PBD: The Journey Through Utopia - It's 2 years!! Payal's OS Updated! - Page 23

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Posted: 9 years ago
Superb os dear ..
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: .AkDhian.

Payal..Payal🤗
Bindu.. Bindu.. 🤗🤗🤗

I can't tell you how much I loved it..it's just magical
U really liked it.. 😲 Thanks a lot, dear..☺️❤️

This is the best one you've written so far👏.
Thankyou so so much, dear 🤗


I love your stories too,but this is special,may be b'coz it's on PBD which is very special to me❤️
🤔
Ohk!! I would take it as a compliment😆


Didn't expect ur OS would include confession.Revelation of Goa incident is another cute surprise to readers.But,I would love to see Jo's reaction too😉Poor girl had lost her sleep unable to match the eyes😆

Yes.. 😆 This Goa incident is something that caught in my mind first when I thought to write on PBD. I just hope jhanvi di won't laugh on my imagination. Obviously she will write more nicely and will reveal in entirely different way.. but my pea sized brain could think of this way only That's why I was sceptical to complete this OS😆


Jo in that saree,their lovely convo on the swing,Jalal's eagerness to be wished by his BoB,cute moments while cutting the cake,his compliments and her blush,THE GIFT and his reaction that led to much awaited CONFESSION..LOVED EVERYTHINGThis is worth waiting,Payal.👏👏

Thankyou so so much bindu.. Reading these lines, I am feeling that you could connect atleast 10% with jo-ja of PBD. That's really I was worried and sceptical about but reading your comment I am like ☺️
Thanks a lot dearie 😃

Telugu song in your OS felt different to me though I knew its bcoz of PBD😆.I loved the way you've created exactly the same situation to reveal this long pending mystery⭐️.Jalal's happiness has no bounds😉.

Yes, he was surprised and happy😃 and I know I terribly failed to write that part. I myself was not satisfied with what I had written in this last part. I just wanted to update this os today so just finished it..😆


Wondering what gift Jhanu di has planned for Jalal..I hope its the same thing😳

I am waiting for her gift.. I don't think so..😆 She will give something unexpected..

Some of the lines I loved the most:

1.The pink of her lips was fetched on his cheeks as he lowered his head and smiled mystically.
>>For a sec,I thought Jo kissed him on cheek😳😆
>>> Naah.. he blushed, at his own behaviour..😉😆



2."May you get everything you desire for.., she whispered softly, looking at him.

"I have everything I desired for.., came his instant reply.

>>❤️❤️

3."You filled the emptiness in me.. Thankyou for coming into my life,meenu, saying this softly he gently placed a kiss on her hands which he was holding,firmly.

>>

I'm going to read again and again😳
>>> I am so glad that u liked these lines, bindu.. second one.. I too like that😛😉

Thank you so much,dear for this adorable OS🤗

>>> Thanks a lot for this lovely comment,Bindu.. I don't remember after how many days I am reading such lovely words on my updates😭😭
Thankyou so much for bringing a broad Smile on my face🤗 Love you dearie❤️

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Superb os dear ..
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Thanks dear!!😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
Payal 🤗 love you darling
what do i say ??? U did total justice to jhanu di's joja & PBD 👏
If this is not your 100% i wonder what wonders it would create if u really give ur 100% ...
Lovely it was ...
The moments that every PBDian has been waiting to read from so long were so nicely written ... hats off to u girl 👏
U brought that silly smile i carry while reading PBD on my face even though Jhanu di is yet to update 😊
Thanks dear for such a lovely OS ...

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Posted: 9 years ago
I can't believe this... you wrote this? Payal I only ask because I've read both, your works and Jhanu's... and... and... and... your style/language everything has completely morphed to suit the style of PBD!😲
I could have waited and written a long detailed review... but I didn't... because I wanted to write a review as soon as I read it.. I wanted the reactions to be genuine... your 'EFFORTS' deserved it!

Other than Jhanu, I doubt anyone else would be able to differentiate it wasn't her piece of work... as an author, she must feel so thrilled that she has such an ardent fan in you... not only do you follow every nuance of the story... you are able to adapt your style to become hers, which is no easy feat... shows how invested you are in PBD...

The Goa incident really brought the biggest smile to my face...
Utopia, birthday celebrations, peacock blue saree, Telugu song (I would have never dared to put in a song from a language I don't know... so one more reason to pat yourself on the back)... I am amazed, Payal! (See no Catty di here... genuine emotions, na that's why!😉) it didn't seem like you just wanted to add these parts in your OS... it was a well-planned story that flowed along perfectly well!

The dialogues... BOB.. idiot.. the style they converse... the way the scintillating parts were all described to the T... you should be so proud of yourself!

If there was one thing I didn't like in your OS, it's your lack of confidence in yourself.. the message at the beginning... why must you think this wouldn't be good enough... it's an exceptional offshoot of Jhanu's masterpiece!

Love you girl.. and am sure if Jhanu could.. she'd have a short change of plan in her vacation... take a detour to Delhi and visit you to give you a hug...

🤗
Edited by lashy - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Manu: Thankyou manu.. will reply in detail, later..


Lashy.. ur comment made me really emotional 😭☺️

and ur last line 😭😭😭

Thankyou so so so much for such a lovely words dear 🤗🤗🤗, I am actually speechless after reading ur comment 😭😭

Lack of confidence because I didn't want to ruin any scene of this masterpiece.. also, I am a big fan of jhanvi di's writing.. that's why re




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Posted: 9 years ago
Payal !!
Did you just post that? Or am I just hallucinating?
What a work Payal... what a superb superb effort! 👏👏👏
I L-O-V-E-D it!! ❤️ Thats all I can say... such a beautiful read... Jahnu di is gonna be so so so happy and proud of you reading this... 🤗
THANKS A TON Payal for this... I loved everything about it... ❤️ You made it so special just as it deserves... 😳 I am amazed with your dedication... 🤗 Keep writing more!
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Posted: 9 years ago
and about style,Imagining PBD JO and ja I was writing that part last night and in flow I wrote boss and then BOB.. You won't believe but I was actually surprised that I wrote that.. and I was like.. it's good..
Only this thing I like in this os😆
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: lashy

I can't believe this... you wrote this? Payal I only ask because I've read both, your works and Jhanu's... and... and... and... your style/language everything has completely morphed to suit the style of PBD!😲

I could have waited and written a long detailed review... but I didn't... because I wanted to write a review as soon as I read it.. I wanted the reactions to be genuine... your 'EFFORTS' deserved it!

Other than Jhanu, I doubt anyone else would be able to differentiate it wasn't her piece of work... as an author, she must feel so thrilled that she has such an ardent fan in you... not only do you follow every nuance of the story... you are able to adapt your style to become hers, which is no easy feat... shows how invested you are in PBD...

The Goa incident really brought the biggest smile to my face...
Utopia, birthday celebrations, peacock blue saree, Telugu song (I would have never dared to put in a song from a language I don't know... so one more reason to pat yourself on the back)... I am amazed, Payal! (See no Catty di here... genuine emotions, na that's why!😉) it didn't seem like you just wanted to add these parts in your OS... it was a well-planned story that flowed along perfectly well!

The dialogues... BOB.. idiot.. the style they converse... the way the scintillating parts were all described to the T... you should be so proud of yourself!

If there was one thing I didn't like in your OS, it's your lack of confidence in yourself.. the message at the beginning... why must you think this wouldn't be good enough... it's an exceptional offshoot of Jhanu's masterpiece!

Love you girl.. and am sure if Jhanu could.. she'd have a short change of plan in her vacation... take a detour to Delhi and visit you to give you a hug...

🤗



So well said di...

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