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Posted: 12 years ago
#81
mahi
lots of hugs and thumbs up(sad,i only have 2).i am just loving the flow of d stry.keep it up:)
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Posted: 12 years ago
#82

Part -2 sidelining the differences

1] Hmm!!! nice small Run-down of what happened😳...kinda...recap...the first sentence...nice little trick👏... y don't you have a Formal Recap at the start?? So that even if it takes long time between two updates people wouldn't be lost...about the story...😳

a) Am confused😕...how can Sam trust someone so easily😡?? After Ruby...🤔 Or how could Dean NOT trust someone so easily like Sam😕? ...i can imagine Dean glancing now-n-then towards the direction Emery was😆...nice visuals⭐️...

2] Aww 'Sammy'...again...it kinda soothes me whenever i hear Sammy😃...particularly in slow Texan drawn out fashion Dean says...although the boys are from 'Kansas' ... am i making any sense😕?? Probably no😆...And am happy that Dean is Not "hiding" things...And keeping it bare on the board...hmm he likes...He says...So...he dislikes..he says so...nice little detail⭐️ ...and that Struggle and all that effort makes dean's character continuous with previous developments😳...nice thinking dear👍🏼...but does he have to do ALL those things🤔?? Like really😡?? Can't he just accept and move on like Sam did🤔...seriously this boy will drive me crazy with annoyance😡...

3] "He didn't want Emery around. End of story."That had nice ring to it😃...i can't point out why😕...but liked those 2...sentences⭐️ were...nice...hope it makes sense??😳 ...does it😕??

4] Oh...Come On!! Dean is acting impossible😡...what he is? 5🤔?? Y he is being so much stubborn😡?? Come on he is throwing tantrum now🤪...can't he understand that this inexplicable behavior might hurt some one🤔...oh wait...that's probably Sam's job to be considerate...is it😡?? What did emery do😕?? Ate him😆?? Or sat on his shoulders😆?? Seriously Dean needs a rap on his head😡 😡!!

5] I can imagine dean kneeling down near the body while Sam is at the other side😃...when Dean raised an eyebrow

6] Shut Up Dean😡...it's high time you give respect to a lady😡...grrr if i were emery I would have slapped Dean for his apparent idiotic behavior🤔 ...and i can imagine Sam giving a pointedly-there- he- goes- again look🤣...

7] Wait...wait...i assumed that the body was still there😕...or it wasn't?? I mean the outline is drawn when the body is shifted to morgue right😕? So there is no scope of dean kneeling down as i said earlier😔...they were just standing near it?? Probably a hand inside a pocket for dean and a small note-pad and pen for Sam?😳...sorry i needed that clarification as i couldn't conjure up a proper visual...and it sort of helps in experiencing any write-up😳...and what was she look near the outline😕?? What facts she could possibly glean from that🤔??

8] Yeah...R.I.P Madison😭...

9] Ah...Sarcastic Dean😊...how much i love him😈...jokes apart...exactly it's been with the Winchesters😒...nothing comes simply to them...be it life or cases...not even women...😆

10] oh the actual problem is Dean's EGO😲!! But how could that be?...when he has loads of self-worth issues...and low self-esteem how can he be egoistic NOT to accept that someone apart from him is good and witty🤔?? I don't get that part..😕.

11] Now i got some idea on the position of Sam😃...that he was standing alright😎...but what about Dean and emery😕?? Hmm ... weird symbols😕?? Like the Amazonians😕?? That's interesting😃...

12] Dean...really😡?quit being picky will you🤔?

13] Oh so the body is taken care off!! Okay...now I got the answer for previous question😆...silly me...Good thing Emery is giving a taste of his own medicine to Dean👏...Good Going⭐️...Dean ican be such an Idjit😆...

14] Why is he so in Contempt of emery's gift😕?? And he even knows that he being the greatest hunter had pitfalls and shortcomings😡...can't he give her a break?? Sometimes I feel Dean is not dean...anymore...or at least the dean we knew is long dead and gone...😒

15] Am strongly reminded of Sam's "sick and tired..." dialogue...😆

16] Kids...*shakeshead* when will both Grow up?? Now it's rather funny...🤣

17] Good at least their senses came back😆...and it's so nice to see Sam back with his "No-Nonsense-Business-is-Important" attitude...always the studious😃...and earnest serious student of the lot😆...whatever may happen...true Man of letters..😉.

18] This also makes them WINCHESTERS...the thought about saving people is so ingrained into their DNA...no wonder the tag line goes..."Saving People...hunting Things..." and for including this flavor here (which according to me is THE moment of this Chapter) you get 2 ⭐️⭐️s 👏

MY VERDICT

It was a feel good episode😳...😲....i mean ...chapter😆😳...

nice continuity👏...barring few questions and confusions😛... it was great to read...⭐️

and as far as resemblance is concerned??...it's apparent in the first line of my verdict..😳

Thank you Mahi 🤗for letting me to keep my views in front of you...and giving me a chance to review your beautiful work..😳

Edited by lakshmi_3004 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#83

Originally posted by: lakshmi_3004

Part -2 sidelining the differences

1] Hmm!!! nice small Run-down of what happened😳...kinda...recap...the first sentence...nice little trick👏... y don't you have a Formal Recap at the start?? So that even if it takes long time between two updates people wouldn't be lost...about the story...😳

a) Am confused😕...how can Sam trust someone so easily😡?? After Ruby...🤔 Or how could Dean NOT trust someone so easily like Sam😕? ...i can imagine Dean glancing now-n-then towards the direction Emery was😆...nice visuals⭐️...

2] Aww 'Sammy'...again...it kinda soothes me whenever i hear Sammy😃...particularly in slow Texan drawn out fashion Dean says...although the boys are from 'Kansas' ... am i making any sense😕?? Probably no😆...And am happy that Dean is Not "hiding" things...And keeping it bare on the board...hmm he likes...He says...So...he dislikes..he says so...nice little detail⭐️ ...and that Struggle and all that effort makes dean's character continuous with previous developments😳...nice thinking dear👍🏼...but does he have to do ALL those things🤔?? Like really😡?? Can't he just accept and move on like Sam did🤔...seriously this boy will drive me crazy with annoyance😡...

3] "He didn't want Emery around. End of story."That had nice ring to it😃...i can't point out why😕...but liked those 2...sentences⭐️ were...nice...hope it makes sense??😳 ...does it😕??

4] Oh...Come On!! Dean is acting impossible😡...what he is? 5🤔?? Y he is being so much stubborn😡?? Come on he is throwing tantrum now🤪...can't he understand that this inexplicable behavior might hurt some one🤔...oh wait...that's probably Sam's job to be considerate...is it😡?? What did emery do😕?? Ate him😆?? Or sat on his shoulders😆?? Seriously Dean needs a rap on his head😡 😡!!

5] I can imagine dean kneeling down near the body while Sam is at the other side😃...when Dean raised an eyebrow

6] Shut Up Dean😡...it's high time you give respect to a lady😡...grrr if i were emery I would have slapped Dean for his apparent idiotic behavior🤔 ...and i can imagine Sam giving a pointedly-there- he- goes- again look🤣...

7] Wait...wait...i assumed that the body was still there😕...or it wasn't?? I mean the outline is drawn when the body is shifted to morgue right😕? So there is no scope of dean kneeling down as i said earlier😔...they were just standing near it?? Probably a hand inside a pocket for dean and a small note-pad and pen for Sam?😳...sorry i needed that clarification as i couldn't conjure up a proper visual...and it sort of helps in experiencing any write-up😳...and what was she look near the outline😕?? What facts she could possibly glean from that🤔??

8] Yeah...R.I.P Madison😭...

9] Ah...Sarcastic Dean😊...how much i love him😈...jokes apart...exactly it's been with the Winchesters😒...nothing comes simply to them...be it life or cases...not even women...😆

10] oh the actual problem is Dean's EGO😲!! But how could that be?...when he has loads of self-worth issues...and low self-esteem how can he be egoistic NOT to accept that someone apart from him is good and witty🤔?? I don't get that part..😕.

11] Now i got some idea on the position of Sam😃...that he was standing alright😎...but what about Dean and emery😕?? Hmm ... weird symbols😕?? Like the Amazonians😕?? That's interesting😃...

12] Dean...really😡?quit being picky will you🤔?

13] Oh so the body is taken care off!! Okay...now I got the answer for previous question😆...silly me...Good thing Emery is giving a taste of his own medicine to Dean👏...Good Going⭐️...Dean ican be such an Idjit😆...

14] Why is he so in Contempt of emery's gift😕?? And he even knows that he being the greatest hunter had pitfalls and shortcomings😡...can't he give her a break?? Sometimes I feel Dean is not dean...anymore...or at least the dean we knew is long dead and gone...😒

15] Am strongly reminded of Sam's "sick and tired..." dialogue...😆

16] Kids...*shakeshead* when will both Grow up?? Now it's rather funny...🤣

17] Good at least their senses came back😆...and it's so nice to see Sam back with his "No-Nonsense-Business-is-Important" attitude...always the studious😃...and earnest serious student of the lot😆...whatever may happen...true Man of letters..😉.

18] This also makes them WINCHESTERS...the thought about saving people is so ingrained into their DNA...no wonder the tag line goes..."Saving People...hunting Things..." and for including this flavor here (which according to me is THE moment of this Chapter) you get 2 ⭐️⭐️s 👏

MY VERDICT

It was a feel good episode😳...😲....i mean ...chapter😆😳...

nice continuity👏...barring few questions and confusions😛... it was great to read...⭐️

and as far as resemblance is concerned??...it's apparent in the first line of my verdict..😳

Thank you Mahi 🤗for letting me to keep my views in front of you...and giving me a chance to review your beautiful work..😳



wow, mahi will be superthrilled with this PHD analysis of her work... 😆
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Posted: 12 years ago
#84

Originally posted by: flutterby



wow, mahi will be superthrilled with this PHD analysis of her work... 😆

lol dear i have already done that before for chap 1 and yeah she was happy...
am glad i can make others happy😳

and its Ph.D not PHD🤔
and this my standard STYLE of Feed back😆
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Posted: 12 years ago
#85
@Jyo - Thank you sooo much! :)

@L - First off, thanks again for taking all the time to write such a detailed feedback!! I'm gonna reply to few of your points because the rest I totally agree with :)

1) I'll try and do a recap before every chapter. Thanks for the suggestion!
a) It's not really about trusting, it's just that Sam has always been the rational one and the arguing wasn't taking them anywhere so he suggested working together. Trust me, he's not just going to blindly trust Emery. As for Dean, he has always been the skeptical one. He always gives the people he newly meets a hard time until he gets to know them...

2) Same here!! I loveee the way Dean says Sammy, makes me tear up every single time. I miss it now.. I think you're referring to him being hard on Emery? Well, that's in his character.. as we have seen before. Remember how rude he was with Cas..until he got to know and trust him. It's just the Dean we know, it's in his nature to be skeptic.

4) Hahahaha I was laughing reading this. But Dean can be a little harsh. He means no real harm but you know his sarcasm.. he does throw a tantrum when he doesn't get his way.. he just doesn't want to work with Emery.. esp. when he doesn't even know her.

5) There's no body there. The body was moved a couple of days ago.. curently there were only marks on the floor that CSU team makes before moving anything so they know the original placement of everything.

7) Sorry if that was confusing. As I imagined the scene, all three of them were standing for the most part, kneeling down for a few moments to observe the marks but that's it.

10) No, the part is not Dean's ego. The way I see it, it's two things 1) he doesn't trust people easily. He has just met Emery and pretty much has no reason to trust her yet. 2) She reads auras and that makes him super uncomfortable. Even when Sam had his premonitions, Dean wasn't too comfortable with that and now just having some stranger around who can read auras is something Dean is not comfortable with.

You're most welcome, L, thank YOU for taking the time to write such a detailed feedback! 🤗

@Flutter - Yes! I am always thrilled when people write long feedbacks! The writer in me loves that ;)
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Posted: 12 years ago
#86

Originally posted by: -Mystery-


@Sayanti - Oh, please don't worry about it yaar.. Life happens. Read and comment whenever you get the time :) Thank you for noticing Emery's bond with Sam.. it's one of my favorite parts of this story! Not sure about Dean hugging Emery but there's definitely more of them in the next update ;) Thanks for reading and commenting!!



😃😃 hehe😉😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
#87
but still mahi why though??😕
why is dean uncomfortable?🤔
what possibly can happen?? ...
that dean is so uncomfy? 🤔
does he fear something??😆
like someone might know his feelings or somethin??😕😆

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Posted: 12 years ago
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@L - As I said, it's various reasons. Dean doesn't trust easily... in fact, he never does. Since he doesn't know anything about Emery, he's very skeptical. Plus, the fact that she can read auras. Remember even Sam had complained when he had those powers that Dean sometimes looks at his as if he's a freak. Dean's the kind of a person who always keeps his feelings bottled up inside. We've complained about it several times no.. that he gives himself such a hard time. Only if he would just let it all out but he doesn't. So having someone around who can read his feelings is obviously an issue with him.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Mystery-

@L - As I said, it's various reasons. Dean doesn't trust easily... in fact, he never does. Since he doesn't know anything about Emery, he's very skeptical. Plus, the fact that she can read auras. Remember even Sam had complained when he had those powers that Dean sometimes looks at his as if he's a freak. Dean's the kind of a person who always keeps his feelings bottled up inside. We've complained about it several times no.. that he gives himself such a hard time. Only if he would just let it all out but he doesn't. So having someone around who can read his feelings is obviously an issue with him.

i see what you say...😳
still Sam can always guess what is going on in dean's mind no...so wouldn't it be in best of interest to have or make him talk...or pour out all his feelings ...?? and if emery proves good at that than many...then y don't he gives it a shot??
@bold : you are so true...i hate Dean for this baggage he wears on his soul we never got the "let out " scenario in the show...
so are you planning on it in your FF😉?? or are you gonna stick to the SPN way as it is shown??
i know probably its impossible to imagine Dean's action reaction and body language in the let out scenes cos we never have seen it...
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Posted: 12 years ago
#90
^ There's an answer to all of those questions in Part 4. Keep reading 😉
Edited by -Mystery- - 12 years ago

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