Weekened Retreat 5 specialscene pg10 NivrenManiacs

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hi all,

Here we go with another retreat.. !!!

My dear Nivrean Maniacsss

So here we go !!!

Scene 1 page 1
Scene 2 page 1
Scene 3 page 2
Scene 4 Page 4 [on the road to Tattapani]
Scene 5 page 5 [Tattapani]
Scene 6 page 6 [Dalhousie]
Scene 7 Page 7
Scene 8 Page 8 [paragliding]
Break ~~ a special scene page 10
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Weekend Retreat 5

"You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back."

Scene 1

The warm rays of the sunlight pass through the window glass shield, slightly messaging his forehead. Viren pulled his blanked up to avoid the warmth hitting his eyes.



Viren! Ut jao , 8 baj gaye hain. Kaam per nahi jana ?


Niveditha who was dressed up, stood besides his bed hold a tray of coffee.


Viren stirred and pulled of his covers from his face. His hair was disheveled and eyes barely opened.


Nivi meray saamnay hona thum… he asked speaking while trying to stifle a yawn with his knuckles in his mouth.


Nivi shook her head with a smile


Han hun, abh ut jao.. she said.


Viren sat up and opened his eyes, to find the most radiant face in front of him.


Niveditha, jara paas aao na.. said viren


Niveditha raised her eyebrows skeptically but went closer..


Viren took the tray from her hands and placed it towards his left,

Meray paas baito na.. saath coffee peethay hain.. he said


Viren …niveditha started


Mujhe kaafi kaam hai , said viren finishing her sentence ..


Han mujhe pata hai, thumnay bhi na ek hi dialogue ko ratta mara hai.. kafi kaam hai, kafi kaam hai, viren complained to her , putting up an angry face.


Niveditha enjoyed his childlike stubbornness, she shook her head , deafeated and sat besides him.


Acha , bolo kya baat hai.. she asked him.


His face lit up and not willing to loose the opportunity he said,


Maine ek wonderful , awesome, brilliant .. amm.. mindblowing.. I mean kya kahun ..


With every praise from his mouth, her nostrils flared with annoyance ,


Viren.. apni tareef karna band karogay aur point per aaogay ki nahi? She retorted annoyed.


Acha acha , Ek plan banaya hai. Bataun? He asked , with his eyes lit up brightly, looking directly into her eyes.


Niveditha nodded her head…

Viren then took her hands into his, and brought her closer towards him and started whispering something in her ears.


Niveditha's smile brightened with every moment ,


Vah viren , ye tho vakay main hi, awesome, brilliant, mindblowing plan hai.. she said moving away from hima nd getting up lekin thumnay ye baat meray kaan main kiyun kahin? Yahan tho koi nahi hai.. she asked him


Ithnay acha idea socha hai maine, kuch tho consellation prize honi chahiye na, thumhari nazdeeki sey zyada acha , aur kya ho saktha hai , he replied with a smirk on his face.


Viren thum bhi .. she said with a line of frustration appearing on her forehead but she could not suppress a smile on her face…


Abh mujhe vakay main hi jana hai., thum fresh hoker please neechay jaldi aajana, she said.


She then turned around, and walked away from the room leaving viren gazing at her …


As soon as she disappeared from his vision he shook his head and smacked himself lightly on the back of his head with his hand ,


Abh , plan ko execute kernay ka time hai, romance ka nahi, he continued talking to himself . He then got off the sofa, threw the pillow and blanket on the bed and left to the showers.


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Posted: 14 years ago
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will read n coment..Thnx😳
Really cute....eagerly awaitin nxt part
Edited by Sofna - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Suchi's Weekend Retreat, YIPEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!! I am so excited. Thanks dear. 🤗 Love you for this! And, a great start. Eagerly, awaiting the next scene...
Edited by Excruciating - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Lolz Suchi brilliant scene. I was smiling through out. Tu bhi na CT ki tarah ho gayi hai, left us hanging at suspense. Can't wait to see what's brewing in Viren Sood's mind. (or should I say yours 😉). Thanks for doing this for us Nivren crazy girls.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Scene 2

The dining table was set for the breakfast, with bhupat rai siting at the head of the table on his wheel chair. Yashodhara was sitting on his right, putting butter on the bread. Sidharth sat on his left with divya standing besides him, pouring hot tea into his cup.


Thanks Divya, he said


Abh thumb hi bait jao he pulled the chair besides him backward, making space for her to sit.


Ma main aaj thora late aaunga, so please wait nahi kijiyega aur time per sojayiyega.. Sidharth said to Vandana.


Kiyun? She asked


Kaam.. he replied politely,


Lekin sidharth, project to start honay main abhi tho 2 hafthay ka waqt hai na? bhupat interrupted.


Han dadaji , lekin main sabhi departments ki supervision personally kerna chahtha hun. Aur viren bhi ye project join ker raha hai tho usko bhi meri zaroorat ho sakthi hai, sidharth answered to with bhupat rai nodded in agreement.


Niveditha, thum bhi bait jao, said vandana kindly


Viren aa jaye, chachiji.. she said lowering her voice and gazing towards the other end of the room


Just then viren entered and sat on the table besides vandana


Good morning everyone, he said cheerfully


Everyone in the room smiled at his greeting and returned it back graciously.


Mom dad kahan hai he asked out loud?


Voh bhi athay hi hongay, vandana replied and soon enough both chanchal and jawahar also took their seats.


Ok good , I have an announcement , called out viren


Everyone looked up at him.


Dadaji ki teekh honay ki kushi main, maine ek idea socha hai..


Voh kya hai? He paused after saying this waiting to relish the curiosity that had been created in the room.


Voh ye hai.. he paused again..


Oh come on viren , said sidharth, abh bolo bhi


Viren smiled and said,


Maine humari puri family kay saath


…… one-week -Sood' Family Road Trip plan kiya hai…


his announcement was greeted with silence…

He looked around to gain some sort of reaction


Kya hua? He called out!



Oh wow said divya , being the first one to speak!


Viren what an idea?? She exclaimed


Hai na..! viren replied gladly ,


Lekin sidharth humara project start horaha hai , hum is waqt kaise ja sakthay hain? Said sidharth thinking into the situation seriously


Oh come on big bro! one week road trip! Aur project tho 2 week thak commense bhi nahi honay wala. Saray details tho aapko uskay baad hi milengay na, ussey pehlay humari staff sambhallegi , aur maine tiwariji kay saath arrangement ker liya hai, voh aapko daily progress ki reports bhi bejthay rahengay.. he said all this in one breath.


Looking at his readiness sidharth laughed out loud


Thumnay tho wakay main hi sahih tarah sey plan banayi hai viren, tho main kaise mana ker saktha hun. Aapka kya khayal hai dadaji, he asked bhupat


Then a sudden thought came to his mind,


Lekin viren, dadaji travel kaise ker sakthay hain , han voh teek ho gaye hain lekin kya travel kerna unkay lliye sahih hoga?!Sidharth asked seriously


Bhai, aap viren sood say deal ker rahe hain, aisa ho hi nahi saktha ki main kuch plan karun aur usmay koi kharabi ho…


Viren said pulling his collar up..

Follow me!

He indicated to all in the room.


They all followed him outside including bhupat rai who was helped by sidharth.

Out stood in front of their pathway a beautiful, huge, luxurious Recreational Vehicle.



Everyone's eyes lit when they saw the RV.

Our one week Dream Vehicle , Viren exclaimed out loud!

Main aap sabko isko tour detha hun and I am sure, ki issey dekhnay kay baad , kisi ko bhi ayetraz nahi hoga, so big bro, pehlay aap,

Step right up! he pulled sidharth inside , who was followed by the rest of the family except dadaji who stood outside with lalji smiling at viren's excitement and feeling content , that at last his family had to started to get the feel of togetherness.


This is the infamous drivers seat, !



Sid's eyes widened with surprise!

and this

is the inside sitting!



chaliye chaliye baitiye .. get into the feel!!

and this , he continued is the mobile entertainment ,




An all comfort master bathroom



The kitchen , he urged everyone to follow him


So.. kya khayal hai aaplogon ka? he asked everyone,

Divya started clapping at his wonderful idea, and everyone agreed in unison that they are willing to go on the one week road trip

Even yashodhara who was skeptical about bhupat's travel saw that the entire vehicle had enough space to fit a sports car , agreed that indeed viren had come up with a good idea.


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Posted: 14 years ago
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Loved the idea of road trip. We wanted this from so long. I liked the RV too. 😉 Let's see Viren Sood kya gul kilate hai Road Trip mein. Can't wait for next scene.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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WOW Suchi what amazing, mind blowing scenes. I loved how u also included the pictures, it felt like i was there with the soods as well😃. Thanks hun for doing all this, i love u. Cant wait for the next scene.

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Oh boy, this is going to be some weekend retreat guys!! Suchi's gone all out with this road trip idea. Loved the RV. Thanks dear, for including the pcis as well. Helps us in visualizing the scenes better, not that, your brilliant writing wasn't already doing that..
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Wow... Too good.... 😊

Plz continue

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