Part ' 2

Sudhir had gone out somewhere. After coming back home, Shipra tells him everything, but they ensure that Pihu is not there when they are discussing.

Sudhir ' Shipra, Bhagwaan ne Priya aur Ram ko ye kaisi kash-ma-kash mein dal diya hain

Shipra ' Bhagwaan par bharosa rakhiya Sudhir, aagar hum hi aise kehene lage to Priya aur Ram ki Bhikri padi zindagi ko kaun sawarega?

Priya had slept in the morning...afternoon ho jati hain...phir shyam ho jati...but Priya is still sleeping.

Pihu ' (has been asking everyone why her Mumma has not woken up till now).

Pihu ' Nanu...Mumma toh itni der kabhi nahi soti hain...phir aaj woh kyon nahi uthi abhi tak.

Sudhir ' chalo beta hum tumhari Mumma ko jagate hain

Holding Pihu's hand, Sudhir and Pihu go inside the bedroom.

Sudhir ' Priye bte...dekhon tumhare Papa aur Pihu tumhe jagane aaye hain...

Pihu ' Mumma utho na...dekhon na Subha se shyam ho gayee hain aur aap abhi tak so rahi hain...

Till that time, Shipra also comes in to bedroom...

Sudhir ' Priya uth ja na bte...(putting his hand on Priya's forehead)...he realizes that Priya has high fever...

Sudhir ' Shipra..Priya ko toh tez bukhar hain...zara thermometer lao...iska temperature check karte hain...

Pihu ' Nanu...meri Mumma ko kya hua...

Sudhir ' Beta ...Mumma ko shayad thoda fever hai ...lekin koi baat nahi...aapke Nanu hain na yahaan ...sab thik ho jayega...tum ghabraoon nahi... aur tum toh Mumma ka bahadur bachcha hain na...

 

After checking Temperature, Fever is too high...so they decide to call the doctor...

Sudhir ' Mein doctor ko call karta huon...Pihu tab tak aap Mumma ke paas hi baitho...

Doctor comes and checks Priya. Priya has by now woken up slightly. After talking with Priya for sometime, Doctor finds Priya weak and emotionally drowned. She asks when did she ate last time, she says day before yesterday as she was busy with her friend's wedding and could not find time to eat.

Doctor '  (to Shipra and Sudhir) ' Agar inka weakness aise hi raha toh...she may not be able to recover faster...Dekhiye Priya ko sakt aaram ki zaroorat hai...Mein ek injection de rahi hoon aur kuch goliya...but please ensure that she eats properly...

Doctor jaise he Priya ko injection deti hain...Priya ki mu se Aah nikalti hain

Pihu ' Mumma kuch nahi ...bas ho gaya...aap toh bahadur Pihu ki bahadur Mumma hain na

Priya has tears in her eyes and nods saying yes...

Doctor leaves.

Pihu ' (rubbing Priya's tears) Mumma don't worry aap jaldi se thik ho jaoge. And places a kiss on her forehead..(ekdum apne Papa par gayee hain)

 

Part 3

Once dinner is ready, Shipra gets some food for Priya.

Pihu ' Mumma Dinner time, utho na...

Priya ' Ma khane ka bilkul bhi maan nahi hain...

Shipra ' Dekh beta khayegi nahi toh jaldi se thik kaise hogi...aur Pihu ki taraf dekh ..woh bhi tujhe is halat mein dekhkar kitni udaas hain ...

Sudhir ' (putting his head on Priya's forehead) Shipra iska bukhar toh abhi bhi zyada hain... ek minute zara temperature dekhen...

After 1 minute...

Sudhir ' Shipra Priya ka bukhar thoda aur tez ho gaya hain...Priya bte thoda sa khale...ismein se tujhe jo achcha lage woh khale...aur phir teri dawayee lele...dekh khali peth par toh goli bhi nuksan hi karegi...

Priya with Shipra's help gets up and sits on the bed, resting her back.

Pihu ' Nani mujhe do...mein Mumma ko khilaoongi...

With Pihu insisiting Priya eats little food...takes her medicines and goes back to sleep.

In the night, Pihu sleeps with Nanu and Shipra with Priya.

Priya not able to digest food properly, vomits everything. The Doctor is called in the night, and she puts Priya on Saline.

Edited by freshwriteup - 11 years ago

what will happen now?update soon curious to know 😊
i think ram will come there😉

great job... i want ram to know about it... would love to see ram taking care of priya...

Hey.! I loved this track. When priya gets ill our ram comes and make her fighting fit by taking lots of care and he looks to cute.. One more thing to mention is the mom-dot bonding btw shipra-priya-peehu , it's just awesome.. Update soon pls..

very cool

thank you...u penned this nicely...

Fantastic ...yr.. lekin aage kya hua plzz update karo jaldi...janna h ram ko pta chala kii nhi..plzzz jaldi update karo..

very nice, now I want Ram in this picture

fantastic update 👏👏👏👏 hope Ram know about priya & take care of her pls update soon

yehh kia hua?? sub ko hyy pata lag gaya becharon ki C night ka :P 😛
anywayss beautifully written continue soon n bring RAMMU in the story too :)😛
Edited by farwasneha - 11 years ago