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Anupama

@Anunilmini

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#51

Originally posted by: rbb1
Really nice story can't wait to read more hope you post the next update soon

Thank you so much ray! You never miss anything. You're awesome. Always there to encourage us. Means a lot. Hope you know it.

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guesss what ???????...i am basically so cool......

@ashlok

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#52

before starting im warning that this will be a big comment with many nooo with bohoth pyaaar

i read the whole story in one go

the title seeems to be very very goood and quite mysterious tooo

i dont know how but i am attracted by ur writing dear.

ur story is great

many questions r rising in my mind

awesome update yaaar

super duper storyyy

question 1:is aastha is related to shlok in past?

quest 2:is aastha is married to someone elso?

quest3: who shot shlok ? why?

like this many question r there in my mind and one thing dear plz pm me about ur next update

another quest:will u be my frnd forever?(i think it sounds quite filmy but bear it)

dear come to ur story i know there is something fishy and mystry

hope u will update sooon

hilarious update and im sure one day u will be a gr8 writer

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Anupama

@Anunilmini

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: Sam_15
Omg Anu I am sooo happy to see u finally decided to pay heed to our suggestion and write a story Thank you so much for considering our idea. Trust me you have many fans just eagerly waiting to read any piece of writing you offer them because you are such an amazing writer. Whatever you'll write will be awesome 😃

Coming to your story, I don't know where to start from. Starting from the title everything abt ur story is intriguing. Let me tell you, the title witness invokes interest straight away. I thought it wud be related to some crime but then I saw ur comment abt how u heard of this phrase in some show abt witness being a proof of one's existence like children...well that's just really deep.

And what an idea and concept!! Love love love it 👏 The concept sounds so unique and...mysterious. Astha as a doctor and Shlok as patient...wow. Don't think such idea has been explored yet by anyone. I wonder what's the reason behind Shlok being shot. Does he have enemies? And those people in prologue, are they Astha's kids? Sounds like they are. Hats off to u for coming up with such a gripping concept for ur first story 😃

And let me tell you, if you still have doubts about your story then please chuck them away 😛 because your writing reflects sophistication. Doesn't at all seem like its the first time u r writing fiction. Judging by ur poems I knew you would excel if u write stories and I am happy to know I wasn't wrong. You write so well. You go into perfect detail describing the scenario and incidents 😊

Continue soon. Will be waiting for the next chapter. Btw thanks for tagging me. Plz keep doing so in the future too 😃
P.s. Just to warn u, I have a knack of leaving long comments 😉

Wow! Sam what can I say! I'm speechless. Thanks you so much for all the amazing words u keep showering upon me, I'm truly and deeply touched. This is a Idea that's been in my head. All your persuasions finally pushed me over.

Coming back to the story, I guess my latest updates may have answered some of your questions.

But writing fictions is way tougher than poetry. With poems you have a idea or person or just a line and you build your rhymes. And then finish. No continuation. But this is way tougher. U need to remember what you've written before as well. You too being writer knows what I'm saying. But I will continue. You all have given me much love. It'll keep me going. Thank you once again.

And I love long comments. Keep them coming. I ain't complaining.

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Anupama

@Anunilmini

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#54

Originally posted by: lively_roshani
ME FIRST HURREEE
so Aastha has kids so cute
and love u
u r so sweet u gave my nameto her one daughter.
love the update
the doctor patient relation
different
beautiful👏

Thank you Roshani. Yes I was thinking of you when I gave the name to one of asthas lil girls. I would've given anjus name but it had to match the meaning. So sorry anju. Glad you liked the update.

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sreekailas

@sreekailas

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#55

sorry u updated 3rd chapter yesterday n im commenting on it today!!

from school days, i am a big fan of poems bcoz dey can hide lots of meanings under its surface..

so..when a poet lyk u write a story, how come it wont hide secrets in it, r8?!..Im feeling lyk ur hiding too much things in between dese lines..n dis poor gal is trying hard to read in between ur lines.. but im really loving dis..

As u said..u r flying high..while reading ur lines even i find myself getting lifted from d ground!!

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@rbb1

Elite

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#56

loved both the updates thank you, can't wait to read more, I love the relationship between Shlok and Anjali so nice and loving.

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@rbb1

Elite

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: Anunilmini

Thank you so much ray! You never miss anything. You're awesome. Always there to encourage us. Means a lot. Hope you know it.

awww you are sooo sweet 🤗, but credit you guy all who are brillant writers on this forum, keep rocking guys 👏

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sreekailas

@sreekailas

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#58

Originally posted by: Anunilmini

Thank you Roshani. Yes I was thinking of you when I gave the name to one of asthas lil girls. I would've given anjus name but it had to match the meaning. So sorry anju. Glad you liked the update.

if in future aastha n shlok n have a baby,give her my name meaning dat she lives in their heart😃

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Anupama

@Anunilmini

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#59

Originally posted by: priya_avi
Anu read both chapters in one go...its really nice...n ur story is really intense n have a depth in it...loved all ur comparisons like 'bandage to her scared heart n soul'...
Its cute that astha having 2 lil girls but where is their father???
Ashlok feeling connected with each other...now what shlok gonna do with 'his' angel...lovely start with some myster...do continue soon...
P.s:when ur updating a new chapter put it in ur heading,helps reader to catch the updates...
Thank u!!!

Priya, thank you first of all for pointing out something I have totally missed. You may have seen I've corrected it.

Bandage too was something a lil girl who lives in our apartment bldg told me about how her big brother is the bandage to her baby brother. Lil fellow was crying for the brother who had just gone for tuition, he was crying near the lift. I thought that was the sweetest thing. It struck in my mind.

At the moment there's no father. I know I'm holding lot of info to my self. Will unravel the mysteries one by one. But do keep reading and love your comments.

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Anupama

@Anunilmini

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#60

Originally posted by: sreekailas
You updated part 1 and 2 too?! u r superrr faaast i must say!!
Aastha is a surgeon n shlok her patient! i loved d theme!!it reminded me of Grey's Anatomy..
shlok hallucinating Aastha as an angel!!it again reminded me of d musical epi of GA!! really loved dat part.. d way u xplained d part when shlok recalls his meeting wid aastha was mind blowing!! well written👏

Hey anju! Glad I made you happy. And all those English series are having a influence on this story. U might see similarities. But I was never a fan of GA. I never liked Meredith. She put me off. But liked Dempsy. Have watched more than few epis.

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