HeartBeat-kriyaansh OS

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hey guys back with another os..this time on Kriyaansh..i dunno y this came up in my mind...cant e1 say enjoy...its sad...not much too talk...sorry havent proof read...but please do comment n like... 😊

Play this in the background: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4N_UxqHuJYY

here i go..
HeartBeat- Kriyaansh Os

Rey came out of the RH after a rigorous dance routine, wiping off the sweat on his face with the sweat bands he wore on his wrist. As he walked towards the boys locker room, he experienced that feeling again. That dizzy feeling. He stopped suddenly as his hands shot up to his head, and he pressed his palms hard against his head, as if to reduce the pain. His vision went blur for a few moments. He sat down on his knees for a few a while and took a few deep breaths. A while later, he was fine so he got up and went about doing his work. His work...what was he going to do? He couldn't remember where he was headed. He glanced down at himself. He was wearing his white vest and black track pants. "boys locker room" he murmured to himself as he remembered where he was headed and shook his head, as if disagreeing with his forgetfulness.


He opened the locker and ruffled through the papers to find his phone. He had forgotten to carry it with himself to the RH. FORGOTTEN again! A paper fell down. He bent to pick it up. It was a photograph, he realized. He couldn't remember putting it there! But wait, this time, maybe it was because he did not want to go through that feeling again...that feeling of helplessness, of pain, betrayal...he mentally scolded himself for using the word BETRAYAL. She wouldn't betray him; HIS BAATCUTTER!

Sure what she'd done to him had hurt him but feeling betrayed was just not the right thing. He somewhere always felt that she had done it all for a reason. Whenever he remembered that pre-valentine's night, he felt as if he could see the pain in her eyes as she said all those hurtful things. Coming out of his thoughts, he flipped over the photograph he held and smiled to himself..he had guessed it right...it was their photograph...of the last pose of their dance Radha Kaise Na Jale. He kissed the photograph and placed it back inside, this time making sure he would see it clearly whenever he opened his locker. It was as if he was struggling to keep every little memory of hers' close to his heart; as if he was too afraid to lose those memories as well.

Finally he remembered that he should have been looking for his phone. but he couldn't find it. He frantically looked around in the locker room and his eyes fell upon his bag which he carried it to the RH. It contained his water bottle, a small towel which he used to immediately wipe off his body sweat after his dance, his laptop and a few dance CD's. He looked inside the bag hoping that his phone would miraculously appear there saying "please Universji...usme mere aur baatcutter ke kitne saare pics the..please usse ghuma mat do...i should have created a back-up of the pictures on my laptop...silly me!" and funnily it did apear there. Even funnier he thought he hadn't put it there when he actually had. "mera ghajini ho gaya hain aaj-kal..short term memory loss" He sighed and laughed at his own Oh-so-lame-joke and kissed his phone. His wallpaper was one of her pictures. He caressed it with his thumb. But his view of her face was disrupted with a messgae flasing over it. *New text message from Swayam.*

And he remembered again...the gang was supposed to meet at the basketball court at 8PM. It was a friendly girls v/s boys match. Friendly? Nah...sharon and swayam were out on a date a few days back when they had been discussing random things. Unluckily for swayam, he'd said that the guys of their college played the best basketball. The volcano that she was, Sharon immediatelty protested saying the girls were equally good. They had come back, arguing. Well, Swayam wasn't arguing, he was trying to convince her that she got him wrong. Trying because Sharon wouldn't let him speak. And then they joined the gang and told them and the rest as they say is history...

He glanced at his watch. It was 5 minutes to 8. He quickly ran towards the BB court, he wouldn't have to change afterall. As he reached, he heard Simmi saying... "Rey ne toh pehle hi haar man li...poor guy..." he rolled his eyes and walked over to them and stood next to swayam.

"Rey i have to talk to you, in fact all of you...abhi...please iss match ko side pe rehne do..." swayam said

"kyu darr gaye?" sharon said in a mocking tone.

"Think what you wanna...but its improtant" he said in a dead-serious tone. everyone realized the seriousness in his voice and they all sat down forming a circle in the middle of the BB court.

"par talking about what you are?" neha asked.

"dude... wahi toh woh bol raha hain na..." vishakha poked neha who in turn made a funny face at her.

"guys, please.." nil shouted, startling everyone

"shoot, swayam" said vicky

"ok i have this friend called Sunaina" swayam started but was cut off by everyone's ohhh's while Sharon held his arm possesively, making swayam and the rest of them laugh.

"ok now enough...so Sunaina lives in...uhm well, Dehradun" he glaned over at Rey, whose expression changed immediately. He leaned forward, suddenly interested in the conversation, knowing it was gonna be about her.

"Sunaina knows..." before he could complete Rey completed the sentence "Kriya". there was a sudden uneasiness in the air as everyone looked at Rey who smiled at Swayam, waiting for him to continue.

"It wasn't her fault" Swayam's voice was suddenly very low as he continued "uski mom ko pata chal gaya tha about her dance and uhm..about her and Rey..so she gave her this ultimatum...to support her team one last time for the footloose elims and leave Rey and dance forever". there was hushed silence as everyone looked down, ashamed at themselves for thinking negative about her. Swayam continued "sunaina knows kriya since her school days..maine thode dino pehle unki ek picture dekhi on a social networking site...well that is where exactly where Sunaina and I met, just virtual friends..anyway what i saw left me baffled...Kriya looked...as if...as if she was just living for the heck of it. like there was no life in her body" he finally let a lone tear escape his eyes. Rey got up and picked up the basketball, and tried shooting but he couldn't focus.

"rey...tum thik toh ho na?" Rinni asked.

But he didn't reply. As he tried again, that feeling came back to him; the same feeling he had been experiencing over the past few months. His vision went blur and the pain shot up in his head again and before he could do anything, Rey fainted.

Two months later at Dehradun

"maa, main Mumbai ja rahi hun" Kriya said as a matter of fact.

"tum kahi nahi ja rahi ho" her mother replied.

"main poochh nahi rahi hun maa, main bata rahi hun" she stuttered through her words, trying to keep her composure

"kyu, main pooch sakti hun?" her mom spoke with authority

"enough maa, is baar aap meri life rule nahi karenge...I just spoke to Sunaina and...and..maa aap bhi chalenge mere saath"

"tum mujhe order de rahi ho?"

"jo bhi samjo"

"Kriya..."

"mom please, ek aakhri baar Rey se milna chahti hun...uhne pata hain sab sach maa...bas ek baar woh mujhe dekhna chahte hain..aur main unki last wish puri kar ke hi rahungi..chahe aap mera saath do, ya na do"

"Rey, tum usse nahi..ek minute..kya kaha tumne? Aakhri wish?" smirti too shuddered as she realised Kriya's words, praying it was just a slip of tongue. Afterall, she wouldn't want this to happen to anyone..not even her enemy.

"haan maa..." and kriya fell on the floor crying.

"kriya...kya hua usse?" her mom asked, placing her hand over a trembling kriya

"Sunaina ne bataya...do mahine pehle...Rey ko Swayam ne sab sach bata diya tha...Swayam knows Sunaina..and Rey suddenly fainted" she cried harder "jab unhe hospital leke gaye...toh the doctor conducted a few tests...CT scan karvaya..aur pata chala ki..."

"ki what kriya?"

"unhe brain tumor hain...its carcinogenic-...la--last sta-ge..they have tried everything maa...sab doctors..all over the world...but...maa pl-ease le chalo be-fore". smirti's eyes widened and her hand shot up to her mouth, to stop a shocked gasp from coming out. She held her daughter as she cried.


A few days later.

"haan Swayam, main Mumbai mein hoon...haan maa bhi hain...kaunsi hospital?". Smirti heard Kriya talk on the phone. Sure, she was shocked to hear the news, and she hated to imagine what Kriya would be going through but she felt proud for once at the fact that Kriya hadn't cried since that day, she was proud that her daughter was so strong. Obviously with what she had done, she had removed every emotion from her soul.

it took them two hours to get to the hospital, what with the heavy Mumbai traffic. As the taxi halted, Kriya quickly ran, not even waiting for her mom while she payed the taxi fare, fearing she would be too late.

And as she ran, tears continuously flowed down her cheeks. She saw her gang. They sat outside the ICU, looking glum. She feared the worst and ran faster. Swayam saw her and the next minute, she had flown into his arms, crying, coughing, hiccuping.

"main..bahut..buri.." she began to say

"No kriya, don't" sharon placed a hand over her shoulder.

as she broke the hug, she looked at everyone.

"rey, kaise hain?" she asked

her mom too came by now

"Kriya..woh..kisiko bhi pehchanta nahi hain..we have to keep telling him who is who...and he just smiles...usse koi bhi yaad nahi hain" vicky said and cried in Neha's arms.

"nahi...no..Rey..mujhe nahi bhul sakte..." she said looking straight.

simmi moved closer to her and placed her hand on her shoulder. "Kriya, the doctor said he doesn't have much time...go..go see him one last time.." she encouraged her to go. Kriya moved towards the door quickly and flung it open. Her heart wrenched seeing him like that. His head was bandaged, probably from all the surgeries. He had an oxygen mask covering his nose and mouth while horrible looking needles pierced through his skin, supplying blood. She moved inside and sat on her knees. Others too followed her in. She covered her face with her palm, to stop herself from making any noise. Sharon slowly lifted her up and placed her arm around her shoulder.

"rey..rey dekho kaun aya hain" Sharon said, nudging him slightly, not wanting to hurt him.

Rey opened his eyes and saw a few people had surrounded him. He couldn't remember seeing anyone. 5 boys and 4 girls stood in front of him, and along with them stood a lady in her 40's. He glanced at the girl who was talking to him and tried to recognize her. when he couldn't he shut his eyes.

"rey..main sharon..tumhari best friend?" she choked on her words. kriya was standing behind her. Rey looked at Sharon and smiled gratefully for reminding him. He could see someone behind...god what's her name..yes, sharon! he tried to get up and glanced but another boy placed his hand on his shoulder asking him not too. he looked at the boy now..he wore funny-printed pants and a bright t-shirt and his eyes were bloodshot red. It was vicky, his childhood best friend, if only he could remember his name!

Sharon slowly pulled Kriya ahead and made her stand next to her. Kriya couldn't look up at him. "rey..isse pehchana?" sharon asked again, knowing he wouldn't remember.

Kriya slowly looked up at him and their eyes met. For a moment his heart beat fastened. Everyone saw it on the machine. He then tried to get up but when he couldn't he indicated her with his head to come nearer. She bent down and placed her hand on his chest near his heart and then took his hand and placed it on hers'.

Smirti sank down, seeing her daughter like that, while swayam held her.

"i love you, Rey...humesha karti thi aur karti rahungi...aap nahi bhule na mujhe?" kriya didn't choke now.

He looked at her and then at his oxygen mask indicating her to take it off. She did so and he tried putting his head up near her ear with all his strength. she bent down to help him. She could feel him struggling to talk and shut her eyes as a few tears ran down her cheeks.

"Baatcutter" he said finally. HOw could he forget her! She owned his heart! Kriya looked at him and smiled through her tears. everyone in the room smiled. As she cried, he shook her head wanting her to stop... she touched his cheeks softly and she could see his cheeks going pink. The next second he shut his eyes.
There was dead silence in the room, as everyone digested that he was gone.

"linecutter" kriya screamed and fainted. everyone quickly moved towards her.
Neha ran out to call a doctor. Smirti tried to check Kriya's breathing but couldn't feel anything. She felt her pulse, her hands trembling, and she kept calling out her name. everyone stood there frozen.

It was then that Smirti remembered something. She left her hand and sat down, folding her legs, as she tried to react. When she had taken kriya back to dehradun, Kriya had said "maa, main apna dil Rey ke paas chhod ke jaa rahi hun...aur main unse bahut pyaar karti hun...aur woh bhi mujhse...aapko prove karke hi rahungi...aap nahi manenge yeh baat alag hain maa...but maa, hum dono ka dil toh ek hi hain...and isiliye hum dono is duniya se bhi ek hi saath jayenge".

The End
will be waiting for your comments...positive, negative comments r welcome. And sorry to leave you'll sad if i did.
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kuhu_Arsha thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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me 1st yayyy

hey it was mindblowing update,,,,,,,luv it
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Edited by kuhu_Arsha - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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its an awesome OS...very emotional
you made me cry..it was very painfull😭 but you have described kriyansh love in very beautiful manner
loved it too core
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It was awesum babes..
loved it ..! gr8 OS
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Posted: 13 years ago
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u made me speechless!!!!
Grt work...
Loved it...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Amazing OS 👏
really sad nd it made me cry 😭
haaye kriyansh ko maar daala 😭
nt new fr me, maine bhi aise hi kiya tha 😆
no wrries bt really beautifully written

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Posted: 13 years ago
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kya yaar tune toh ruladiya but loved the update it was super awsomme mannn
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you made me cry,,,it is an awsome update
thanks for the pm
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Amazing Update ...
Loved it a lot..
This was superb one..
too emotional..
they both met each other...
Gosh...Smritti finally realised their love but its too late..

Thanks for pm...

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Awesome so emotional
But I am touched

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