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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: daisy_luvs_ ff

read the whole fic today
and i just love it.......thankuuuu sooo muchh dearrrr......the flashbacks are awesome and the way the progressing is too good!! thank god that u all liked flashbacks.... b4 writing the fic i was very nervous about the whole flashback thing.... but then i continued after getting positive responses for first part of flashback.....

love the names Mann and Veer..........they even sound like made for each other ...... thankuuu sooo muchhh..... i was nervous about mann... as it doesn't match with Naina... but then i thought it wound sound like raj is calling his mann....

will be waiting for 16th-17th when we ll get the next update!!
sorry.... i delayed it..... i actually continued my other fic journey and also started a new one... so dint get time to write this one...... but i will continue it today itself.....
gr8 fic 👏

thanks once again......
take care.....
b bye....
keep smiling......
sheenu......😊

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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: coolsamthomas

Good story.The flashbacks are excellent and waiting for the update

thankuuuu sooo muchhh dearrr......
i will update it today itself......
thanks for commenting.....

take care....
b bye.....
keep smiling......
sheenu....😊

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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: Mahak Sinha

Really too funny update.Major Nair k saath to aisa hi hona chahiye 😆 .Update asap. 😛 😛

thankuuuu sooo muchhh dearr....
just wait and watch....is BC ke MC ka aisa band bajane waali hun mai...i mean Naina and Raj...ki sab ispe hasenge... isne hi hamare raj ke saath itna kuch kiya na..😡.. i will make him repay...😆...

i will update it today itself in an hour....
till then...
take care....
b bye....
keep smiling......
sheenu....😊

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Posted: 17 years ago

Hello friends…. I know I am very late…. And ppl might not be waiting for the update….. but then again I am here to torture you with my stupid fic and an ultra stupid update…. So enjoy reading…. And plz do comment if you are reading the fic………

PART 10

Naina: Scrabbles is no more….. Excuse me….. And she goes from there

But raj can see tears in her eyes….

Shalini: I think….

Raj: I will just come….. I think I should go………..

Shalini: don't worry I will go to infirmary…. You go………b bye….

Raj: bye…… and he goes after Naina….

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Raj: naina……. Naina….. where r you??

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Raj: god ye kahan chali gayi???

There Naina was standing on the grounds and was looking towards sky….

Raj came there and asked…

Raj: naina…………..

Naina: go from here… leave me alone……

Raj: no I won't……. I am not going to leave you alone…. What happened???

Naina turned and said

Naina: because of you I lost everything… because of you only…. You have snatched everything from me…. My brother and my scrabbles…. You snatched them….

You…. And she starts crying……..

Raj comes close and holds her from her shoulders….. naina who was crying badly hides her face in his arms…..

Naina: why did you do that??? Why raj why???? …………..

Raj: shshhh naina…. Stop crying…. Shhh…. I am sorry naina….

Naina: SORRY….. *holds his collars and shakes him*…. You are saying sorry…. You have killed my brother and my scrabbles…..

Raj: scrabbles!!!!!! But I dint……

Naina: yes you did…. Because of you I lost him…*shook him* that day when I saw you firing bullet I was walking towards academy but I was not in my senses and was remembering the incident… so dint see the truck coming towards me with full speed and out of control…. Scrabbles was there on my palms and noticed the truck…. And started moving on my palms and making sounds… but you… my whole attention were on you… I was only thinking about the incident…. and failed to notice scrabbles movements……so when truck came very near scrabbles bite on my hand…. I startled and shook my hand…. I was saved because of scrabbles but I left it there and scrabbles……………………………………………

And she again starts crying……

Raj again tries to hold her but naina retreats and says…..

Naina: don't captain…. Don't….you don't need to care for me…. I am not your friend any more…

Raj: I am sorry naina….. I am sorry for everything…….

Naina: can you bring my scrabbles back???? No na??? Can you bring my brother back??? No na…. so you don't have the right to ask for sorry…….

And she goes from there…….

Raj: I am sorry naina…. I have the right to ask….. because I surely can't bring your scrabbles back… but navin……………….

I am sorry naina…. I can't tell you the truth now……

And he goes behind her….

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They both were on their way to his room when they met shalini……….

Naina: sorry shalini… I left like that……

Shalini: no need naina…. I completely understand your situation… I am on my way to infirmary….

Naina: ohkkk…. I am going back in the room to have some rest…

Shalini: yes naina…you should take some rest…. I am going to check everything…. Also lights will be out in hr…. so b bye and take care….

And captain you also take care….

Raj: I will shalini… b bye…………

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Raj and Naina both entered the room… this time naina should get nervous as any normal wife would get on her first night with her husband…. But naina was not normal…… or should I say circumstances were not normal……

Raj: Naina have some rest…. I will sleep on the sofa… you don't have to worry…. I know you are angry with me but don't spoil you health…. You sleep on the bed and I will sleep on the couch kept in bedroom…..

naina: you don't have to pretend rajveer….. I know how much you care for me….

And saying this she goes and sleeps on the bed………..

Raj: I am not pretending Naina….. ya………………. I am pretending that I don't love you…… and I killed navin……

And saying this he goes and sleeps on the couch…

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Next day:

Raj woke up and sees naina and smiles and goes to wake her up but then stops and goes to have shower……..

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In mess:

Our six cadets were there when our hero enters with his sad and sweet wife…….

Huda: oye dekho….. apna desh ka jawan uski beautiful wife ke sath aa raha hai…aaye haye kya janani hai…

Simi: tumhe unke bare mei aisa nahi bolna chahiye huda…wo kisi ki wife hai

Huda: to tujhe kyu itni jalan ho rahi hai… kahin aisa to nahi ki tu mujhse dil hi dil mei pyar karti ho.. aur dikhawa karti ho…

Simi: you are disgusting huda…. I was talking about our teacher's wife… you shouldn't talk about her like that… but you are sooo…..

Huda: oye teacher ki wife hai na… teacher to nahin hai…. aur waise bhi ye jatt to teacher ke sath bhi flirt kare to ye to teacher ki wife hai… mai abhi aaya…. Jara unhe welcome karke aata hun….

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Huda: array good morning sir ji…. Good morning naina ji…. Kaisi hai aap….

Naina: mai thik hun cadet huda….

raj was standing there watching his cadet flirting with his wife…

huda: toh KMA kaisa laga aapko Naina ji…..

naina: mai KMA mei pehle bhi aa chuki hun… KMA ab pehle jitna accha nahi hai….

huda: ji abhi to aap hamse mili nahi… hum aapko dikhayenge ki ye KMA to pehle waale se bhi jyada accha hai…

raj who was standing finally speaks…

raj: cadet I think aap bhul gaye hai ki aap apne teacher ki wife ke saath flirt kar rahe hai… accha hoga ki aap apni training pe hi dhyan de… naina ko KMA ka tour mai ya dr. shalini de denge…

huda: o sir ji wo kya hai na huda flirt karte hue kab line cross karta hai usse pata hi nahi chalta… sorry hai ye huda…..

raj: its ok cadet.. but aage se dhyan rakhiyega…..

huda nods and goes from there….

Naina (looking straight): thanks…………. And she also goes towards cadets…

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They were just leaving the mess when naina bumps into someone at the entrance and she was about to fell but felt a strong arm holding her from her shoulders from her back….…..

Raj: (releasing her)are you ok???

Naina: yes I m………..and distances herself from raj…. And look towards the person standing at the entrance….

Person: hello…. So you are captain's wife…. I am dr. mishra…….

Naina: hello dr. mishra …..

Ritu: so have you had your breakfast????

Naina: yes…. I was on my way back to my room….

Ritu: but I think you are a dr. in Ambala military hospital… so won't you go there…..

Naina: no not today….. I have to join from tomorrow…

Ritu: waise I must say you are really lucky…..

Naina: why so???

Ritu: array aap itne handsome captain ki wife hai isliye……

Naina kept mum…. And raj started feeling nervous…

Raj(in his mind): up to here she was talking normally but then she again started her usual talks… what will I do if she says something……

Ritu: array aap kuch boli nahi…. Waise your husband is very handsome, caring and intelligent….

Naina: not everyone thinks so… I mean thanks….\

Ritu: waise captain why dint you tell us before??? You broke so many hearts…..

Raj: I dint think it's necessary to tell it to everyone…

Ritu: really!!!!! you think so….. you should told us this before… especially me…. Aapne mujhe bhi nahi bataya… aapne to mera dil hi tod diya….. mujhe laga ki I have a special place in your heart………

Raj (getting nervous): dr. mishra maine aisa to aapse kabhi nahi kaha…. You are just a friend like dr. shalini…….

Naina (handling situation): even I think so dr. mishra…… rajveer ko kisi ko bhi hamare batane ki koi jarurat nahi thi because he was here to teach cadets and not to discuss about his personal life… aur fir agar kisi ne koi false hopes rakh li then I don't think its his fault……

Ritu feels disappointed but again an idea comes in her mind….

Ritu (smirking): waise I am upset that you are not going hospital today……

Naina: why so??? Am I such a big trouble to you… I think its first time we are meeting…..

Ritu: no actually I was looking forward to spend some time with him but since you are here he won't be free….. see he dint has his breakfast with me which he usually takes with me….

Raj; dr. mishra I usually take it with dr. shalini and you…..

Naina (looking towards raj): I have never put any restrictions on him…. He can do whatever he wants….. and I think you can spend time with him even today…. I won't stop you because I know he knows his limits and I trust him…….

Raj surprisingly looks towards her while naina goes from there…… and ritu looks disappointed……..

Raj goes behind naina in his room……

Raj: naina thanks for trusting me……

Naina: who told you that I trust you…….

Raj: but you said… and tumne dr. mishraa ko handle bhi acche se……

Naina: agar maine dr. mishra ko acche se handle kiya then that doesn't mean ki I trust you.. I said that because I have to pretend that I am your wife… and I don't care for what you did to her or you promised to her or anything else……

Raj: but I dint promised to her anything……..

Naina: I said I don't care…… I don't care if you did or not…….but here to everyone I am your wife and I have to pretend like that……… now I don't want to talk on this topic anymore…. And go she must be waiting for you… spend time with her……..

Raj: naina………….

But naina doesn't listen to him and goes in the other room….And he goes from there not to meet dr. mishra but to take his classes……

Naina: raj tumpe bharosa karna to maine 3 saal pehle hi chod diya tha… but ye dr. mishra…. I think something is wrong about her……

Why do I think that she wanted me to fight with you for not telling about our marriage to everyone in the academy…… and I also think that she wanted me to leave this academy………. But why would she want that…. And there was something in her eyes…..what was that?? Her eyes look familiar…….no in fact she looks familiar to me…..

But why does she look familiar to me??? I think pehle bhi mai inse kahin mili hun ya koi tasveer dekhi hai…. par mujhe kuch thik se yaad nahi hai…. shayad kafi purani baat hai…… pata nahi...... par lagta hai pata karna padega………

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End of part 10…..

So sorry for delaying this part…. I was supposed to update this one on Saturday but I am updating on Tuesday….. but I promise from next time I will b more regular……

Thanks for bearing with me……

Take care and keep commenting……
b bye……
keep smiling…..

Sheenu……..

Edited by rogerfan - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
its nice good do update soon asap.
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Posted: 17 years ago
FAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAABULOUS 😛 uff how do u manage to write soo beautifully with amaaaaaaaazing dialogues...i m floored by ur talent 🤪 ..excellent update dear..Huda kabhi nahin sudhrega ...chance mein dance karna koi huda se sikhe 🤣 ....Naina was too good...dr.misra ko accha answer diya..and i m feeling very sad for scrabble.. 😭whole update was at its best..brilliant dear..thankuu soo much for this beautiful part..this is for u 🤗
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Posted: 17 years ago
Too good!!!Awesome!!!!

Its sad Scrabbles died 😭 😭 ....... par jate jate bhi usne Naina ki jaan bachayi!!!It was a true companion!!!!

Raj ne Navin ko nahi maara ......... Navin zinda hai , kaash Naina yeh janti toh Rj se aise behave naa karti!!!!

Aur Naina is not at all nervous...haan situation hi ajeeb hai!!!!Par kaash woh Raj se itni kadvi baatein naa kare!!!Bechara Raj , uska kitna khayal rakhta hai aur woh hai ki har baat pe usse sunane ka ek mauka nahi chhodti!!! 😭

Yeh Huda bhi naa 😡 !!!Apne teacher ki wife ko bhi nahi chhodta!!!I wish he would just stay away from Naina!!!! 😡 And Simi as well!!!! 😡 😡

I just hate that Ritu 😡 !!!!!Trying to create misunderstanding between Raj and Naina!!!!But Naina ne kya acche s sambhal liya!!!!Haan Naina Raj ko aise hi sambhalna aur apne pati ki 😳 😳 rakhsha karna ush chudail se!!!! 😡

Navin ne sahi kiya tha Raj aur Naina ki shaadi karwake!!!Agar nahi karwaya hota toh shayad aaj Raj uske jaal mein phas jata!!!Aur Ritu ke liye sab kuch aur aasan hota!!!!

Naina ne Ritu ko dekha tha ya uski tsveer dekhi thi???Now thats interesting!!!

And she can understand ke uske irade nek nahi hai balki woh undono ke beech mein jhagda karwana chahti hai!!!Good for Naina akhir aane waale khatre ka ndesha ho hi gaya usse!!!! 😛 😊

And by the way you were supposed to mention who was playing Arjun Sahay!!Do one thing correct it in the previous update and also announce it in the coming update that it is being played by Kiran Kumar!!!!

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Posted: 17 years ago
wowwwwwwwwwwwww, its amazing and really awesome update...... 👏
loved the way naina stood up in front of ritu....i know she is mad at him but teh way she spoke to ritu, its wowww,
feel really sorry for scrabbles and i hope naina soon comes to know how much raj still cares for her and is not the wrong person......
and i guess naina ki dimaag ki batti jalegi and she will remember that ritu is that pathetic person who used to be navin's gf!!
and that ritu, horrid, shameless woman!!!!!!!!
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Posted: 17 years ago
😭 scrabbles no more awwwwww he seemed so cute a true friend, i love my pet if anything had happened to him i would cry, my puppy's like my best friend even though i got him for my birthday i have grown so close to him anyways yaar naina is too harsh on raj, i fell sorry for him i know that naina is going through pain because she has lot her pet and her brother but yaar, itna bee harsh hona acchi baat nahin hain.

hmmmmm this ritu gosh i hate her soooooo much just feel like punchin her black and blue, but i guess i don't have to do that as naina is there she'll handle that witch, and yeh huda hai kabhi nahin baldlega but then he won't be the same if he does....

hmmm another suspense raj didn't kill navin, does that mean he is a live or someone else killed him and naina got the wrong idea? so many questions one that you haven't answered yet who is simi? how is she related to navin and naina? anyways looooooooooooooooooved the update but yaar where did you disappear and haan will we see some romance in the near future 😳

anyways take care sheenu, i really like you name it's got a buzz to it 😃

take care 😃
yasmin
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Posted: 17 years ago
mera Raj bichara kab tak ye sab sehta rahega Naina ki berukhi. 😭 😭 Aur ye Doc. Mishra to aur har samay Raj se chipakna chahti hai. 😕 Aur vo humare Huda bhai k to kehne hi kya har time bus flirt .Naina kab maaf karegi Raj ko 😭 .Yaar update soon.

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