Random Scene between Raya

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Posted: 2012-04-03T13:49:58Z

Hi,

This is my first attempt at writing an FF, hope you guys like it.

These days, there has been lot of work at Ram's office – presentations, clients, seminars. Very busy and tiring for Ram. After 2 days he is to visit Chennai for a presentation.

Morning:

Priya got up before Ram. Ram had been working late night on his laptop for his business presentations and so had slept very late. Priya after getting ready, called up to Ram.

Priya went near Ram and said: Good Morning Mr. Kapoor, subah ho gayi hai...

Ram: Rubbing his eyes, Good Morning Priya...thodi der  aur so jaoon, bahut late soya huon raat ko

Priya (smiling): Thik hai (moving her hand over Ram's hair), lekin sirf 10 minute. Aapko yaad hai na – aapki important meeting hai client ke saath 10 baje ki. Aapne yaad dilane ke liye kaha tha mujhe.

Ram: saying with closed eyes - haan (very tiredly),  he turned other way saying – sirf 10 minute.

Priya: Thik hai , mein aapko jagati huon thodi der mein.

Priya was thinking, last few days have been very hectic for Mr.Kapoor. Apne khane par, health par, unka bilkul bhi dhyaan nahi. Kaam ke karan unki tabiyat kharab na ho jaye.

After 10 minutes Ram gets up but his eyes are still closed and is sitting on bed. Left hand is placed on his back. His back is hurting little bit.

Priya comes in the room.

Priya: Arre aap jag gaye? Mein aaphi ko jagane ke liye aa rahi thi. Neend puree hui na?

Ram: Haan (his eyes are closed even now.)  

Priya: Aap jaldi se ready ho jayeeye, mein breakfast lagwa deti huon.

Ram: Priya breakfast pack kar dena, nahin to office ke liye late ho jaoonga.

Priya: Thik hai (worried that today Ram was looking very tired).

Both Priya and Ram are getting ready. Ram gets ready in his usual suit. While picking some files from table, he is not able to bend properly, as his back is hurting.  

Priya is thinking since morning , Mr. Kapoor ne mujhe bilkul bhi tease nahi kiya. Aur aaj thode zyada thake hua lag rahe hai. Ho sakta hai - Kaam ka bahut tension hai.

Priya: Suniye, aapka Breakfast pack kar diya hai. Kitna bhi kaam hone dijiye, office pahunchkar breakfast zaroor kariye. Mein janti hoon, ye aapke liye din ka sabse important meal hota hain.

Ram: Haan. His left hand again goes to his back, slightly trying to comforting back.

Priya: Kya hua? Sab thik to hai na?

Ram: Haan sab thik hai. Bus thoda sa back pain hai. It will be ok. Humlog chale - mujhe deri ho rahi hain.

Priya: Haan chaliye.

Priya notices thoughout journey, everyday smile is missing on Mr.Kapoor's face . Ram drops Priya at her classes and reaches office. Due to heavy workload, he forgets about Breakfast. Puts his phone on Silent mode so that nobody disturbs him. He has also asked his secretary not to forward personal calls to him. Priya is trying to reach him on his cell phone to check his back pain.

Ram takes short lunch break of 15 minutes and is back to his work. At 04:00pm, he watches Priya's 5 missed calls on his cell, he wants to call back but another colleague comes for discussion on presentation. He leaves the phone as it is. During the meeting he is not able to sit straight as the chair's back rest is hurting him. His colleagues could see his uncomfort.

 

Colleague: Sir, aap thik toh hai? Kya humlog aadhe ghante baad meeting karrey toh?

 

Ram: Nahi, I  am tied up till 09:00 PM. Agar ek meeting re-schedule karni pade toh, baki sab bhi re-schedule karni padegi. Aur mein chahta huon, sare kaam time par hone chahiye.

 

Colleague: Sure Sir.

 

It is almost 09:30PM. After completing his work for the day, Ram leaves for home. Priya is with Dadi in Dadi's room.

 

Dadi: Priya puttar, itna late ho gaya – Golu office se aaya ki nahi?

 

Priya: Dadi bus aate hi honge.

 

Dadi: Aaj kal, woh  office se itne der se kyu aata hai? Tum dono mein koi baat toh nahi bigad gayi hai?

 

Priya: Nahi Dadi, Aisi koi baat nahi. 2 Dino baad unka kuch important presentation hai toh, bus usi ki taayareon main busy hai.

 

Dadi: Dekh Priya. Mein Golu ko bachpan se janti huon. Agar ek kaam ke peche lag gaya, to use kisi cheez ki khabar nahi hota.  Khana peena toh door hi raha.

 

Priya: Haan Dadi. Mein unka dhyan rakh rahi hoon.

 

Ram reaches KM and goes directly to his room. His walk is very slow today.

 

In this room, he searches for Priya

 

Ram: Priya ...Priya...

Not finding Priya, he sits on sofa, take offs his shoes, keeps his legs on table in cross position, rests his head on top of sofa, and closes eyes.

 

Bansi Kaka comes to Dadi's room: Priya madam, Ram Sir ghar aa gaye hain aur apne kamre mein hai.

 

Priya: Thik hai. Bansi Kaka leaves the room.  Achcha Dadi mein ab upar kamre mein jaoon?

 

Dadi: Haan Priya puttar, tu ab Golu ke paas ja, office se thak ke ayya hoga.

 

Priya reaches room, and sees Mr.Kapoor resting on sofa.

 

Priya, Ram ke pass pahunchti hain, aur Ram ke baaloon ko sehlati (moves her hand) hain. Using her Saree's paloo, rubs off sweat from Ram's forehead.

 

Priya: Mr.Kapoor aaj ka aapka din kaisa raha? Aur aap bahut thake hua lag rahe hain?

 

Ram (closed eyes): Haan bus office ke kaam se thoda thaka hua hoon.

 

Priya: Achcha ye bataiye, office jakar -  aapne Breakfast toh kar liya than na? Mein aapko phone kar rahi thi, lekin shayad aap kisi kaam mein busy honge toh mera phone nahi liya.

 

Ram: Opening his eyes (very slowly), Sorry Priya - Kaam ke karan, Breakfast karna bhi bhool gaya.

 

Priya: Dekhiye, main janti huon aapka kaam aapke liya kitna important hai. Lekin usse kahin zyada aapki Health important hai. Aur back pain kaisa hain, kya abhi bhi dard ho raha hai?

 

Ram: Hmmm...shyaam se thoda zyada dard ho raha hai.

 

Priya:  Chaliyen, aap fresh ho jayee, phir humlog Doctor ko dikhate hain.

 

Ram: Abhi nahi please, mein bahut thaka hua hoon. Aaj raat pain relief spray se dekhte hain. 

 

Priya: Aap apne health ko lekar itne irresponsible kaise ho sakte hain. Mera dil toh abhi aapko Doctor ko dikhane ka hain, par thik hain – aaj raat pain relief spray se dekh lete hain. Agar kal tak improvement nahi hua toh, mein aapki ek nahi sunne wali.

 

Priya: Achcha ab uthiye aur fresh ho jayiye, mein Bansi Kaka se kehkar – Dinner lagwane ke liye bolti huon.

 

Ram doesn't move. Priya Ram ke mathe par se haath ghoomati hain ...aur phir kehti hai

 

Priya: Chaliye na, uthiye bhi Mr. Kapoor...Achcha chaliye mein aapki help kar deti huon.

 

Priya starts removing Ram's coat. Then Tie.

Priya: Common Mr. Kapoor...

 

Ram gets fresh and is back in room.

 

After Ram sits on sofa, Priya placing a cushion behind Ram's back

 

Priya: Mr.Kapoor, ye cushion yahan aapke peeth ke piche rakhti huon aapko thoda aaram milega

 

Ram moves little bit forward, so that Priya can place the cushion.

 

After their Dinner, Priya has gone downstairs to instruct Bansi Kaka for tomorrow's Breakfast.

Ram picks up his laptop, sits on sofa and starts working. Priya comes back into the room.

 

Priya: Yeh kya Mr.Kapoor, aap ne phir laptop par kaam shuru kar diya.

 

Ram: Priya bahut zaroori kaam hai. Tum janti ho 2 dino baad wala presentation mere liya bahut important hai. Aur abhi tak uska kafi kaam bacha hua hain. Agar ab kaam karu toh aage ke do din, thode se aasaan honge.

 

Priya: Mr.Kapoor, I do understand. Thik hai, zyada der tak kaam mat kariye. You should take some breaks in-between while working on laptop.  Yeh aapki aankhoon ke liye bhi achcha hain aur aaoke back liye bhi. Ram nods in affirmation.

 

Priya takes a book and settles down on bed.

 

After sometime, Ram is rubbing his eyes and trying to give them some rest.

 

Ram: Priya, janti ho (Priya looks at Ram)  Jab Vikram tha, en sab preparations mein uski bahut help hoti thi. Har insaan ke paas Vikram jaisa dost hona chahiye. Hum dono ne kitne saare night jaage hai – aise presentations banana main. Mein aaj usko bahut miss kar raha huon.

 

Ram: Ek toh yeh kaam aur upar se yeh back pain. Priya, bahut dard ho raha hai.

 

Priya gets up from the bed. Helps Ram to keep the laptop on the table, and makes him slowly to get up from sofa and takes him to bed.

 

Priya: yaha thodi der late jayiye, aur mujhe batatiye kahaan dard ho raha hai.

 

Ram sleeps on the bed with his back on top. Priya moves his kurta up.  She could see a red patch and swelling on his back. She tries to press it gently to check if it the location of Ram's pain,

 

Ram: (screams) OUCH , kya kar rahi ho, wohi par dard ho raha hai.

 

Priya:  Sorry. Mr. Kapoor.  Bahut dard ho raha hain kya?

 

Ram: Haan...

Priya: Yahan toh bahut swelling hai. Ek minute rukiya, mein pain spray lekar aati huon.

 

Priya gets the pain spray and gently sprays it over Ram's back.

 

Ram: Uff...Priya...bahut jal raha hai...

 

Priya: Mr.Kapoor bus thoda sa dard hoga, ek minute mein AC badha deti huon, toh shayad aapko thoda thanda lage.

 

After 2-3 mts. Slightly trying to comfort Ram by moving her hand over Ram's hair, Priya moves Ram's Kurta down. Dims the lights in the room.  And goes to other side of bed.

 

In that dim light, Priya sees a drop of tear flowing from Ram's right eye.

 

Slightly moving near Ram,

 

Priya: Mr. Kapoor, bahut dard ho raha hai?

 

Ram nods

 

Priya goes near Ram. Helps him to turn towards her.

 

Priya dono haathon se Ram ko cuddle karti hain, like a Mother.  

 

Priya: Yeh kya aise rohte nahi, sab thik ho jayega, Mein huon na aapke saath.

And both of them go to sleep.


Let me know how you think about the scene.

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Posted: 2012-04-03T14:12:05Z
Awesome writing!!! Smile
Welcome to the forum dear and looking forward to ur takes. Please continue soon.. Smile
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Posted: 2012-04-03T14:12:56Z
Good one and really great start.Clap I loved it.Star Hope to continue further. Get to read and imagine more of such beautiful RaYa moments. Keep going. Thumbs Up
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Posted: 2012-04-03T14:23:05Z
it is nice but u think that priya is little bit Angry to ram 4 not answer  her callClapClap
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Posted: 2012-04-03T17:40:21Z
Nicely written...keep it up...Clap
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Posted: 2012-04-03T18:22:50Z
Big smile aww v sweet ,very well written plz update !
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Posted: 2012-04-03T20:48:39Z
So sweet yaar. Wow1 I actually want to use a word for very sweet which I dont remember. But it is very well written. And please do tell ur name dear
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Posted: 2012-04-03T21:58:33Z
Awesome...
Please continue soon
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