Posted: 13 years ago

hey sweet buddies heres a oneshot on r Notty n Nyc NaKsh n d interesting thing is dat me n maheen both hav written it 2gether.hope u all lyk it.
NaKsh went on an official trip 2 kasauli(u all remembered wen dey went 2 daman naitik said "main jitni baar bhi bahar jaunga to apni pyaari si biwi ko saath lekar jaungi") so here v go :
Naitik and Akshara went for a long walk or better to say on an adventurous walk…
They started walking from their house, first half hour they walked very normally on a plain road… then

A: naitik mai thak gayi hu, aur kitni dur hai ye ice cream shop
N: bas 3-4 km dur hai…..
A: kya itni dur, bas ek hi ice cream shop hai kya yahan par….
N: haan….
A: koi short cut nahi hai kya wahan par jaane ka??
N: ek hai jis se 10 minute mai hum wahan par pahunch jayenge par apke liye safe nahi hai….
A: naitik please mujhe ussi raste se jaana hai, mujhse waise hi chala nahi ja raha…
N: ice cream khaani jaruri hai phir…. kal kha lena
A: nahi mujhe aaj aur abhi khaani hai…. aur ap mujhe abhi shortcut se lekar chal rahe hain
N: soch lijiye, baad mai na kehna ki mujhe wapis jaana hai…
A: haan soch liya….
N: okk to phir chaliye…
They cut the road and entered in jungle..
A: (after walking 5 minutes) naitik ye to bahut simple sa rasta hai… (naitik smiled and asked her to look little forward)akshara stopped to see one waterfall and pond in front of her…
A: naitik ab kaise jayenge hum???
N: hooooo (dramatically) but I think aap hi mujhe iss raste se layi hain…
A: stop it naitik, apne kaha tha ye shortcut hai…
N: haan to yehi to shortcut hai, iss waterfall ko paar karna matlab 2 kms chalna…
A: naitik ap pagal ho gaye hain kya??? Isse kaise paar karenge…
naitik raised her face and showed her one rope…
N: iss se…. (akshara looked at him totally confused) are bas iss rassi ko pakadna hai, aur ye hume dusri side uttar degi…
A: r u crazy naitik??? Iss rassi par latak kar kaise jayenge, niche girenge seedha… aur mai apni zindagi se bahut khush hu, abhi suicide karne ka koi iraada nahi hai mera….
N: are nahi girte.. aur ye taalab itna gehra nahi hai, gir bhi gaye to jayda se jayda 1 adhi haddi tut jayegi, uss se jayda kuch nahi hoga……
A: ap jaiye yahan se, mai long cut se hi aa jaungi…. Mera apki tarah dimag kharab nahi ho raha (she turned to go)
N: (holding her hand) no akshara ab aap yaha se nahi ja sakti, aapne kaha tha ki aap issi raaste se jayengi….
A: to mujhe kya pata tha apka shortcut aisa hoga..
N: chaliye na bahut maaza aayega, just wo rassi ko pakadna hai tightly, bahut simple hai, jab mai chhota tha aur hum yaha ghumne aate the tab ek din mai 10-10 baar isse cross karta tha…
A:  mujhse nahi hoga, mujhe darr lagta hai, aur agar galti se niche dekh liya to mai to wahin gir jaungi….
N: (thinks a bit) acha rassi na sahi, mujhe to pakad sakti hain na… aisa karte hai dono saath saath chalte hai…
A: (still scared) nahi….
N: akshara ap chaliye!…. (he almost pulled her and stopped near the rope) chaliye ab aaiye yaha par….
A: nahi naitik… mujhe darr lag raha hai….
Naitik pulled her near him and locked her arms around his neck…
N: haan bas aise hi pakde rakhna…. (before akshara cud speak anything, he held d rope and pushed his feet a little, soon it start rolling and so as naitik and akshara)
A: naitikkk (on the verge of hitting him)
N: akshara haath nahi chodna nahi to seedha niche jaengi….
A: kyaa???? (she looked down and started sweating after seeing pond… she got scared and tightened her grip of hands around his neck)
N: akshara kuch nahi hota, apni aankhein band kar lo…. (akshara was not able to say anything, she just hides her face in his chest, closed her eyes tightly, her forehead was tightly compressed…..)
Both were hanging on rope and few feets down was the pond… waterfall was coming near to them, actually they were going close to it, few droplets of water start falling on them, they have to pass this waterfall coz rope was tangled in that way….. soon they were in between that waterfall, both got wet, water was falling on them…. naitik was enjoying very much, akshara was still very scared… somehow they crossed the fall… naitik mumbled in his ears…
N: akshara mujhse aur nahi sambhala ja raha apko, meri grip loose ho rahi hai…. bachao akshara, bachao… nahi to dono marr jayenge….. akshara mere haath choot rahein hai…
A: naitik (terrified) nahi…..  she start screaming…. naitik also shouts
N: akshara sambhliye………. aaahahhhhhaahhhhh
A: (hearing his shout) aaaahhahhahhh……..
From his hands rope slipped and they fall down…. (hee hee hee darr gaye???)
They fall down on ground, actually they reached at the end point of rope, they passed that Pond…… naitik opened his eyes and looked at akshara on whom he was lying… he slightly slapped her face…
N: akshara…. Aankhein kholiye..
A: (opened her one eye, then both the eyes) naitik mai marr gai kya???
N: haan apka bhoot baatein kar raha hai mujhse…
A: acha bhoot itne khoobsurat hote hai…
N: (slapping her tightly) ohh mrs bhootni, aap zinda hain, bilkul theek hain bhagwan ki daya se, uthiye ab ice cream khaane chalna hai na???
A: kyaaa mai zinda hun, ap sach keh rahe hain???
N: ap din pe din pagal hoti jaa rahi hain….
A: (still lil scared) ek to bina bataye mujhe iss jaanleva raaste se le aaye, rasta bhi kahan tha rassi thi, dekhiye abhi tak dhadkane kitni tez tez chal rahi hain….(she put his hand near her heart) aur keh rahe hain ki mai pagal hu
N: lekin maza to aaya na.. (standing up, then helping her to stand)
A: kya maaza aaya,saare raste meri jaan sukhi rahi, aur kapde bhi gile ho gaye hain…
N: kuch nahi hota akshara sukh jaenge
A: hmmmm ab chale
 And both start walking….
Soon they were in front of shop, a smiled played on her lips, she quickly rushed in shop and took her favorite ice creams …. And came out holding 4-5 cups in hand… settled on one chair and opened her first cup…. Then looked at naitik…
A: apki ice cream kahan hai???
N: (looking her cups) zarurat nahi padi lene ki….. (akshara didn't ask further, enjoying her ice creams in that chilled weather… )naitik was admiring her, she was so engrossed in eating that she didn't know when naitik had taken her photos in his cell… he was smiling at her childish act..
After spending 1 hour there, they start walking for their home…but suddenly it started raining heavily .
A:oh no naitik baarish shuru ho gayi hai.ab kya kare? chaliye ice-cream shop k andar chalte hai.
she ws abt 2 go wen naitik held her hand.
N:rukiye na akshara.dekhiye kitna achha lag raha hai.
A:par naitik hum bimaar pad gaye to.chaliye andar chalte hai plzzzzz.
naitik refused 2 go.
A:thik hai apko nahi aana hai andar to mat aaiye.mujhe bimaar padne ka koi shok nahi hai.main jaa rahi hu
Naitik holds her by her waist n said:main jane dunga tab jaegi na aap.
A:par naitik ........
N:sssshhhh.................
he came closer n kissed on her cheeks.akshara blushed.d song started playing in d background.
yeh saajish hain boondon ki koi khwaahish hain chup chup si
(akshara starts walking, naitik followed him and was few steps ahead from her, face to face, and , … naitik was continuously starring her)
yeh saajish hain boondon ki koi khwaahish hain chup chup si
(and slightly pulled her towards himself, she gets curled in his arm, her back was facing him, naitik caresses her arm with his fingures, akshara slightly hit him in his tummy and rushed, then turned back)
dekho na dekho na dekho na dekho na
(akshara and naitik now immersed  in each other, naitik hands were clutched at the back of her waist and akshara's hand were around his neck)
hawa kuchh haule haule zubaan se kya kuchh bole  kyon duuri hain ab darmayaan
(naitik kissed her on her cheek, then both hugged each other tightly)
dekho na dekho na dekho na dekho na
(naitik rolls akshara slightly from her arm such that her back was facing naitik, naitik entangled his hands in her arms, bumping his head into her and swinging right and left…. was lost wondering if akshara was not in his life then what wud happen…)
phir na hawayen hogi itani besharam
(akshara caressed his cheeks with deep love, then slightly pushed him and move back)
phir na dag mag dag mag honge yeh kadam
(now naitik from back holds her from her waist,then pulls towards him, kisses on her neck,)
haa saawan yeh seedha nahi khufia bada
(naitik now moved both of his hands on her waist, akshara put locks of her hands around his neck,)
kuchh toh baraste hue keh raha
( naitik lovingly kissed on her eyes, she blushed  )
samjho na samjho na samjho na samjho na
( naitik moved his lips near her ears, whispered with his breathes, akshara shivered when his breathes passed from her ears to heart )
hawa kuchh haule haule zubaan se kya kuchh bole
(  naitik raised her chin with his hand , she was looking down, then hides herself in his chest, naitik  smiled and hold her tightly  )
kyon duuri hain ab darmayaan
(  naitik pulled her closer, his hand was in the center of her tummy, his face was touching her face, then he bends down and kissed her shoulder-arm joint,)
dekho na dekho na dekho na dekho na
(akshara jumped into his arms, he lift her up, and took many rounds, akshara hold him tightly, their heads were touching each other, naitik kisses on her forehead n then bith hugged each other n got lost in their own world)
d rain stopped n dey realised dat dey were standing in public place n got separated. naitik again asked naughtily dat from where she want to go now, she thinks a bit then…
A: waise apka shortcut bahut hi bekaar tha, par waha se hum jaldi pahunch jayenge to wahin se chalte hain….
N: (smiled) matlab aapko maaja aaya wahan se aane mai…. (putting hands around her waist… akshara didn't reply but smiled)
dey again reached d waterfall .akshara holds naitik and naitik holds d rope tightly .akshara this time didn't closed her eyes, was looking around enjoying the sights, when they were in between the waterfall, she slightly opened her palmed and took water in her hands.. laughed, then raised her head and let the water dropped on her face…. she was that much excited that she start shaking her legs but again that made her suffer…. Her sandals fell down….. she mumbled ohh shit, ohh shit…..
A: naitik rukiye mere sandals gir gaye hai….
N: akshara.. (laughing) haan bas abi gaadi ko rokta hun, phir niche jaakar ap sandals lekar ayenge aur phir seedha uppar milenge….
akshara makes a face…
A(in a sad tone): wo mere favorite sandals the…
N: to  kam dance karna tha na… yaad rakhna tha ki ye dance floor nahi hai….
And they were on other side, naitik detangled from rope… akshara thinking ab mai kaise jaungi, yahan to bahut kaante and soon felt that she has been lifted up by naitik…
A: naitik ap mujhe kab tak yun utha kar challoge, rasta bahut lamba hai…
N: no problem madam, rasta to aapko dekh kar kat jayega aapki pyar bhari baahon mai…
A: ap mujhse itna pyar kyun karte hain???
N: simple ap mujhse itna pyar jo karti hain….
A: ap sabke answers itna ghuma firake kyun dete ho??
N: kyun mai khud hi ghuma fira hua insaan hun…. (akshara kept on smiling and talking
Like this they reached at their house)
N: dekha maine kaha tha na rasta yuhin kat jayega bas ap saath honi chahiye….
A: wo to mai bina kahe hi apke saath hun… har pal ke liye…..
They entered in their room n akshara went 2 take shower n den changed d clothes.naitik also changed n both lied on bed holding each other close.soon they both dozed off as they got really tired after this adventurous but rememberable walk.
hope u all enjoyed it.

Posted: 13 years ago
awewwwwwwwwwwwwsome 👏 👏 👏
lovelyyyyyyyyyyyy   😍 😍
how romantic 😳 😳 😳
honeey and bhavya
Posted: 13 years ago
wowww!!!! honey n bhavya u both r superb writers yaa!!!
this oneshot was sooooooooooooooo romantic...super good
loved it to the core...ttly awesome...havent read anything so romantic!!..woww...their adventurous walk!...lovely concept...all the adjectives in the world for this one! 😊
omg...im out of words right now...it was jus excellent!..i thorughly enjoyed myself reading it
u both rock!
thankyou for such a wonderful surprise honey..
love you both :)
Edited by Drishti... - 13 years ago
Posted: 13 years ago
Woooowww!!!
AWESUM , FABULOUS, mindblowing  oneshot yaar...👏👏.
it was Surprising...n it was soooooooooo romantic...
loved it..😳😳😳
Gr8 work ya...keep it up gals....👍🏼👍🏼
Thanks for the PM mahi..🤗


Posted: 13 years ago
Very nice.Last para was too good
Posted: 13 years ago

awesum yaar...........fantabulous.......cant say much as it was toooooooooo good👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

Edited by divi4u - 13 years ago
Posted: 13 years ago
absolutely fantabulous , very very very romantic  very well written and nice song selection this was my fav. till date! keep writing more ....you two can really bring a magic effect ! love it ! scenes were all put together very nicely ...........hats off to you 2 !
Posted: 13 years ago
wooooooooowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww.............awesome gals!!!!!!!!!.👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏....u guys are fabulous!!! ⭐️it was amazing to read it!!!!!!! gud going!!!👍🏼
Posted: 13 years ago
aree wah honey aur bhavyzz dono ki mili bhagat toh bahut achi hai superb awesome freaking update
Posted: 13 years ago
Omg...😃
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NaKsh ka Tarzan Versions

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Awesome Attempt Bhavz & Maheen
 
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