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Posted: 15 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: kshre25
Awesome as always, looking forward to the next one! Your short stories are one of the things that actually, I think keeps most of our hopes up with the triangle track.
Just a quick request would it be possible to post the links to your short stories in this one and moving forward. I've read them all but sometimes its hard to find them. Also, for those people who haven't read these, it'd be easy for them to find it. 😊

SD..even I was going to suggest the same thing as kshre. This way it all your stories can be found at one place.And for us to know that you have updated the story, simply edit the subject like-ArMan in Switzerland(Part 4/Pg. 3). 😊

Edited by devashree_h - 15 years ago

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Posted: 15 years ago

#12

Ok...I will write the forthcoming scenes in this post only. By the way, I am again pasting part 1, 2 and part 3 here. Thank you friends for your appreciation. I never knew I am a writer that too in Hindi. Thanks again.

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Posted: 15 years ago

#13

Part One

ArMan win the shiest couple of Mumbai and win a trip of 6 days and 7 nights to Switzerland. Here are some of the scenes, which we can imagine.

1. Just after checking in the resort and having a bath, they just go for a short walk. They come across a couple in a street kissing each other passionately in public. Manav gets excited and wants to do something with Archana.

Manav- Ji
Archana-Ji
Manac-Woh
Archana-Ji
Manav-Main keh raha tha ki
Archana - (thinks that Manav ko yeh public kissing achhi nahin lagi aur woh wahan se jana chahta hai) boliye na
Manav- yeh jo couple hain yeh kitne..
Archana- Besaram hain yehi kehna chahte hain na
Manav-(Manav was trying to tell yeh jodi kitni bindaas hai aur enjoy kar rahi hai kisi ki parwah na kar ke. par archu ki baat sunke woh baat badal leta hai) haan kuch is tarah hi hain.
Archana-( sochti hai ki Manav ki mann ki baat usne padh li. ab woh kabhi bhi Manav ke haath public mein pakdegi tak nahin)
manav-(Archu ki khamoshi dekh ke darr jata hai) dariye mat..main itna ganda nahin jo aapke sath...
Archana-( soch rahi hai ki kaash Manav thoda brave hota aur uska haath kam se kam pakad leta abhi) hmm..mere sath kya..
Manav- ( aur darr jata hai kahin Archu ko bura na lag jaye) main keh raha tha ki main to bedroom mein bhi aapke sath aisa karne se pehle dus baar sochunga...( ek saans mein aankhen band karke bol dalta hai)

2. They come back to their room and sit near the window. They see a swimming pool and hot babes in bikini. Manav ka mann karta hai kaash Archu aise kapde pehen ke kam se kam bath tub mein uske sath nahaye.

Manav- Ji
Archana- kya ji ji laga rakha hai?
manav-( smiling) achha thik hai. Archana..ok
Archana- haan boliye na manav

( ek doosre ka naam leke dono itna sarma jate hain jaise ki abhi pighal jayenge. BT wale gaane bajane lagte hain sathiya tune kya kiya)

Manav- Main keh raha tha ...
Archu- kahiye na
Manav-woh
Archu- boliye na
manav- bath tub mein...( aur aage bola nahin ja raha usse...pasina pasina ho gaya hai)
Archu- bath tub mein paani bhar doon..aapko nahana hai?
Manav- nahin mera matlab hai aap..
Archu- fir aap
manav- matlab tum
Archu- Haan paani bhar dungi na main
Manav- ( aankhen band karke ek saans mein lehta hai) tum un swimming pool wali ladkiyon jaise kapde...( aage bol nahin pata)
Archu- ( sochti hai manav yeh puchhna chahta hai kya woh aise kapde pehenti thi ya usse pasand hain) nahin Manav...aap kya keh rahe hain main yeh gande kapdon se hamesha door rahi hun...
Manav- (darr jata hai) nahin main keh raha tha ki kitne gande kapde hain aap ko bhi bura lagta hoga dekhne mein . bahut jyada gande hain yeh kapde.( manav ki awaz kaamp jati hai yeh kehta kehta)
Archu-(kehna chahti thi ki aap chahen to khaas aapke saamne main yeh pehene sakti hun. par ab manav ko hi achha nahin lag raha hai to woh kyun pehne) aap ko bhi bure lagte hain na yeh costumes..yakin kariye main yeh kabhi nahin pehenungi..

3. 11 pm now. Both are talking.

Archana- Pata hai Manav
Manav- bolo
Archana- meri ek saheli apne honeymoon mein switzerland aayi thi. maine puchha tumne kya kya jagah dekhi udhar.
Manav- haan bolo na jagahon ke naam. hum kal se woh sab jagah jayenge..
Archana- usne kaha usne bas kamre ki chhat dekhi..
manav-kahin gaye nahin ghumne
Archana- ( sarmake) gaye the par woh jyada tar room pe ruke aur
manav- aur
Archana- shayad resort ka kamra itna sundar hoga aur chhat decorated hogi to
manav- is liye chhat dekhti rahi
archu- ( sarma jati hai aur chup rehti hai. mann mein kehti hai yeh manav bhi na buddhu hain)
manav- (ab samajh mein aata hai miyan biwi din bhar bed pe lete the)

(manav ab batti bujha deta hai aur dono duniya ke sab se jyada sarmile tarike se kya karte hain yeh aap imagine kar lijiye.)
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Posted: 15 years ago

#14

Part-2
After a partly successful night, Archu and Manav go for sightseeing and enjoy the breathtaking visuals. Take a lot of snaps. It's around 2 pm now and Manav wants to go back to the hotel and do something meaningful.
Manav- Ji
Archana- phir Ji ji kyon manav?
Manav- Kya hai na archana who aadat nahin gayi. Shaadi ke 3 saal tak hum ek doosre se anjaan bane rahe. Kabhi kareeb aane ka mauka hi nahin mila. Yeh dooriyan abhi tak gayi nahin ..
Archana- ( sochti hai kal raat sab kuch karne ke baad aur khaak dooriyan hain) kya manav aap bhi na hamesha depressing baaten karte rehte hain. Ab hum sath hain na. ab aap se mujhe aur mujhe aapko koi judaa nahin kar sakta.
( dono senti ho jate hain. Manav ke kandhon pe Archu sar rakh ke aankhen band kar leti hai. Aur manav archana ko bahon mein bhar ke emotional ho jata hai. BT wale gaane bajane lagte hain Pavitra Rishta'.tere mere mann ka)
Manav- (sochta hai..aare haan main to room pe jake kuch karne keliye bolnewala tha) wasie Archana mera ek friend hai na ..ek ladki ki baat keh raha tha
Archana- hum dono mein ab kisi doosri ladki ki baat mat karo na
Manav- are suno to. Ladki ki nayi nayi shaadi hui thi. Usne apni friend ko chitthi likhi. Ki uska pati use 2 min chain re baithne nahin deta
Archana- (samajh gayi manav koi ghisa pita joke sunane wala hai. Aur jaan bujh ke chhedne lagi use) kaise
Manav- usne likha tha ki mera pati mujhe khane nahi deta baithne nahin deta..kitchen mein khana pakane nahin deta
Archana- kaise batao na?
Manav- ( Sharma jata hai kyon yeh ganda joke suna raha tha woh. Par khatam to karna padega use)
Haan aur chitthi mein aakhir mein ladki ne likha tha sorry for my shaky handwriting
Archana ' ( samajh jati hai joke aur bina hase manav ko chhedne lagti hai). Matlab chitthi likhte time bhi pareshan kar raha tha pati uski patni ko
Manav- haan 'tum samajh nahin rahi kya..uski handwriting shaky kyon ho gayi
Archana- Aap samjhaoge nahin kaise samjhu manav. Uski pitaai kar raha tha kya woh?
Manav- (phas jata hai aur samajh nahin pata ki archu uske maze le rahi hai) nahin pitaai nahin..shaky matlab shayad tum samjhi nahin..likhte samay bhi uske pati usko pareshan kar raha tha
Archana- (sochti hai kitna sharmila pati hai mera) pareshan to main ho gayi manav. Aap jab tak kahoge nahin kya kar raha tha uska pati jo uske haath kampne lage aur handwriting kharab ho gayi, main samjhungi kaise?
Manav- ( ab bechain hoke awaz unchi karke kehta tha) are tum samjho na
Archana- nahin aap ko samjhana padega
Manav- (closes his eyes and speaks out at one go) woh uske sath pyar kar raha tha
Archana- Pyar karne se bhala koi pareshan hota hai? Main keh deti hun mujhe to har pal aapka pyar chahiye. Kabhi dil se mujhe juda na karna.
Manav- pyar matlab 'samjha karo na
Archana- pyar karne ke sath haathon ka kampne ka relation hai yeh to samjhao.
Manav-(pasina pasina ho jata hai) woh uske sath jabardasti pyar kaar raha tha (mann mein soch leta hai archu ko kabhi joke nahin sunayega)
Archana- Pyar bhala kabhi jabardasti hota hai
Manav- tum ne filmein nahi dekhi kya? Usko pyar karna hi to kehte hain
Archana- haan kai saari filmein dekhi hain maine, par ek movie mujhe achhi lagi sab se
Manav- kaun si?
Archana- Bheja Fry
( Archana hasne lagti hai aur Manav samajh jata hai itni der se Archana uski class le rahi thi. Dono ek doosre ke gale lag jate hain aur hasne lagte hain. Par ab bhi Manav hotel jane ki khwaish zahir nahin kar pata aur Archana uska haath pakad k ek barfili pahadi ki taraf le jati hai)

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Posted: 15 years ago

#15

Part-3
Archu and Manav reach the barfila pahad and do a lot of skating amidst snowfall. They are throwing snow at each other. Archu Manav ko khub chhed rahi hai, dauda rahi hai. Both are tired now, but Archu hai ki rukne ka naam nahin le rahi. Manav feels agar isi tarah exhaust hote rahe, raat bekaar jayegi. Kuch to energy bachani padegi. Manav muh fulake neeche jane lagta hai and Archana follows her though she wanted to enjoy more. Both come to a coffee shop below and take coffee
Archana- Kya Manav aap bhi. Kitna maza aa raha tha.dekho sab kaise maze leke khel rahe hain. Chalo na thodi der aur skating karte hain
Manav- Archana main thak gaya hun. Aur nahin hoga mujh se. thodi energy to bache!!
Archana- Kitni sundar jagah hai..hum dobaara switzerland thodi na aayenge. Aur snow fall..Manav..snow fall to dekho..kitna maza aa raha tha
Manav- hum thak ja rahe hain Archana
Archana- To kaun sa aapko aaj kaam pe jana hai..chhuttiyan manane hi to aaye hain
Manav- are bas yehi skating karne hi to nahin aaye na hum
Archana- Manav aap bhi na..thodi der aram kar lo fir chalte hain'
Manav- (gussa aa raha hai..par archana pe woh gussa kar bhi nahin payega) hmm par main soch raha tha ki resort wapas jake'
Archana- Kya karna hai udhar?
Manav- aram to kar sakte hain
Archana- offfffo manav aapko aram ke alawa kuch aur karna nahin aata kya'puri raat padi hai aram karne ko'.dinner kar lenge aur pure 8 hr so jana aap. Main bilkul baat bhi nahin karungi aapse na ki neend se jagaungi aapko
Manav- (sochta hai hey bhagwan aaj raat ko kuch nahin karna..bas dinner aur fir sona) archana waisi baat nahin. Sirf aram hi karne to nahin aaye na hum
Archana- ab aaye na line pe'aram to apni Mumbai jake kar sakte hain..switzerland thodi na aayenge do baara
Manav- Mera matlab hai sirf aram hi karenege kya raat bhar
Archana- abhi to bol rahe the 'main thak gaya hun..chalo abhi se ja ke kamre pe aram karenge". Waise manav aram karne keliye bhi koi energy bachata hai?
Manav- ( muh fula ke kehta hai ab) aur skating karni hai na fir chalo (uthke pair patak patak ke fir pahad ki taraf chalta hai)
Archana- ( taras aata hai manav ke upar aur has has ke kehti hai) are kahan chal diye..mujhe bhi le chalo na ( follows her)
(BT wale gaane bajane lagte hain. Is baar track change karte hain. " yeh ladka haye allah kaisa hai deewana")
Archana- ab rehne do baba gussa..chalo kamre mein chalte hain
Manav- mujhe nahin jana
Archana- areeeeeeeee'aap ko nahin jana..
Manav- ( muh udhar karke) nahin jana
Archana- itna gussa
Manav- gussa kaun kar raha hai
Archana- are itna gussa karoge to aur thak jaoge (hasti hai)
Manav- ( Sharma jata hai ki archu bas uske maze le rahi hai ) haan to so jayenge na
Archana- are hindustan se itna door Switzerland kya sone aaye ho ( andar has rahi hai bahut)
Manav- nahin skating karne aaye..snowfall mein dance karne aaye hain..chalo na
Archana- lagta hai gussa aise nahin jayega
Manav- gussa jane keliye puri raat padi hai. Main so jaunga tum mujhe disturb mat karna (manav yeh sab bolte samay aankhen archu se mila nahin raha hai)
Archana- so jaoge? To aram kaun karega?
Manav- ( Sharma jata hai)
Archana- waise manav aap ne bataya nahin aram karne keliye energy kyon bachana chahte the?
Manav- ab archana tumhe… '.
Archana- kabhi pyar karna kehte ho..kabhi aram kehte ho'(hasne lagti hai) ab khud hi bata do apni biwi ko ki pyar karna kisse kehte hai aur aram karna kisse kehte hai aur sona kya hota hai'.( unchi awaz mein has has ke manav ke seene se lag jati hai)
Manav- ( ab hasne lagta hai par sharmili hasi) archana
Archana- To kamre mein chalein?
Manav- ( Archana ko seene se lagate hue aankhen band kar leta hai)
Dono baahon mein baahen dale dheere dheere resort ki taraf jane lagte hain. Fir aage kya hota hai plz don't ask me. But I will of course tell whether it was better than their first night.

Edited by satyamdas - 15 years ago

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toshibelekar

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Posted: 15 years ago

#16

Hope, some of your story turns real in the SHOW too. We would love to see ARMAN scenes together, as you described.😍

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dilwar

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Posted: 15 years ago

#17

good to see three in one. waiting for more.

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Posted: 15 years ago

#18

Part-4

It is their third morning in Switzerland. Archu gets up early and trying to irritate Manav, who is still asleep.

Archu- Manav..utho na'( uski kaan mein ek dhaaga dal deti hai)

Manav- (jhat se uth jata hai) haan aai main paani bhar dunga. Tu mat jaa.

Archu- Are yahan Aai nahin hain na ki aap ko paani bharna hai itni subah subah

Manav- ji'aap aur yahan ( neend khuli nahin hai manav ki)

Archu- wah aap ki biwi aapke paas nahin rahegi kya?

Manav- ( dhyan mein aata hai ki ab dono ki shaadi ho chuki hai aur woh Switzerland mein hai)

Archu- Kya soch rahe ho?

Manav- Ji woh'.

Archu- tang aa chuki hun aap ke ji ji se..roz subah ji se start karte ho'aapko yaad dilana padta hai ki main aapki patni hun aur formality nahin chalegi mere sath

Manav- (smiling) woh Archana..mujhe yakin hi nahin ho raha hai ki tum meri ban chuki ho'tumhare bina itne pal gujare hain maine'( aankon mein aansoo aa jate hain)

( Archu Manav ke seene se lipat ke uske aanso pochhne lagti hai)

( itni subah subah gaana bajana padega soch ke BT wale pareshan ho jate hain. Par kya karein? Ekta madam ke orders hain, koi bhi romantic moment aaye, they have to play some music. Gaana bajta hai. Baahon ke darmiyan do pyar mil rahe hain.)

(Gaana khatam hote hote manav phir so jata hai)

Archu- Manav phir so gaye?

Manav- (aaknhen khol ke ekdum se bolta hai) JI'

Archu- hey bhagwan'abhi 10 min pehle hi to bataya tha main aap ki biwi hun mujhe ji mat kaho

Manav- woh'.

Archu- ab phir se mat kaho ki aap bhul gaye the ki hamari shaadi ho gayi hai '

( BT wale dar jate hain yaar yeh phir gale lag jayenge to gaana bajana padega. Ekta madam ke orders hain har baar gaana change hoga ab se.)

Manav- are nahin archana main thak gaya tha..is liye neend abhi puri nahi hui

Archana- main to itni thaki nahin

Manav- (sochta hai tum kyon thakogi . jo karna hai woh mujhe hi karna pad raha hai)

Archana- kya soch rahe ho?

Manav- kuch nahin bas soch raha tha ki kal din bhar idhar udhar ghume na is liye thak gaya ..skating bhi ki na

Archu- aap bhi na garrage se der raat ko aate the par kabhi thakte nahi the

Manav- (becomes a little smart) us samay seedha sote the na aake..ab to kitna kuch karna pad raha hai raat raat bhar

Archu- ( Sharma jati hai) badmash ho gaye ho aap'chalo main aap se baat nahin karti..na ki ab aap ko kuch karne ki zaroorat hai

Manav- ( sochta hai are yeh to bura man gayi) are archana ..sorry

Archana '( udhar muh karke leti rehti hai)

Manav ' ( sochta hai hey bhagwan ab kabhi aisi baaten karunga nahin archana se) suno na

Archana- ( khamosh)

Manav- JI

Archana- offo phir ji

Manav ' (laughing) tumhare gusse ka yehi ilaj hai'Ji

Archana- hatiye Manav..main aap se baat nahin karti

Manav- pyar to karti ho na'

Archana- tabhi to aap uska fayda utha ke mujhe pareshan karte ho'( muskarati hai)

Manav- Tum to keh rahi thi aaj boating pe jana hai us jhil mein..chalo tayaar ho jao

Archana- tayaar aapko hona hai

Manav- ohh'.tum naha chuki ho

Archana- aur kya?

Manav- Tabhi main kahun'itni sundar kyon lag rahi ho..

Archana- chalo hato aap

( Manav archu ko gale lagane ki koshish karta hai par woh use jabardasti bath room ke andar dhakel ke darwaja bahar se band kar deti hai)

Manav- (andar se chillata hai) are archana

Archu- kya hua

Manav- bura to nahin manogi

Archu- kya hai bolo na

Manav- woh'mere sath naha lo ek baar

Archu- ( Sharma ke gussa hone ka natak karti hai) chhhhhi gande'yehi sikh mili tumhe Switzerland aake

Manav- please na

Archu- main naha chuki hun Manav

Manav- iska matlab kal keliye ready ho na?

Archu- ( aur Sharma jati hai) aap din pe din bigadte ja rahe ho'.Vandu ko call karke bata dun uska bhai kitna bigda hua hai

Manav- us bechari ko beech mein kyon lati ho? Main varshu ko call karke puchhun maine kya bura kaha . apni biwi ke sath honeymoon mein nahane keliye hi to kaha woh bhi bathroom ke andar

Archu- to swimming pool mein nahane ke irada tha?

Manav- kal keliye tumhari haan hai main yeh samjhun na?

Archana- Mujhe nahin pata

Manav- kisi ne kaha tha ladki jab nahin pata kahe tab uski haan hoti hai.

Archana- jaldi nahake aao ..jhil mein tumhari khabar leti hun main

Edited by satyamdas - 15 years ago

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GHT_ArMan

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Posted: 15 years ago

#19

awwwwwwwwwwwwwww Cuteeeee....such a swt purchi poo part...n abt BT n ekta....so truee buddy😆luved it:)

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448368

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Posted: 15 years ago

#20

❤️...this is the most romantic one SD....chalo atleast Manav has also learnt the art of teasing...all credit goes to Archu n her nakhraas.....very sweet ....the BT part was really funny...Im sure Sushant n Ankita wld be 🤣 reading this.

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