OS: Chupke Chupke - Page 2

Posted: 11 years ago

Hey guys...this is my very first attept to write an OS...hope u guys like it...😊

The story starts from peehu's admiasion party...after ram has appreciated priya's cooking...n everyone is done with the dinner...

Rahul's friend, Sam, whose a DJ is playing music loud...
Neha goes n whispers something in Peehu's ears...
Peehu runs towards Sam...
Peehu: Sam bhaiya...koi romantin saa gaana lgao naa...
Sam: kyun?? ye gaana acha nhi hai??
Peehu: Acha hai...but romantic nhi hai...lgao naa koi romantic saa gaana...ye meri party hai...mere pasand ke gaane chalne chahiye...πŸ˜›
Sam: okay okay...lagaata hun...
Peehu: thank u...🀒
Peehu (runs towards her parents): mumma papa...aap log ek saath dance kro naa...
Priya(looks towards ram 😳...den says with a little hesitance): nhi beta...apne papa ka size dekho...dance wance unke bas ki baat nhi hai...
Peehu: nahi mumma...ye meri party hai...sab kuch meri marzi se hona chahiye...πŸ˜›
Priya: par beta..
Ram interupts priya..: Beta mujhe boht acha dance aata hai...afterall mai rockstar ka dad hun...ye toh tumhaari maa ko dance nhi aata...πŸ˜†
Priya(angrily😑): Acha...yaad nhi hai Vidya Balan ke sath maine...(she pauses)...(raya eyelock...❀️ ) agr aap rockstar ke dad ho toh mai bhi uski maa hun...πŸ‘
Peehu: offo...aap dono fir ladne lage...plzz dance karo naa...πŸ˜‰
Ram: okay darling...aapke liye kuch bhi...

Song: kahin toh hogi vo...duniya jahan tu mere saath hai...(frm jaane tu yaa jaane naa..)

Ram's right arm is around Priya's waist...Priya's right arm is resting on Ram's shoulder...Ram extends his left hand towards her...Priya gentely holds it...they start moving...Ram looks at Priya...n suddenly notices a burn on her left arm...
Ram: arre ye kya hua??
Priya: vo khana bnate waqt tel ki cheeten aa gayi thi...
Ram: dekha...jal gya naa hath...maine toh bheja tha catering ke liye bheja tha...but madam ko toh sab khud hi karna tha na...
Priya: arre khaana acha tha naa...aap khush rhiye...chilla kyun rhe hain...vaise bhi ye sab choti moti choten toh lagti rehti hai...koi badi baat thodi hai...
Ram: arre ye badi baat kaise nhi hai...THE RAM KAPOOR ki wife ka haath kaise jal sakta...(he pauses...n raya eyelock again..❀️ )

Nuts: bhai bhaabi gaana khatm ho gya...lagta hai aaj ek dusre par zyaada hi pyaar aa rha hai...party mein bache bhi hain...control kariye...:P
Ram n Priya feel embarassed n move away...
Priya: kitni garmi hai naa...main juice peeke aati hun...excuse me...
Neha: arre tum rukko...main laati hun naa...
Neha mixes vodka in her juice n brings it...priya(who is feeling vry embarassed) drinks the juice at once...n boom...she's drunk again!!
she starts with her commentry on ever1...
Rajat goes towards her n tells every1: I'll settle her in the room...
As soon as he puts his hand on Priya..
Shipra (to Sudhir) : kitne ache lagte hain naa dono saath mein...
Sudhir ignores her n goes...

Ram overhears this n remembers how Rajat went against his best friend for Priya's sake...he thinks Rajat might take advantage of the situation...😲 πŸ˜‘
Ram rushes towards them n says: rehne do Rajat...I'll handle her...u enjoy the party...
Ram takes Priya to the room...n shuts the door(unconciously)...
He makes Priya lie down...n within seconds she is fast asleep...
Ram goes...he pulls the door...but it does not open...he tries again...he rotates the knob 2-3 tym...but still the dook doesn't open...πŸ˜•
Ram shouts: arre koi darwaza kholo...hum lock ho gye hain...
However due to the loud music no one hears him...so Ram has no choice but to spend the night in Priya's room...
He goes n sits besides Priya...
After sometime  he starts feeling extremely hot n sleepy...so he takes off his coat n tie...n lies down next to Priya (since there wasn't any couch in the room...)
Soon he's also asleep...

NEXT MORNING
Ram wakes up n discovers Priya sleeping on his chest...n his arms were around her...
Ram blushes a little...n holds her tight...but comes back to reality within a few second...he removes his hands...
Ram: utho Priya...kitna sogi...(shakes her a litle) arre utho naa...
Priya wakes up...n is completely confused seeing herself lying on Ram (especially when ram is without coat, her head is aching so badly n she's feeling that she didn't sleep at night...)
Priya : ka..kal raatko humaare beech kya hua tha RAM?? πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜³

Ram, who is feeling embarassed n is a little angry, shouts: Kuch nhi hua tha...ab hatto mere upar se...😑
Priya comes back to her senses, n gets up...
Priya: s..sry...vo...aah...mera sar kyun itna dukh rha hai..πŸ˜•
Ram: kal raat ko party mein Neha ne tumhaare juice mein firse vodka mila diya tha...n uske baad tum drunk ho gyi thi...toh maine tumhe kamre mein laakr leta diya... πŸ₯±
Priya(looks at him lovingly nd in astonishment): arre koi aur bhi toh aa sakta tha...
Ram: arre but pati toh..(he pauses)...i mean hum dono hosts hai naa...toh mai hi le aaya...guests ko takleef thodi deta...
priya: hmm..
Ram (still feeling embarassed, shouts): aur ye tumhaara darwaaza kaisa hai?? apne aap hi lock ho jaata hai...πŸ˜• kalko peehu lock ho gyi toh...
Priya: arre kabhi toh chillana chodiye mr.kapoor.😑...yahaan mera sar dard se fatta jaa rha hai...aur aap chillate jaa rhe hain...maana ki aap naaraz hai mujhse...but u can't treat me in such an inhuman way...😭
Ram(guilty) : sry...tum baitho...mai sar dard ki tablet laata hun...he goes towards his coat...
Priya murmurs: inn 5 saalon mein saare rishte badal gaye...par mr.kapoor aur unki tablets ka rishta vaise ka vaisa hai...mr.tablet kapoor!! πŸ˜›
Ram: kuch kha tumne??
Priya: nhi...aah...boht sar dukh rha hai...
Ram: haan haan...ye lo tablet...
Priya has the tablet...
Ram is jst wearing his coat when suddenly there's a knock on the door...
Peehu: mummu kab tak soti rhogi...jaldi utho naa...mujhe bhook lag rhi hai...😎
Priya: sry beta...mai aati hun...ek minute...
Neha: nahi nahi...uski koi zarurat nhi hai...main hun naa...peehu ko breakfast mai de dungi...tum fatty ke saath enjoy karo...πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜›
Ram: chup karo yaar...aisa kuch nhi hai...ye tumhaare bekaar se flat ka darwaaza kharab hai...kholo isse...😳
Neha opens the door...
Ram leaves...n priya keeps on looking at him n smiles.😊...
Edited by mansi_gupta - 11 years ago
Posted: 11 years ago
Nice OS mansi. And i really love that song and raya are both Rockstars. I wish serial main bhi aisa ho. And please write more of it. :-)Edited by -SweetEtika- - 11 years ago
Posted: 11 years ago
great jobEdited by taashu11 - 11 years ago
Posted: 11 years ago
haaye mansi πŸ˜ƒ... tooo cute re... πŸ˜‰ loved it..good job..πŸ‘ 
Posted: 11 years ago
thanks everyone...I'm not continuing this OS...no new ideas...sry...😊
Posted: 11 years ago
Awesome OS πŸ˜‰
Thanks for sharing n hope u keep writing... πŸ‘πŸΌ

My ❀️ to d updates...
Posted: 11 years ago
will surely write more if I get any new ideas...but haven't planned to continue this OS...:)
Posted: 11 years ago
VERY NICELY WRITTEN ...JUST LOVED IT...ISKO AGE B CONTINUE KRO ...MAKE IT FF...I M SURE U'L ROCK IT...
Posted: 11 years ago
Welcome to the forum dear
Hey that was beautifully written
you sent me to dreamland...wish it happens in the show too
do write more ...you write very well
Posted: 11 years ago
πŸ‘πŸΌ some more like this.

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