|AsYa(KaBhi)|Vivah: Part 9 Updated! 3/26 PG.70

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Hafsa

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Posted: 10 years ago

#171

Originally posted by: anopama
NiceAsad finally made his entry
Love the update after all it is one of my fav movie
Sorry to hear u r not getting much likes
But I guess the readers aren't anxious to read as they know what will be happening next
So vivah was a full Hindu traditional movie with the family love and relation
But ur characters u have kept them as Muslims so like certain things don't flow for me
Like maa and babuji should be ammi abbu
Jiju should be bhaji it is nice to see tanveer and zoya has a nice relation for a change
Razia a witch as always
Like Asad being a loving adorable son especially to hi father but I don't see him as a guy saying papa he is more of a dad guy if he is modern or an abbu if traditional
And not bhaiya he should say bhaijaan and him putting his lap in his bhabi lap is not Asad
They could have still have tht convo and tht closeness he could just hold his Bhabhi hands and talk to her
Anyway waiting for more hope u get the ideas u r looking for from ur readers
Make some changes but not too much to change the whole story
Continue soon

yes he did!

thanksss!

yes 😭 hehe

yeah i though if the same

i am changing the story a bit, adding more scenes

thanks for your suggestion

i updated parts and changed them from papa and babu ji to ammi and abu

already updated 😊

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Hafsa

@hafsaraza

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Posted: 10 years ago

#172

Originally posted by: aseelashah
Great update
love it

Thanks!!!

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Hafsa

@hafsaraza

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Posted: 10 years ago

#173

Originally posted by: sahibasharma
lovely...really like the shy zoya...
cont soon

Thanksss!

haha

will do😊

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Hafsa

@hafsaraza

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Posted: 10 years ago

#174

Originally posted by: Chahanya
It was a nice update
Smiling all through
Asad lost in Zoya mirchi kha bhi leta
This ladka ladki first meeting is always so sharma shami wala
I liked it
Asad sach mein accha hai told her about so many things
Marriage ke liye meeting mein koi bolta hai i liked a girl but kabhi bolne ki himmat nahi hui ho jati toh she would have been your first GF kya
Liked it but would want to see some changes was trying to picture AsYa but Shahid and Amrita kept on blocking my imagination

Thanksss!!

😃

haha

yes it is, i hope im not like this when i meet my Asad 😳

yeah he did, he didnt want problems in the future

hahaha😆

Sure, check your PM and haha i will try to change it up a little maybe not make them engaged in this meeting and hold it off till next week and make them meet more than once

Asad and Zoya meeting and texting each other? and someother things ?

Let me know ?😃