OS ' Because Of You'. Chapter 7 & epilogue, page 77

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tanubag

@tanubag

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#501

Lovely update.

Keep rocking with ur writing.

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lovely_nikki

@lovely_nikki

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Posted: 11 years ago

#502

Originally posted by: chitsri65
Your honest introduction took my seriousness away. The characters that spoke at length -- am sorry I saw U😆..U truly have a sense of humour which must be used to the fullest potential. Hoping to get an OS based on humour.

Coming to update - I enjoyed the entire chapter. The way Aman conveyed the message thru text was a good one.Yash allowing himself to explore the depth of love towards Arti was well expressed ... more the importance of her and Arpita's place in his life. Am not going into detail - overall good update.

Nikki - every writer is different - sense of detailing need not necessarily mean - you lack to explain it in one sentence - it simply means your story / character needs description. What is important is using your imagination and allowing it to dictate the mood/feelings and keeping the reader engaged . You are doing just that.

Waiting for the final part. Take care 🤗

I admit that I've a nice sense of humor, and I'm more of a naughty type of person, than a serious one. But I still feel that writing one or two funny sentence is easy. But to write an entire OS based on humor, is still not my cup of tea.

But then again it also depends on my mind. Who knows what it'll come up with and when. That funny interview was supposed to be a serious write-up and I ended up writing it with humor and it turned out to be funny. So imagine what I'll end up writing, if I start to write a funny story 😆. And it's fine if you don't write a detailed comment, you leave that part to me, as I love to write everything in detail 😆

In this OS, Aman's part is very small. But since after I posted this chapter, I want to work on YAMR, which I'll start once I finish this. In YAMR I'll show more on Aman's character and Arpita and Aarti's place in Yash's life. In that I'll show in more detail, how Aarti is different from Arpita. And why exactly Yash fell in love with Aarti 😳

Thanks for always encouraging me and giving me the much needed push 🤗. I love to write long updates and in detail also. But the only problem is, long updates takes too much time. And I can't post a update until I'm at least 70-80% satisfied, with what I've written.

Final part I'll start to work on it, after I update MTB chapter next, on which I've to start working soon. It'll take me time as that'll be a very important chapter.

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kmfan_2

@kmfan_2

Sparkler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#503

Unreserved my comment on page 69😊

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palbhar

@palbhar

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#504

Thank you Nikki...what a fantabulous update!!!! Loved the emotional confession by Yash... if they had this scene in PV,all of us would have swooned...totally paisa vasool!!!!
Nikki, I know I speak for many others...if you need to write a few more updates in your wonderful style, we all will have no problem as you always make it worth the wait!!! Can't wait for more Aarya romance!!!!!!

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lovely_nikki

@lovely_nikki

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Posted: 11 years ago

#505

Originally posted by: kmfan_2
Hi Nikki,🤗
You took me on an emotional ride...one that I wished would never end...What a beautiful update that was...my net was down in the early hours so I caught up with the update on my tablet later...but I had to sit down for a proper comment on this very well written and heart touching update...👏

Every character was given it's due space and oh how much I love friends like Aman ---perfect with the right timing of being there and exiting the scene after having given Yash the needed hint to proceed with such a fantastic confession...so dreamy and I truly believe that nothing could flatter a wife more than those soothing words told by him ( her husband) --- straight from his heart...to hers...with just we the readers to feel their love...in it's purest form...
⭐️

Aarti too tried hard to stay in that state of pretending to be asleep maybe...I don't know it is just a guess for these words..the longer heard...were acting as a balm to her...
The more...the better...

What a lovely scene dear...I think that was the pivot on which this update stood...Excellent! 👏 ⭐️

SP's words -- how often heard on Telivision and films and how rare to find such real characters exist in reality...But kudos to you for bringing that out...at the end of the day...daughter - in - law is a daughter (and I would say the same of a son-in-law too though it wasn't needed in this update...)

As far as Ishita is concerned, I share Aarti's views mainly because I don't think I would be comfortable in seeing someone suffering this much for whatever they may have done..
Hope it wasn't that bad a punishment for her...(keep that mind for me at least in your last update...only if you wish to...)

I have written a long comment that I am not used to...Hope you are happy...

(My writings are short and brief as I can't write and express my thoughts the lengthy way...one reason for my not being heard too many a time... ) Am trying to write longer ones with each effort of mine...😳

Love you dear and keep up the great work!😃 ❤️ 🤗

Omg Shanti, a long comment from you, for the very first time. You made my day 🤗. It's not that You made my day by your long comment, but it's because of what you've commented.

Shanti, you all know my craze for detailing. It gives me satisfaction. But frankly speaking it drains me out and stresses me so much. But on the other hand, I can't post the update till I'm at least 70-80-% satisfied. So I'm back to writing long updates 😆

This whole OS (besides MTB) is one emotional roller coaster ride for me also. I so wanted to see such intense scenes between AarYa in PV. In this chapter I wanted to show/ write so much more on other characters also, but couldn't do it. Some of it I'll show in the next one, some I won't write.

I wanted to see Yash speaking from his heart for at least once, tell Aarti how he really feels about her, felt about her since long and what she means to him.

Actually I forgot to write on how she was feeling, while she was pretending to be unconscious and he had started to confess. But I showed it later when she's awake. You are so right, nothing could be more flattering than to hear such heartfelt confession from your spouse.

Regarding Ishita's punishment, I was debating on what to show. Had I shown a milder one, then many would've felt disappointed, as they wanted to see her punished severally. Plus I didn't want to kill her also. But letting her off the hook so easily, will mean that she might come back in future, so I decided to go with it. I know it sounds way too harsh, but given the circumstances, I felt this was right.

Even I didn't wanted it to be too harsh, that's why I made Aarti say, what I, myself wanted to say.

On what SP said, I honestly feel that in-laws always say that they'll treat their DIL as a daughter. But in reality very few of them actually do it. Luckily my in-laws have given me all the freedom. Respect doesn't mean that you have to cover your head, and oblige obediently. But for me Respect is something that should come from the heart.

The result of what SP said, well I'll show it in the next chapter, which will be related to Paridhi and her job.

OMG now I've written such a long reply to your long comment 😆. Ok I've written this reply when I've started to feel sleepy. So I don't know if I made any sense or not 😆

Love you too, for always being there for me ❤️ 🤗

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lovely_nikki

@lovely_nikki

Inactive

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Posted: 11 years ago

#506

Originally posted by: Folla
thanks for the PM dear amazing update finaly yash confesse his love waiting the next update and who come to meet aarti

Thanks Folla 😛

I was waiting to write this part, where Yash will confess his love for Aarti. Finally I did it. So I'm very happy today.

Next update, will hopefully come soon, but after MTB update 😳

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lovely_nikki

@lovely_nikki

Inactive

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Posted: 11 years ago

#507

Originally posted by: Surish

Thank you Surish 😳

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lovely_nikki

@lovely_nikki

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Posted: 11 years ago

#508

Originally posted by: sb1410
Hi Nikki read the update and love it, Yash's confession ⭐️ he went all out that was very much needed 👍🏼 Aarti's reaction 👍🏼 I love reading long updates they way you write is unique, sometimes the little extra detail makes the story more interesting.
This Os has many scenes which we all wish was there in the show you give us the pleasure of experiencing the last days of PV as we all hoped the Cv would have explored the story but they rushed it and left us the fans disappointed.
Thank you for sharing eagerly looking forward to the next update
Ps sorry for the short comment but these days brain and fingers refuse to cooperate 😃

Sharlene, first of all it's ok if you can't write long comments. Your commenting is more important than the length of the comments 🤗

I'm in love with the whole AarYa scene of this update. . Starting from Aarti pretending, to Yash start confessing. To his emotional meltdown and their hugs and finally their kiss

I so wished to see all these scenes in the actual PV, but we all know how they butchered the beautiful story by showing that pathetic track for more than two months 😕

Next and hopefully, last chapter will have more of AarYa romance so get ready for it 😳

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lovely_nikki

@lovely_nikki

Inactive

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Posted: 11 years ago

#509

Originally posted by: saf24
Such a beautiful update Nikki. Yash is beside himself with worry while Aarti is scared to face him. Through Aman's help though Yash finds out that she is awake and he sets about telling her everything that he has kept hidden in his heart for her. It was an absolutely beautiful confession. The family then comes in with all the outstanding issues being sorted out and SP changing his stance on his daughters in law, now making them his daughters. Can't wait to see what is in store next.

Thanks Saf.

When Aarti fainted, that moment he actually realized that he won't be able to survive without her. Though he knew it in his heart all long, but the fear of loosing her, came when he actually almost lost her.

Like the doctor said that if she didn't gain consciousness within next few hours, it'll be a matter of concern. That's why he was worried so much.

Aman always proved that he's a true friend, and he did the same here also.

Next update will come after MTB update, on which I'll start to work soon 😳