Sajan (Raj-Naina) - Part 7A on Pg 24 - 09/08/09 - Page 11

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Posted: 16 years ago
Dear Tina

I've personal pm you and please do reply back... I am extremely sorry about how you feel, but personally I didn't know if there was a fan-fic on that scene because I haven't read
"FATINY" and if Pia have then I don't know why she copied because I asked her to help me with a scene between BC and Rajveer... but I don't know what to say at the moment so I am going to re-edit by writing in my own style and I am so sorry...

Please forgive me - for using Pia's scene idea... I didn't know she copied it from your fan fic... I feel so disgusted that I should have edit before posting it. I am so sorry... I don't know if you will forgive me or not, but I am sorry for the misunderstanding created and if you feel I should stop this fan fiction then I will...

Sincerely,
Mickey P
PS: Please do reply back...
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: Mp_Desigirl

Sorry, I was out of town for few days but now I am back in action...

Love
Mickey P



Part 4 ~ Arrival at KMA

Rajveer stops at Rajmahal Complex...

Raj: Sunaina begin with the shopping and I'll join you in few minutes...

Naina nods her head...

Rajveer waits until Naina goes inside the building...

Rajveer takes u-turn and parks the jeep under a huge oak tree...

Rajveer picks up his cell... dials a number... and waits silently.

Someone picks up from the other end.

Raj: Hello Atul

(Atul's character portrait by Pankit Thakker)

Atul: Yes Raj

Raj: Have you been keeping a eye on Dr. Ritu Mishra for me!

Atul: Yes Raj... every single movements...!

Raj: Great! I'll be there soon

Atul: Alright

Raj hangs up the phone.

Naina looking around... she only liked few items... and only traditional wear which she loves to wear.

Rajveer joined Naina inside who is ready to pay, but Rajveer stopped her by saying "let your husband pay for you".

Naina didn't want to create a scene and stepped aside while Rajveer does the payment of her shopping.

Rajveer carries the bags in his hands and notice Naina starring at Sai Baba's idol.

Raj: Sunaina, do you want the idol of Sai Baba and Radhaa-Shyaam (Lord Krishna)?

Naina nods her head...

Rajveer takes her inside and purchase the idols...

And of to KMA!

Drive to KMA was quiet...

Naina stared out the jeep...

Raj stops the jeep... few inches away from KMA.

Naina looks at Rajveer...

Raj: Actually I heard GM telling you how important for a married women mangalsutra and sindoor is... so I purchase a mangalsutra for you and U hope you don't mind wearing it since we have to pretend being man and wife inside KMA

Naina closed her eyes...

~ Flashback ~


Navin: Naina, why are you sitting so quiet?

Naina didn't answer Navin's question...

Navin repeats the same question...

Naina: Bhaiyya, kasia hoga mera sajan?


Navin: Someone who loves you more than your siblings. Also you will see inside the person - rab
(god) if he loves you more then himself.

Naina: What if it's based on arrange marriage?

Navin only said one sentence - "Tujh Mein Rab Dikhta Hai"


~ End of Flashback ~

Navin's words echoed into Naina's mind while she wears the mangalsutra around her neck and fills her forehead with sindoor.

Suriji shouts: Rajveer is here... (excitement is filled in his voice)!

Every faculty members are excited in arrival of Rajveer and mostly Atul.

Rajveer walked inside... followed by Naina who suddenly gets wreath-less like Navin. Navin is taking deep breathe like Naina. Naina holds onto Rajveer's jacket for support.

Rajveer looks on his left side...

Raj: Sunaina, are you okay?

Naina taking deep breath...

Shalini rushes to Rajveer's side and asked Suriji to bring glass of water.

Naina continues taking deep breathe.

Raj takes glass of water from Suriji... lifts the glass toward Naina... Naina quickly drinks the water and final deep breathe.

Dr. Shalini: Are you okay?

Naina nods her head...

Raj: Are you okay, Sunaina?

Naina: Fine... but sometimes car sickness happens at wrong time.

Shalini understood without Naina saying anything...

Shalini: I think you should take her inside and there is always later to meet old friends.

Raj nods his head and Suriji shows them their quarter.

Naina stops by a door and feels a strange feeling.

Raj turns around

Raj: Sunaina...

Naina continued following Rajveer inside the quarter, but looks again at the door with strange-chained up lock on it.

Navin finally controlled his breath...

Navin: Guriya, why do I feel like you are next to me...?

Naina lies down on the bed opposite the wall - Navin also lay down too.

Rajveer informs Naina about his absent to meet Brigadier Chandok.

Naina nods her head...

"Captain Rajveer Singh Shekhawat reporting sir"

Brigadier looked up from his file, but inside his file was Gujan and Nupur's picture who he talks with half of the time when he is not busy.

Bc-Welcome to KMA once again Captain !! Smiling to cover his frown in missing his neices he loves the most after they moved to KMA when their college year was over, (but at the moment they are gone to visit Diya who is married to RanVijay).

Raj-Thankyou sir!!..

Bc-So ghuma firakey your are always connected to Kma..second best indian soldier of your batch. (continued smiling)

Bc laughs to cover up his misery regarding the change in Gunjan after her college ended...but Raj was senti!!

Bc-I understand Captain...It must be like old days for you....Co-Incidentally some of your batchmates are posted here too.....you could meet them soon!!....I am sure its going to be a tought time for me again!!..... (still trying to hide his misery because Rajveer can notice who is lying and who isn't by their reactions or their facial expression).

Bc smiles

Raj-But Captain Navin is not here Sir!!....and i am proud to be the 2nd best cadet....Navin was the best...and always will be the best in KMA....you know sir he was not a traitor (both Rajveer and BC tried hiding their tears by laughing of their misfortune of luck)!!

Bc's face became sad and flashback covers his mind (how Gunjan left without meeting him)!!

Gunjan: Mamaji, how can you say or think Navin is a traitor? We all know Navin is the best and I am not in shame of calling Navin my older brother.

BC: Gunjan!

Gunjan: Mamaji... true always hurts and I can no longer stay here anymore with a person who doesn't listen to his heart... Goodbye Mamaji

BC: Gunjan!

Gunjan ran into her room... packed her bags and leaves with Nupur (her older sister) leaving her friends shattered mostly Samrat.

Rajveer's coughing brought BC out of the flashback...


Rajveer: What were you thinking Sir?

Bc-Captain you may proceed towards the mess....you will find all the cadets and faculty there.....go ahead....and all the best captain!!..

After leaving BC's room Rajveer bumps into Rahul...

Rahul takes Rajveer in a huge bear hug...

Rahul: Welcome back Captain or should I say dude!

Raj: It's good to be back where I belong.

Rahul: I heard you brought someone with you. A girl.

Rahul made strange facial expression.

Raj: Indeed and she is my wife Sunaina! (sarcasm was added in Rajveer's tone)

Rahul open his mouth in shock...

Rahul recovers from the shock.

Rahul: What? When? How? and Why? What about Ritu who is crazy about you?

Raj: To stay away from her and I love my wife...

Raj winked at Rahul...

Raj smiled!

Rahul: Let's go inside the mess...?

Naina fresh up... wears a simple baby-blue churidar combine with white.



Naina decide on her own to take a tour of the place where her brother found peace.

Naina bumps into a person who shocks her...

***
Please do comment...




I've made a change with BC meeting Rajveer cause I learned that my friend Pia copied from Tina's fan-fic and I feel ashamed on myself...

I don't know if I'll be forgive or not, but if the writer of that scene wants me to stop writing this fan fiction then I will without no hard feelings....

Love
Mickey P
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Posted: 16 years ago

I m glad you atleast bothered to reply...Who actually is PIA?

Well i have no issues if you carry on with the FF....but not copied from someone elses FF...anyones for that matter...no writer would like it that way.....
But i still have a small doubt...If you havent read Fatiny ever then how come i saw that Like post on one of fatinys earlier updates..I did see it last night after posting here.....
My slow comp doesnt let me open up those pages now and check or post the link ....but i am damn sure i saw ur username under the following members lyk this post heading....
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: Mp_Desigirl



Thank you for the encouragement....

Love
Mickey P

Welcome dear😳.
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Posted: 16 years ago
Mickey, I know that you have apologized and attempted to make some changes and add your own words, but the parts I have quoted below are still too similar to the scene from "Fatiny". There are sentences that are copied exactly. Please rewrite the scene entirely in your own words. If the plagiarism persists, the Dev Team will be forced to close this thread.


Originally posted by: Mp_Desigirl



"Captain Rajveer Singh Shekhawat reporting sir"

Brigadier looked up from his file, but inside his file was Gujan and Nupur's picture who he talks with half of the time when he is not busy.

Bc-Welcome to KMA once again Captain !! Smiling to cover his frown in missing his neices he loves the most after they moved to KMA when their college year was over, (but at the moment they are gone to visit Diya who is married to RanVijay).

Raj-Thankyou sir!!..

Bc-So ghuma firakey your are always connected to Kma..second best indian soldier of your batch. (continued smiling)

Bc laughs to cover up his misery regarding the change in Gunjan after her college ended...but Raj was senti!!

Bc-I understand Captain...It must be like old days for you....Co-Incidentally some of your batchmates are posted here too.....you could meet them soon!!....I am sure its going to be a tought time for me again!!..... (still trying to hide his misery because Rajveer can notice who is lying and who isn't by their reactions or their facial expression).

Bc smiles

Raj-But Captain Navin is not here Sir!!....and i am proud to be the 2nd best cadet....Navin was the best...and always will be the best in KMA....you know sir he was not a traitor (both Rajveer and BC tried hiding their tears by laughing of their misfortune of luck)!!

Bc's face became sad and flashback covers his mind (how Gunjan left without meeting him)!!



Originally posted by: Mp_Desigirl


Bc-Captain you may proceed towards the mess....you will find all the cadets and faculty there.....go ahead....and all the best captain!!..


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Posted: 16 years ago
I've decided to re-post part 4 because one of my Pia who helped me write a scene where Rajveer meets BC but yesterday I learned that she copied from Tina's fan-fic which I never read, but I was more shattered when she heckled into my account and posted on Tina's fan fiction as I liked it but I never knew she had a plan going on in her mind. I realized last night that she first saw me type my password then she herself heckled into my account and posted few link as me so when the truth of the scene is caught I would be banned like her... and now I have broke of all my ties with her because I can not forgive a person who used me for own selfish needs... I don't know if Tina will forgive me but I was unaware of the fact and now I have changed my password so Pia can not heck into my account but I know its hard to trust me again without having second douts and for that I am every betrayed of gain trust again.... 😭 I'm sorry Tina...

Love
Mickey P



Part 4 ~ Arrival at KMA

Rajveer stops at Rajmahal Complex...

Raj: Sunaina begin with the shopping and I'll join you in few minutes...

Naina nods her head...

Rajveer waits until Naina goes inside the building...

Rajveer takes u-turn and parks the jeep under a huge oak tree...

Rajveer picks up his cell... dials a number... and waits silently.

Someone picks up from the other end.

Raj: Hello Atul

(Atul's character portrait by Pankit Thakker)

Atul: Yes Raj

Raj: Have you been keeping a eye on Dr. Ritu Mishra for me!

Atul: Yes Raj... every single movements...!

Raj: Great! I'll be there soon

Atul: Alright

Raj hangs up the phone.

Naina looking around... she only liked few items... and only traditional wear which she loves to wear.

Rajveer joined Naina inside who is ready to pay, but Rajveer stopped her by saying "let your husband pay for you".

Naina didn't want to create a scene and stepped aside while Rajveer does the payment of her shopping.

Rajveer carries the bags in his hands and notice Naina starring at Sai Baba's idol.

Raj: Sunaina, do you want the idol of Sai Baba and Radhaa-Shyaam (Lord Krishna)?

Naina nods her head...

Rajveer takes her inside and purchase the idols...

And of to KMA!

Drive to KMA was quiet...

Naina stared out the jeep...

Raj stops the jeep... few inches away from KMA.

Naina looks at Rajveer...

Raj: Actually I heard GM telling you how important for a married women mangalsutra and sindoor is... so I purchase a mangalsutra for you and U hope you don't mind wearing it since we have to pretend being man and wife inside KMA

Naina closed her eyes...

~ Flashback ~


Navin: Naina, why are you sitting so quiet?

Naina didn't answer Navin's question...

Navin repeats the same question...

Naina: Bhaiyya, kasia hoga mera sajan?


Navin: Someone who loves you more than your siblings. Also you will see inside the person - rab
(god) if he loves you more then himself.

Naina: What if it's based on arrange marriage?

Navin only said one sentence - "Tujh Mein Rab Dikhta Hai"


~ End of Flashback ~

Navin's words echoed into Naina's mind while she wears the mangalsutra around her neck and fills her forehead with sindoor.

Suriji shouts: Rajveer is here... (excitement is filled in his voice)!

Every faculty members are excited in arrival of Rajveer and mostly Atul.

Rajveer walked inside... followed by Naina who suddenly gets wreath-less like Navin. Navin is taking deep breathe like Naina. Naina holds onto Rajveer's jacket for support.

Rajveer looks on his left side...

Raj: Sunaina, are you okay?

Naina taking deep breath...

Shalini rushes to Rajveer's side and asked Suriji to bring glass of water.

Naina continues taking deep breathe.

Raj takes glass of water from Suriji... lifts the glass toward Naina... Naina quickly drinks the water and final deep breathe.

Dr. Shalini: Are you okay?

Naina nods her head...

Raj: Are you okay, Sunaina?

Naina: Fine... but sometimes car sickness happens at wrong time.

Shalini understood without Naina saying anything...

Shalini: I think you should take her inside and there is always later to meet old friends.

Raj nods his head and Suriji shows them their quarter.

Naina stops by a door and feels a strange feeling.

Raj turns around

Raj: Sunaina...

Naina continued following Rajveer inside the quarter, but looks again at the door with strange-chained up lock on it.

Navin finally controlled his breath...

Navin: Guriya, why do I feel like you are next to me...?

Naina lies down on the bed opposite the wall - Navin also lay down too.

Rajveer informs Naina about his absent to meet Brigadier Chandok.

Naina nods her head...

Rajveer knocked on BC's cabin door...

BC: Come inside

Rajveer turns the knob and walk inside the cabin and says "Captain Rajveer Singh Shekhawat reporting for duty".

BC placed a pleasant smile on his face and says "welcome Captain! It's great honour to be working with my second best cadet from his batchmates"

Rajveer: Thank you sir

BC: So how does it feel to be back in KMA?

Rajveer: Great (minute pause) its great to be back but there are too many memories that we can not backspace from our life. Anyways I'll take your leave!

BC: As you wish and you are right that we can not bakspace the memories we collect in our life.

BC closed his eyes and remember the argument he had with his neice Gunjan and why she left him after Navin was arrested....

Bc's face became sad and flashback covers his mind (how Gunjan left without meeting him)!!

Gunjan: Mamaji, how can you say or think Navin is a traitor? We all know Navin is the best and I am not in shame of calling Navin my older brother.

BC: Gunjan!

Gunjan: Mamaji... true always hurts and I can no longer stay here anymore with a person who doesn't listen to his heart... Goodbye Mamaji

BC: Gunjan!

Gunjan ran into her room... packed her bags and leaves with Nupur (her older sister) leaving her friends shattered mostly Samrat.

Rajveer's coughing brought BC out of the flashback...


After leaving BC's room Rajveer bumps into Rahul...

Rahul takes Rajveer in a huge bear hug...

Rahul: Welcome back Captain or should I say dude!

Raj: It's good to be back where I belong.

Rahul: I heard you brought someone with you. A girl.

Rahul made strange facial expression.

Raj: Indeed and she is my wife Sunaina! (sarcasm was added in Rajveer's tone)

Rahul open his mouth in shock...

Rahul recovers from the shock.

Rahul: What? When? How? and Why? What about Ritu who is crazy about you?

Raj: To stay away from her and I love my wife...

Raj winked at Rahul...

Raj smiled!

Rahul: Let's go inside the mess...?

Naina fresh up... wears a simple baby-blue churidar combine with white.



Naina decide on her own to take a tour of the place where her brother found peace.

Naina bumps into a person who shocks her...

***
Please do comment...

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Posted: 16 years ago
hey nice part
do continue soon
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Originally posted by: nisha1984

hey nice part
do continue soon



Thank you

Love
Mickey P
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: sania_58

nice part

plz continue soon



Thank you

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Posted: 16 years ago
I am glad Mickey that you decided to take severe steps against your friend...!!!! Feeling bad for you...!!!! I am sure you will be forgiven by Tina and we all trust you...!!!!

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