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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: mochhug

FINALLY unresed on 22 😆

Please don't hurt me *hides*


Thank you, just read your comment :) and I know how you feel. I made quite a few people sad reading part 4.

Chapters 5 and 6 are almost complete. I've been writing them simultaneously.
Uni and work are pretty hardcore this semester hence I've been taking my time.

I could never hurt you lol. You're so sweet. Totally adorable 😳🤗


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Posted: 12 years ago

I'll leave an excerpt of chapter 5 and chapter 6 for all on here for now until I update which is soon.

Thank you for being patient.

😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
For now I will leave you all with an excerpt, a few passages from chapter 5 and 6.
Chapter 5 deals with Asad's flashback from chapter 4 which is a recollection of his birthday surprise. Chapter 6 is about Zoya, and ... well this part deals with the woman in the pink and red saree at the bus stop of chapter 4 -- the woman Asad perceives as Zoya in the rain at the bus stop and so this chapter deals with her point of view ... and that is all I want to say about chapter 6 for now.

Apologies for the delay, thank you all for being so patient and I will update both chapter 5 and 6 in full on here soon.



Here's a small passage from chapter 5:

Chapter 5
Memory

------------------------------------------------------ Asad's Flashback ------------------------------------------------

A million and one thoughts flooded Asad's mind. A frenzy of panic overpowered him as he clutched the envelope in his hand close to his heart. His eyes damp threatened to spill all the pain afflicting his contorted mind. He could not move from the spot where his feet were transfixed, what he perceived as chains that fastened his feet to the floor constricted his movement. He didn't take a moment to think or collect his thoughts, he had to hurry, he didn't know why but he had to. He broke the shackles he felt hindered his walk and sprinted his way out of his office in a panic stricken frenzy. He was one always known to be overprotective where Zoya was concerned and for that matter all logic flew out the window because he didn't even read the note that he left on the office table. The words collaged to the envelope were sufficient to drive him into senseless anxiety. The words flashed before his eyes over and over again- I'm sorry but it's pivotal that I tell you this ... as he sprinted down the stairs towards the coffee house hoping she hadn't travelled too far from there. He sprinted through the glass revolving doors, suppressing the salty cry that pierced his lungs in agony.



And a small passage from chapter 6:

Chapter 6
In the Shadows

She was sat straight up in bed, staring into the darkness of her room, a room that she had yet to acclimatise with. Its walls and interiors did not comfort her or provide her warmth, then again nor did her bedroom back in Lucknow - the home that never made her feel at ease, it too was a stranger to her. She raised her hands to wipe the tears that brew and fell uncontrollably from her eyes and with her trembling hands she reached for a glass of water from her bedside table to quench the thirst the nightmare had brought on. She gulped water uncontrollably, her hands shaking the entire time as water splashed from the glass onto her and the duvet cover. She placed the glass back down on the bedside table with trembling hands because she was not in her comfort zone just yet. The water did not quench her thirst nor did it put out the flame that burnt sorely in her chest. She ran the palms of her hands over her hair pulling back on the strands disconsolately wiping the sweat drops on her furrowed brow because she could not collect her thoughts. She decided to pull off the blankets and made her way to her suitcase which was yet to be unpacked.

It had been a long day for her and she was too tired and also drenched from the rain on arriving in Bhopal to settle in and unpack her luggage. Bhopal was an alien city for her where she felt hostile because she didn't know anyone here and considering the intimidation her nightmares already inflicted upon her, she felt she needed to stay guarded in Bhopal, guarded from everyone in the city, she could not place her trust on anyone, not until she could find the answers her troubled mind was seeking so passionately. The answers she desperately needed resolving before she took a step into her new life back in Lucknow. A new life she felt she was not quite ready for, not just yet because there was this persistent calling that she saw in her sleep amongst the shadows of her nightmare-cum-dream, a calling that had brought her to Bhopal, a calling like a fire's encompassing flames that would not cease to end burning cold-heartedly until she found the answers she avidly searched for. Possibly answers to her past that were now a distant memory, memories that she did not remember.



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I will keep you all posted. 😳



Edited by Ambreen83 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
absolutely lovely. can't wait to read the whole thing. I understand how life hurdles everything, take your time but do update soon.
Love.
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Posted: 12 years ago
Hey... I just came across this and i had to comment...😃
This is absolutely brilliant👏
Very well written and the concept is wonderful...
As i completed the 4th chapter i had so many questions but i'm sure as i read your next updates they would all be answered😃
If you are sending out pms could you please send to me aswell, I would really appreciate it...Would love to read your story till the end...I have sent a buddy request.
Navi...
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: NAVI55

Hey... I just came across this and i had to comment...😃

This is absolutely brilliant👏
Very well written and the concept is wonderful...
As i completed the 4th chapter i had so many questions but i'm sure as i read your next updates they would all be answered😃
If you are sending out pms could you please send to me aswell, I would really appreciate it...Would love to read your story till the end...I have sent a buddy request.
Navi...


Awww that is so sweet of you Navi. Thank you for your compliments 🤗 :)
In that case I will try and get the next two updates completed and posted before mid November. They are almost finished but I need to find time this semester to review and complete chapters 5 and 6, so I'll keep you posted.

Buddy request accepted and I will PM you.

Fatima aka Ambreen

x x


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Posted: 12 years ago
Loving the concept :) at first I was a bit confused but I get it now
Please pm me when you continue and please update soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
Note this is the recap but for Chapter 5 part A ... scroll down the page.

Hi All 😳


So finally I'm updating this story and I will shortly upload part of chapter 5 following this post.

I need to warn in you in advance that chapter 5 is very long and this is just part A of chapter 5. I'll upload chapter 5 part B in a few weeks time, when and if time permits me to do so.

A quick recap:

So chapter 1 dealt with Zoya's feelings, her memories of New York and her making plans for Asad's birthday and she enlisted the help of Ayaan, Dilshad and Najma. For the purposes of this story Najma is not married.


Chapter 2 dealt with Zoya's birthday breakfast treat and a flashback into the promises she made when she returned to Asad after the Tanveer fiasco. It ended on both of them leaving for the office whilst Dilshad and Najma were left to deal with the birthday preparations.


Chapter 3 revolved around the car drive to the office, Asad and Zoya's banter and Zoya leaving for the coffee house. Asad on the other hand progressed onto his office but was dumbstruck and heartbroken at the envelope and note Zoya had placed in his handkerchief.


Chapter 4 takes an eleven month leap into the future, Zoya doesn't 'exist' and Asad is heartbroken but one evening on his walk home from the office, in the relentless rain of the Monsoon, he sees what he perceives as Zoya at a bus stop but before he could get to her she is long gone.
Asad, not able to calm and collect his thoughts, runs home and takes the envelope and note out from his drawer, reads it a million times in desperation for some solace. He drifts off into sleep and he enters a flashback.

The chapter I am uploading shortly is chapter 5, part A.


Chapter 5 will deal with the flashback mentioned in chapter 4. The flashback recollects his birthday and everything that transpired and gives you the details of her note and the birthday plans.

For Chapter 5 Scroll Down the Page.



Once again I want to apologize because chapter 5 is tediously long and hence I have decided to break it down into parts, and part A is now in the process of being uploaded.

Love,

Fatima aka Ambreen




Edited by Ambreen83 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
RES!!!!!

Okay this is embarrassing. It's not even an update and I resed 😆

But still.

Thanks for the recap hun! And waiting patiently for chapter 6

Normally I'd insist you keep the chapter whole, since I like long updates, but what I like MORE than long update is FREQUENT update 😆 So I'll say RIGHT ON! 😃
Edited by mochhug - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago


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