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Posted: 9 years ago
Updated not even a comment guys is it so bad 😕
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Posted: 9 years ago
Ravs
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Really good guys
U r shaping this into beautiful story
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Posted: 9 years ago
Ravzs, this was beautiful, you showd the angst perfectly...
I was away so couldn't comment, sorry abt that... Hope I am able to take it up from here and do justice
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Posted: 9 years ago
Sorry for being super late... Update on its way, half written, will write the rest soon, hopefully will update it before the how starts, if not after
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Posted: 9 years ago
Hello peepals... Please kill me for not updating before.. And then kill me again for posting half...
But koi nahi, it's better late than never... Si here is this little part.. I am still writing another scene.. But this is the one I personally like..

I am typing on phone so please do not mind mistakes.. Here this goes

The last few minutes were the toughest in Shravan's life, while following Sumo and Pushkar to the living room, he was contemplating hard about how to get rid of Verma.. Now Verma did not seem only Sumo's problem, but also his. Why was this happening to him. Why did he become restless when he heard that creep talk to Sumo like that. These thoughts brought a frown on Shravan's face. He was walking slower than Sumo and Pushkar. they had walked out if the house to the porch while Shravan still dragged his feet in the living room, he felt a hand tap his back. He turned and looked back at the face of that gracious old man

"Tiwariji, aap??" He blurted, fearing about him hearing the conversation.
"Shravan, kya baatein hi_ rahi thi andar" nanu askes
"Kuch bhi to nahi" Shravan aaus trying his best to hide his fear
" barkhurdaar, tum to ye jaante ho tumhare baap ko vakalat Maine hi dikhayi hai, aur tum kal parso ke vakeel ho aur hum arson se wakalat kar rahe hai" Nanu said in a quiver ing yet confident tone.
"Matlab, tiwariji, main kuch samjha nahi" Shravan asked confused
"Matlab ye Shravan, ki maine tum logon ki saari baat sun li hai" Nanu said alarming Shravan
"Lekin aap pareshan mat hoye tiwariji, Pushkar aur main us Verma se nibat lenge" said shravan
"Vo to theek hai,.lekin us Verma ko halke main nahi Lena, vo bahut tedi cheez hai, Giddh ki nazar paayi hai usne.
" Uske paas humari property ke saare details hai, Sameer ki income tax filing bhi vohi dekhta hai, mujhe shaq hai ki agar use halke mein liya to vo Sameer ke liye pareshani khadi kar sakta hai"
"To phir hum ab kya kare tiwariji? Kaise roke use? Usne dhamki di hai ki vo kal aayega aur Sumo se..era Matlab hai Suman se engagement
.." Shravan couldn't complete his sentence

" Shravan, main kuch sochta hoon, Suman meri bacchi hai, mera maan hai.. Aisa nahi ho sakta ki meri marzi ki khilaf uski shaadi ho"
Shravan tells nanu about the recording he made of Verma threatening Sumo.
"Ye tumne bahut achha kiya Shravan, main Sameer se baat karta hoon, is Verma ko uski manmani nahi karne dunga" said nanu
"Tiwari ji, main Sumo ko kuch nahi hone.dunga" Shravan said while his voice shook with emotions
Nanu stopped and looked at Shravan for a while, with a slight smile he said
"Jaanta hoon... Aur haan, tum muje nanaji bula sakte ho"
"Lekin tiwariji... Aa..hmm..Matlab nanaji, Maine abhibtak aapko chess mein..." Shravan said confused
"Shravan beta!! Aaj tumhare is ek sentence ne tumhe has baaI jita di hai, main jaanta hoon, meri Suman tumhare saath bahut khush rahegi"
Shravan's face spread in a wide grin, he had never felt so blessed in his life. He bent down and touched Nanu's feet, who gave his blessings in return and left to talk to Sameer.

To b continued...

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Posted: 9 years ago
@mizzundaztad it was wonderful I love it
You indeed hav taken it to next phase

Wil Cont after your full update

Clarify res after her mizzundaztud update

Once again👏
Edited by ravzs - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: ravzs

@mizzundaztad it was wonderful I love it

You indeed hav taken it to next phase

Wil Cont after your full update

Clarify res after her mizzundaztud update

Once again👏


Thanks Ravzs... I was thinking why don't we run parallel to the show.. Trap Verma here 😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
K that wil be nice lets get some romance also with it n sum teasing from Pushkar
As we write trapping Verma n screwing Khosla wil be fun

U hav finished the above update o not dint get u
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: ravzs

K that wil be nice lets get some romance also with it n sum teasing from Pushkar

As we write trapping Verma n screwing Khosla wil be fun

U hav finished the above update o not dint get u


I am still in process of writing TIWARIS/Verma face off...
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Posted: 9 years ago
U updating tdy @ mizzundaztud
Episode was too gud hope we can get a jealousy track in our os in

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