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Posted: 8 years ago
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So I was scrolling through my old posts on IF and came across this story which I had written for KriYansh in the D3 FORUM long time back and So I thought of converting it and giving it her for you all.
The Secret

"Ruko! Yeh sab tum dono kya kar rahe ho? Ouch!" Shouted a middle aged man.
"Sorry uncle!!" Both of them shouted together while throwing tomatoes at his house and at him and ran.
"Dare done?" Asked someone
"Yes!!"Both of them replied together
"Ufff! Who am I asking the partners in crime Shraman !" Said the same someone.

Shraman,the name was just enough!Suman and Shravan were popularly called Shraman by their gang and even the whole college.They were the bestest of friends could even be called The Partners in crime. Shravan was a basketball captain whereas Sumo was the best dancer in St.Louis,their college. One could not find a bond like theirs anywhere.
On the day of Shravan's match.

"All the Best." Pushkar said giving Shravan a side hug.
"Thanks!" Replied Shravan.

"Shravan come its time to start the game .Come right now!" Coach called out for Shravan as the match was ready to start any moment now.

"Yeh Sumo kab ayege? Usne mujhe promise kiya tha aur ab mein late ho raha hoon par uske last All The Best ke bina mein nahi khel paaonga!" Thought Shravan to himself while looking for Sumo in various directions.

"Sorry sorry" a running Sumo reached the basketball court.

"I am so sorry that I m late.Hope match chaloo nahi hoya?"

"Match chaloo nahi hua but just hone wala hai ab jaldi seee mera All The Best dedo"

Sumo ran her hand through his hair,messed it up and wished him luck.

St.Louis won the match that day and the best player trophy was awarded to Shravan Malhotra. As soon as the match got over he directly ran to Sumo,who sat on the pavallion without paying attention to all his college buddies waiting to congratulate him and lied on her lap.Sumo smiled seeing him relieved and began stroking his hair.

On the day of Sumo's Dance Competition

"Shravan I am scared." Said Sumo,biting her nails.

"Sumo, kuch nahi hoga babu.I know you will rock it as usual!" Shravan just passed her an assuring smile.

It was now time for Suman's performance. This time Shravan wished her luck and kissed her on the forehead giving eclairs together, the chocolate she loved.

That day Suman had won the dance competition.
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It was their way of wishing each other luck, Suman would wish Shravan luck by messing up his hair and Shravan woul do the same by kissing Suman on the forehead and giving her eclairs.Both of them believed that if they would wish each other at the end they would succeed, and if not they would fail.And that indeed happened.

"Sumooo! Where are u my wrestler?!" Shravan entered Suman's room casually.

"SHRAVAAAN!" Screamed Suman," Manners nahi hai kya koi girls ke room mein aise ghusta hai kya? Specially jab voh change kar Rahi hai! Couldn't u knock? "

"Relax Baba.Tum na gussa karte waqt ekdum wrestler ke tarah dikhte hoo."Shravan winked.

"Shut up!"

"Areee you have nothing I haven't seen ,you know." smirked Shravan.

Arghhh! Thank god mein andar hoon nahi to pata nahi aur kya kya bolte."

"Acha my wrestler relax baba. Waise get ready fast we are going to our school."

"Village u mean humara walla school?"Asked an excited Suman.

"Haan baba whai school.You always wanted to go there na since so long? Your favorite memories are there right?"

Shravan, you are awesome.Sabse Best,ekdum!Acha I am just coming in a min."

"Here I am ready.How do I look? asked an excited Suman.

"Ekdum jese wrestler" teased Shravan,silently laughing.

"Shravan! I will kill you!" warned Suman.

"Acha sorry babu ab challe?"

"Haaan"

They were going to the school when suddenly Suman told Shravan to stop the car,she had seen a panipuri stall.

"Voh dekho Panipuri,chalo khatee hai.Waise bhi subha se kuch kahaya nahi and mujhe aise he le aya"

"Nahi PLEASE Sumo"pleaded Shravan.

"Mere liya na Shravan"

"Okay"

"To hum spicy khana khayenge.What say Shravan?"

"Spicy!?No ways,I am going bye!"

"Thike jaoo mein akele kha lete hoon" Suman moved on to the panipuri stall,Shravan following her.

Suman was eating when suddenly," Huhuhuhuhuhu!! Mirchi .mirchi lag gayi!! Pata nahi mein yeh kyun kha rahi the?"

"Pehle toh you were fighting with the bhaiyaa ke mujhe mirchi wala khana hai aur ab bol rahi ho kyun khaya? Here,be thankful.Go eat this eclaries.."

"Thank You"

Both,finally reached the school,it was a holiday but the workers there were present,busy doing some work.

"Shravan I have a dare for you."

"What?"

"You see that aunty cum baiji there?Go and ask for a date with her."

"WHAT! NO Sumo I am NOT doing that"

"Please na"

"Okay! But on one deal.Only if you take that uncle,you see near the canteen on a date"

"Done"

Both Suman and Shravan went to their respective uncle-aunty and did what the dare had stated.
Here Suman's date wasn't going to well.Neither could she understand the uncle's accent nor was he spitting out the paan he was eating and moreover he seemed to be a bit touchy.

"Pata nahi Shravan ne kahan phasa diya ab bas one hour poora hone doo,phir dekhte hoon uss idiot ko" Suman mentally cursed Shravan.

There Shravan's date wasn't going to well too.That baiji won't stop talking about her household problem and called him bhaiya,even after Shravan told her not to address him that way.
He was bored and was missing Suman terribly.

Finally the date time got over and both ran to the place where they were supposed to meet.

"Shravan I will kill you! Ruk toh!Pata hai voh uncle kya kar rahe the..."and she went on blabbering.

Shravan found himself getting lost in her continuous blabbering and in the innocence she carried while narrating her date happenings.

"Sumo ab bas! I have this thing in my mind,a sort of secret.I really want to share with you"

"Haan bolo!"

"Shravan took a step closer to Suman,leaned and whispered in her ear,"The secret is that...I think I have deeply fallen in love with my best friend."

Saying so he kissed Suman on the cheek and ran away from the place,leaving a shocked Suman behind.

I know this concept must have sound a bit absurd and the sentence formation,not up to the mark but as I said this was my old KriYansh work converted into Shraman piece which I had written back when I was 13 or 14.I did a bit of modification here and there,hope it worked out.
Do leave your views and comments below.
Thank You.

-Mitali❤️
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Posted: 8 years ago
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mittu...🤗me first...awesome os👏...kuch different tha ...aur amazing bhi...dono ke dates badly gujar rahe the..😆shravan bhaiya..🤣It was amaze...aur likhna..uff..typing with left hand is so irritatting...🤔
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Mittu dear,you wrote this when you were 13!!then you must be a born writer!!! Mujhse tho ek lamba ,acha sa post bhi nahin bantha😭BTW the write-up was realy wonderful!!!!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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You wrote that when you were 13 or 14..!!!! bhaisaaab...!!!! 👍🏼
amazing yaar..

too good... loved it... anything on ShraMan is just ❤️ ❤️ ❤️
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Amazing...their friendship bond is awesome...so adorable...beautiful update
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Awesome... they are adorable..the bond shraman share is beautifully penned... really want to see sumo reaction after shravan's confession if u can continue
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Posted: 8 years ago
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I remember reading this on KR ❤️
And it was good when reading it n Shraman version too😳
Such a cutee os⭐️
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Posted: 8 years ago
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It was awesome OS.Beautifully penned👏.Their chemistry was so cute.🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Mittu,
This is cute. The way of wishing luck was so cute..
I was never on the D3 forum hence don't know about any stories or discussions there.. But I love Shakti.. Kriya was too good.. Don't call me mad but I loved Shakti n Shantanu!!! Individually, of course!
This story was very sweet.
Love
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Posted: 8 years ago
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mittu pehle to thanks for the pm...it was awsm dear...at the age of 14, writing something like this is not easy but u did this...wow dear...liked the way u used the name shraman ...actually I loved it..for the first I think someone has used it...starting from their truth n dare to shravu confessing his love was so cute...how they were famous as shraman n were besties ...were lucky charm of each other...without each other's wishes they wont succeed ...loved this concept...how she used to mess his hairs n he kisses her forehead n gives eclairs as sign of luck...eclairs concept to I loved it.. n how he entered in her room randomly...lol...n panipuri drama was cute... n again their dare...God hilarious it was...how she was stuck with that uncle n he with aunty ...lol n at last angry bird sumo.. n how cutely shravu confessed his feelings for her...it was adorable...loved it dear...keep writing such stories ...:)

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