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Posted: 10 years ago
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CHAPTER 9 (A)

KABHI KABHI...

I left Nandini's house with Cabir and Dhruv for my home and then Natasha called up me to inform that my parents had arrived. I took a reverse and started driving towards my parent's place. Cabir spoke.

Cabir- Uncle and aunty have come? You idiot you are telling us now... Bro, too much...

(Dhruv and Cabir looked at me a bit angrily..)


I was so happy to see them after such a long time and entered the house shouting at the top of my voice with excitement... "Dad, Mom..." Mom and Dad were there in their bedroom.

"Dad... Mom...missed you so much..." I was so excited to see them, that I went and hugged them tightly...

Dad and Mom- Manik, we missed you too son...😊


Cabir and Dhruv too hugged them... We all sat on the couch in their room... Mom again got busy in dressing up; she started wearing her jewelry...


"Mom aap log ready hoke kaha ja rahe ho???"


Mom- How can you forget Manik, we pre-ponded our tickets because of Mr.Dalmiya's son's wedding... Akshay, your friend...Jiski Haldi ceremony aap attend karne gaye thy (she teased me and everyone started to laugh on me)...


I looked at my dad with a grumpy face. "Dad, seriously... too much...you told Mom also..."


Mom- Your Dad doesn't hide anything from me...And, yes you are coming too with us... There is a small get together; Reena has invited only close friends with their families. It's a small family sangeet for relatives and friends... So, you are coming with us too...And FAB 5 too... Go get ready guys and be there by 1:30 p.m... And, I won't hear excuses...


My mom informed that families of FAB 5 were coming too except Aliya's Dad as he was in USA..." Mom no ways...vaise bhi Aliya and Mukti are going for some shopping..." I was least interested in it...Dhruv got a message and he called Aliya...


Dhruv- Hey Aliya, where are you guys shopping??

Aliya- What shopping Dhruv, we can't go; we are still at Nandini's place.

Dhruv- What Nandini's place, is she fine???


Aliya- She's fine...voh Akshay called up and bahut sunaya usne hum sabko, that we aren't getting involved in his wedding at all... So, we all decided ki isse pehle he gets more upset with us, we are going for the ceremony at his place...we are almost ready and would leave for Akshay's place in 20 minutes. You guys reach directly there...

Dhruv- Ok... Cool then we'll see you there...


I was worried coz girls were planning shopping and they were still at Nandini's place...Hope she was fine..."What happened?? Is Nandini fine???"

Dhruv- Ha Manik...Aunty even we'll get ready... they would reach Akshay's place directly...


"Ok...(I felt relaxed...) Mom informed Dhruv and Cabir that their outfilts are in my room, she had asked Ramesh to get them.


"Ok so what are we waiting for??? Mom we'll get ready in my room..."


Mom- Manik why are you getting ready ?? 2 minutes back you said you aren't coming with us???


I was looking here and there..."Mom you only said I have too and I can't give excuses..."

Mom- really? (She had a question mark and a teasing tone)

I was trying to hide my blush and my mom then said, "Boys, go get ready..." I chose a white Chinese collar shirt, black blazer and blue denims. I gelled my hair and came down and was all set to leave...I smiled when my mom came from behind and spoke.


Mom- Not bad, you all look really handsome... (Dad too joined)


Cabir- Aunty, thanks...but kisi ko sirf Manik bahut handsome lagta hai (he winked at me😉)...(And I was blushing...☺️) Aunty aur yeh baat realise karne mein she took soo many years...(My parents looked confused ❓ and I was trying to stop Cabir...)


(Cabir then narrated my morning 'door' conversation with Nandini to my parents...My parents were having a superb time laughing on me...)

Cabir and Dhruv- Voh gana hai na Aunty (and they sang)...


Kabhi kabhi mere dil mein khayaal aata hai

Ki jaise tu mujhe chaahegi umrr bhar yoohin

Uthegi meri taraf pyaar ki nazar yoohin

Main jaanta hoon ki tu geir hai magar yoohin

Main jaanta hoon ki tu geir hai magar yoohin

Kabhi kabhi mere dil mein khayaal aata hai (2)


After they were satisfied with the musical teasing session, we left for Akshay's place...My thoughts were just engulfed in Nandini's innocent eyes and her words were echoing in my ears..."I trust you...I trust you Manik..."


We reached Akshay's place... My parents were eager to meet Nandini, but they said that none of them would introduce her to us and would only tell her they too have come. They wanted to find her on their own... I got worried... I thought they were going to do a litmus test with her...


Dad- Manik, relax we know she is the right girl for you...just that I don't want her to be uncomfortable...Trust us...We won't let her know anything about how you feel for her... we know you need time and so does she...

I smiled and hugged my parents...


AKSHAY'S LIVING AREA


It was a huge place with only close family and friends...So, there was a set-up where all were seated in groups and a CHIT game was going on... People would pick up a chit and it would have another guest's name and a situation...


We all got seated and then I saw Nandini with her friends, I called up Devika and asked all of them to join us... Now, Akshay's all friends made one group (FAB 5 and Nandini's friends...,, Turn by turn people were getting situations... It was then Aryan's turn from our group... He picked up a chit.


Akshay's cousin brother (anchor)- Ok...So Aryan you have a chit saying pick the situation chit first.

He picked a chit from other bowl..

Anchor- HHmmm situation kya hai let's see...(The anchor opened the chit and read)...Well it is a simple dare where you need to propose a girl in this gathering, you think is and find beautiful...Simple sa dare hai...


Everyone was shouting Aryan, Aryan...Aryan immediately came and held Nandini's hand... I looked at Nandini and I was stunned she was smiling...I was soo pissed off...Cabir tried to calm me down as I was about to get up from my seat...

Cabir- Manik, it's just a game... Relax...


"Cabir, this jerk, he is going to propose Nandini, can't you see..." I was angry on Cabir... He held my hand tightly... Dad too saw my irritation and figured out that I was disturbed...He looked at the girl whose hand Aryan was holding and understood it was Nandini. His eyes told me to be quiet...


Aryan- Nandini here I go, a few lines said by Mr. Bachhan (He held his hands in his)-

Kabhi Kabhi Mere Dil Mein Khayal Aata Hai,

Ki Zindagi Teri Zulfon Ki Narm Chhaon Mein Guzarne Paate

Toh Shaadaab Ho Bhi Sakti Thi..

Yeh Ranj-o-gham Ki Siyahi, Jo Dil Pe Chaayi Hai

Teri Nazar Ki Shuaaon Mein Kho Bhi Sakti Thi...

Magar Yeh Ho Naa Saka, Aur Aab Yeh Aalam Hai,

Ki Tu Nahin, Tera Ghum, Teri Justajoo Bhi Nahi...

Guzrr Rahi Hai Zindagi Kuch Iss Tarah Zindagi Jaise,

Isse Kisi Sahare Ki Arzoon Bhi Nahi...

Naa Koi Raah, Naa Koi Manzil...Naa Roshni Ka Surag

Bhatak Rahi Hai Andheron Mein Zindagi Meri...

Inhi Andheron Mein Reh Jaunga Kabhi Kho Kar,

Main Janta Hoon Mere Hum-Nafas, Magar yuhi

Kabhi Kabhi Mere Dil Mein Khayal Aata Hai,

Aryan- So, Nandini what say???

I was losing it... Even if it's a game how dare he propose her.

Nandini- (She smiled and politely said)... Aryan if it had been someone else, toh mein jawab tak nahi deti and you know it...But since it's you so...

(Entire halll was waiting for her reply, and my nerves were dammm restless...I wanted to end this nonsense)...


Nandini- Aryan,


Achi Hai Tumhari Kalpana, Mujhe Apne Dil Ki Haqiqat Se Ru-Ba-Ru Kara Ne Ke Liye Shukriya..

Par Maaf Karna Tum Voh Nahi, Jiski Ki Thi Mene Kalpana...

Par Tumse Karti Hun Aaj Ek Vaada

Ki Tumhari Zindagi Mein, Ek Dost Ki Tarah Rahungi Hamesha Banke Sahara

Aur Kabhi Kabhi Nai, Rakhna Yeh Khayal Dil Mein Hamesha...


With her lines every single person clapped as loud as possible in the Hall on her reply. How gracefully she had denied it and yet didn't make the other person feel hurt. Aryan too smiled and they sat.


FAB 5 and My Parents looked at me with eyebrows up... I placed my hand on face and looked down to avoid them.


The anchor then called many people from different groups and from our group Dhruv was called and was asked to sing for Devika and he sang the song "DRAMA QUEEN"...

Amongst all friends, Nandini was most admired by everyone in the elderly section' of guests... Some were talking of getting their son's married to her and were asking for her details from Akshay's mom...One of the aunty's even went to the anchor to call Nandini and her son Rohit to dance together... But, Thanks to Reena Aunty she handled the situation...


Then after a couple of rounds the anchor came back to our group and he called Nandini...FAB 5 looked at me, I had finally removed my hand from my face and was blushing like a tomato...☺️


Anchor- Nandini, I must say you are a very graceful speaker...Ok, pick up the chit from the bowl.


She picked it up and on reading it the anchor smirked, I was just praying uss Aryan ka naam na ho bas.

Anchor- Nandini, ek kaam karo pick the chit from the situation bowl too... Then, I'll tell you whose name it is...


She picked up the chit and gave it to him. The anchor opened the other chit and began to laugh...Nandini gave him a confused look.

Anchor- Ok, Ok I am sorry...but, the thing is I am amazed how creative the wedding planners have been in giving situations... (Everyone was damm curious)...Ok, so, here you go ...


Nandini the SITUATION is aapko -

"THE, THE MANIK MALHOTRA" KI WIFE KI TARAH USKE PARENTS KI COMPLAIN MANIK SE KARNI HOGI ...


Nandini, me, my parents and in fact every single person was shocked on this creatively twisted dare...' Nandini was just looking here and there...And I wanted to dig a grave and get into it... The only people who were enjoying were my parents and FAB 5...


I think more than Nandini I was dammm nervous...I was saying to myself "Damm what the hell, what if she denies to do it...no ways, my parents are here...I want her impression to be perfect... God, why...why...And Nandini... what if she gets angry and leaves..." Now, with the thought that Nandini would leave was making me freak out. And yes I was right; she left the floor and went...


Everyone was stunned when she left and I figured out she wasn't comfortable...I went towards my parents and sat there.


Mom- Manik, don't be upset... We know you are worried for her, so are we...

"Mom but aap logon ka naam bhi tha dare mein, everyone is looking at us...I am sorry..."

Dad- Son, chill...it's ok...


We all sat quietly and then I was walking back towards my group, I wanted to say sorry to her too for the situation...Then, to break the silence in the room the anchor was about to say something, but stopped...


To everyone's surprise we heard someone's payal, which was played in a rhythmic way and everyone looked towards at the door behind, but no one was there... And then we saw a reddish-orange duppata (it was the same color Nandini was wearing)...


To everyone's shock Nandini came forward looking down but had a slight smile...

(THE DJ STOPPED PLAYING THE PAYAL TRACK...)


My eyes popped out and my jaw dropped and touched the floor... I was at a distance from her and then she looked at me... I rubbed my eyes badly as I thought I was imagining her...FAB 5 and her friends came near me with the same stunned look as mine...


"Mukti pinch me... It can't be real"...Mukti too was surprised and she pinched my arm very badly...I winced in pain and gave an angry look at her...

Mukti- What?? You asked for it...(confused).

Cabir- Bro, be ready... She is gonna kill you for this...

FAB 5 and her friends - "Go Nandini..." (They all said it together with excitement).


"NANDINI... WIFE..." I was in my LA-LA-LA LAND...


I was now having the widest smile on my face, I could manage... My parents and I exchanged glares... Then suddenly Nandini started to walk towards me without a smile and with every step of her my heart started to beat fast ... My smile vanished and eyes widened with nervousness, I kept my one hand on cheeks and was ready for a tight SLAP from her...🤢

She now stood at some distance from me and turned.


The music started... And FAB 5 said loudly "WHAT" (they had guessed the song...)

(She started her performance with her back towards me, she then turned slightly sideways and started her dance with her right hand pointing towards me... I was shocked and stunned with the lyrics...)


Gali Mein Maare Phere
Paas Aane Ko Mere (twice)

Kabhi Parakhta Nain Mere
To Kabhi Parakhta Tol (twice)

Ambersariya Mundya Ve
Kachchiyaan Kaliyaan Na Tod... (twice)

(Nandini now turned and looked at me and pointed the next lines... I was blushing and my face turned red... Her expressions were like as if she was really my wife)

Teri Maa Ne Bole Hain
Mujhe Teekhe Se Bol

Ambarsariyaaa...

Ho Ambarsariyaaa...


(She then went towards Reena Aunty who was sitting next to my mom and I was stunned as she was now complaining to both and looked at me ... I tried to signal her that she is saying all this to my MOM', but she didn't understand... Nandini didn't know to whom she was complaining in her performance was actually my mom...)

Ho.. Gori Gori Meri Kalai..
Haaayee...
Hooo.. Gori Gori Meri Kalai
Chudiyaan Kaali Kaali
Main Sharmaati Roz Lagaati
Kaajal Surma Laali

(FAB 5 and my parents were having a great time seeing my situation, I was damm embarrassed... )

(Nandini now turned and looked at me again, My eyed widened and my mouth got open...God her expressions were KILLER.. Her eyes big eyes expressed every word of the song)

Nahi Main Surma Paada
Roop Na Main Chamkaana (twice)

Nain Nasheele Hon Agar To
Surmaiti Ki Lod

(Nandini slightly winked at me the word Surmaiti ki Lod'😉...and I just chuckled...)

Ambersariya Mundya Ve
Kachchiyaan Kaliyaan Na Tod (twice)

Teri Maa Ne Bole Hain
Mujhe Teekhe Se Bol (twice)

Ambarsariyaaa...
Ho Ambarsariyaaa...


She completed her performance going behind her friends and then hid there... Everyone was spell bound with her graceful dance and sound of applauds didn't stop for next 5-7 minutes.


My Dad messaged me "Good choice... she is perfect for our family..." I smiled at it but my face was still down as I was feeling embarrassed😳 and didn't know how to face everyone...I quickly left the room saying I have call. I was standing in the lobby and smiling like a fool remembering her every expression...


Nandini was driving me mad and all I wanted to do is hug her tight and never break that hug, I wanted do kiss her wildly...I said to myself "I will never let her go".


After a few minutes FAB 5 too came out. They all hugged me, but this time they had tears in their eyes and I knew they were happy for me. My parents came out too and hugged me.

Dad- Manik, she is the best thing that has happened to you after music...We liked her a lot after hearing about her...But, after seeing her we love Nandini. We would be thankful to God if she agrees to be a part of our family.


"Dad...what...aisa kuch nai hai..." I was blushing, I was feeling shy☺️ and embarrassed😳 hearing that my parents had approved of her straight for marriage.


Mom- Manik we won't get fooled by your words ok... look at you...your face has turned red...Manik we know you love her...And I know somewhere you know it too...So accept it son...😳


"Mom..." We all were laughing and after a few minutes Nandini stepped out too with Devika and Sara. She freezed and her eyes were wide due to shock seeing me talking to my mom and it then hit her that the lady she was complaining in her performance to was my mom😲.


We all laughed at her expression...Mom asked all of us to be quiet seeing Nandini getting conscious.

Mom- Nandini beta come here...


She hesitantly started walking towards us, while we all were chuckling...She came and firstly touched my parents feet. My parents were highly impressed by her gesture and they blessed her. She was very nervous and scared, tears had welled up in her eyes.


Nandini- I...I am really sorry aunty, mujhe nai pata tha ki aap Manik ki mom hai. He didn't tell me...Please uncle aunty if you have felt bad I sincerely apologise to you.


"I was trying to tell you, but you were too busy in your performance and complaining..." I knew she had tears, but I don't know what made me tease her. Mom asked me to be quiet.


Mom- Nandini why are you being sorry, in fact we loved your performance. We completely enjoying it. Must say you are a very graceful performer.


Nandini- Thanks aunty...Aliya ne bataya tha mujhee ki aap log bhi aaye hai...And voh situation mein it involved you too so I couldn't disrespect you and uncle.


Dad- Nandini, beta it's fine and stop crying. And yes, Thanks to hummien kehna chahiye tumhe for giving our son a new life

Nandini- Uncle please...He is your son, he had to come to you.

Aliya then got a call that they were getting late for their appointment. The girls then bid bye to all. Nandini said she would join them in a minute.


Nandini- Uncle, Aunty it was really nice meeting you...Manik is lucky to have you as parents. I am really sorry. I'll have to take your leave.


Mom - No problem beta go ahead... vaise must say you are very beautiful girl. Say Hello to your family from our side...Manik, you better get her home to meet us...

Nandini smiled and touched their feet once again, she then left to join her girls gang.

Mom and Dad hugged me and we all left for home to get ready for the wedding.


Edited by ankita_t - 8 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#82
Amazing update
Nandu kya baat tum toh chaa gyi manik ke parnts ko bhi imprss kr diya...complaining session was awesome superbbb...lovd it...continue soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Amazing update
Really liked nandini performance
Manik expressions are just amazing
Loved the bonding between manik parents and nandini
Update soon
Thanks for the pm😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Amazing ff yaar...
Read whole in a go...
Just loved it to the core...
Plz pm me of possible...
Cont soon...

LOVE,
AAROHI...
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Posted: 10 years ago
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See I made a banner for your ff cus you called me sweet 😛



I personally didn't like it though lol

P.S. In case the pic is not visible here you can check this link: http://oi62.urlremoved.com/t7jw9e.jpg :p
Edited by sonia1000 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#86
Hi Sonia,

Thank you soo much, but for some reason I can't see it...Can you email it to me???

Well, I followed your advice too I wasn't planning Chapter 9 (A) like that, I wanted to straight come to what's there in chapter 9 (B) which had the precap in Chapter 8 (F)...But, I realised the story will be too instense to handle...So, the readers deserved some light moments too...And, I analysed Nandini's character and thoguht yes, she needs to losen a bit now, after speaking to Manik...So, Nandini did take her 1st step unknowningly towards her future...😊
Edited by ankitathanvi - 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: ankitathanvi

Hi Sonia,

Thank you soo much, but for some reason I can't see it...Can you email it to me???


PM me your email ID
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I really liked it..I loved that chit thingy..I so wish i was there in Nandini's place..Ohhh myyy Manikk 😛 lol.. Ambarsariya sequence was very nice..Manik blushing haan ;) ☺️
And precap, Manik is losing it ☺️..please make him lose it completely😆 waiting for next update :D
Over all update was sweet :)

I'm dying with curiosity here..I want to know about Nandini's past..My mind is going wild thinking about all the possibilities that could happen..may be a broken marriage..may be her boyfriend abandoned her(she got pregnent may be 😕 ) or may be she was raped (the worst scenario)..Honestly I don't want any of these but the way story is moving forward I'm expecting something very BIG

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wow. Excellent piece of writing! Yesterday I found your story on this IF and I read it in one go! AMAZING! You know what when I read the first chapter idk what got into me and I read all the chapters in one go. This is how amazingly you've written! I can see the love you have for writing! Perfect use of vocab! I was totally into the story! The way this story is being unfolded, I'm liking it! I'm eager to know about Nandini's past. I hope you reveal it soon cause then it would be interesting to see how Manik handles her after that and make her believe that love is important in life! 9 chaps and many more to come Insha'Allah! I really appreciate it! Keep writing! I'm sure when people on IF will come to know about your story, this brilliant piece of writing they will surely praise your work! You deserve much more appreciation than this! Cheers! 👏
Edited by memoona.zahid - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hi,


I know everyone wants to know about Nandini's past so before revealing it in the next 2 parts of Chapter 9, I thought it is important to know some basic things about her. So, i have penned down her sketch which will help you in knowing the old Nandini and understand her past too...


CHARACTER SKETCH - NANDINI RAICHAND

A simple, calm, innocent and obedient girl...She was raised in a very protective environment. She went to an all girls' school, but was in a co-ed school for a couple of years in between.


She then studied Computer Science Engineering, the place she never wanted talk about, but unfortunately it was a part of her life forever, she could do nothing about it. She then completed her Masters in Retail Supply Chain Management form London where she met some of her close friends for life. She now works as a senior consultant for a top consultancy firm as a specialist in Brand Strategizing.


Nandini was always a quiet girl; never did she fancy anything in life. She was her dad's sweetheart and her mom could never believe how calm her daughter was. Well, she had a mad and hyper elder brother Rishabh. They had an age difference of 6 years.


The only time Nandini would be angry or would fight was with her brother, who never left any chance to tease her. But, then he was the one who encouraged Nandini to pursue her Masters in London and also helped her convince their over-protective parents when it came to Nandini. They knew she never demanded for anything, but this time she wanted to go. They were scared as she never told anyone if something hurted her. They never doubted Nandini coz they knew she can manage herself, after college she had changed a lot...


Nandini was a great student but, she hated 2 subjects the most - she didn't like drawing at all and the second subject was Hindi. The only time she ever got scolded by her mom was when she couldn't cope up with those typically long Hindi essays or letter writing...' To everyone's surprise she was excellent in Sanskrit. She learned Kahtak for 4 years in school, but was never keen in performing on dancing in front of people. She didn't like getting judged. The biggest reason why after dance face-off she left...She knew when she danced she was completely a different person...At times due to that specially boys stared at her and she was never ever comfortable with anyone gazing her, she hated if someone tried to come close to her or flirt with her...Boys, too feared her as she never could take any such nonsense...


She never told anyone she had a hobby that she was a writer too...She always carried a black travelling diary whenever she travelled...Maybe it was hidden just for MANIK to find her unsaid words...


Then came her time to decide for college. She wanted to pursue Engineering...She got ill and joined the college 3 weeks late...She had studied in a well-known school, famous for the fact that the girls from there were snobbish. Everyone thought she was the same too and always measured their words while speaking to her. This made Nandini feel a bit left out and at times baffled...But, with time people came to know she was a sweet, caring, quiet and reserved girl.


Inspite of being a reserved girl she knew how to stand by her principles...With time Nandini started to discover herself...But, life took a 360 degree turn during her college...Her life after college was also something she had no control...And all this changed the ever so quiet, reserved and innocent soul into the Nandini she is today...Nandini then left for London and she never let anyone know anything what was going inside her...Nandini avoided going to India while she was in London...She just had one complain for her BAPPA, why does she get small happiness and with it came a big bag of tension and misery...Why couldn't she live a peaceful life...why she had to suffer a lot after every smile...


But, little did our Nandini knew that her BAPPA had some different plans for her future... BAPPA made sure she met MANIK MALHOTRA that night...😉😊

Chapter 9 (B) will be up in a few hours...HAPPY READING.

Edited by ankita_t - 9 years ago

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