Chapter 1

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Okay, this is the first time I am writing a story. Just a result of my wierd imaginations... So, please bear with me and don't kill me if you don't like it. smiley36

It is a two-part story. Here is the first one...

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Part: 1

      

       Silence... Silence was the only thing which prevailed. Just a dead silence. The temple which used to be so alive with throngs of people chanting mantras, singing hymns, sound of ringing bells and conches felt like a house of the dead. Not a single person was seen in it's vicinity. The diyas, aarti ki thalis, prasad etc were lying on the ground with utter disregard. The Prathamayan had wreaked havoc.


       As far as the eye could see, they could see only people moving like robots, chanting the Prathamayan's name. Anyone who came in contact of those people was either killed or became just like them. The Prathamayan had completed her promise. She had promised or rather challenged that this Navratri, no one would be taking Devi Maa's name. They would be worshipping her instead. And it happened... The people outside were taking Prathamayan's name and were bowing down in front of her...

      

       Back in Rathod House, the Sharmas and the Rathods along with Guruma and Panditji were busy analysing the situation. Guruma had informed them that the Prathamayan had created a Prathamayan Mantra Kavach over the entire vicinity and anyone who entered it became her bhakt automatically. Thanks to the Mantra Grahan Dravya, they were safe.

      

        A serious discussion was going on. Vedashree had informed them about Prathamayan. She also told them that the Prathamayan had wanted to make her an Ekayan instead of Mohona and that she had refused to choose the path of evil and had chosen Devi Maa's path instead thus enraging her... She was angry that her own daughter had defied her and did not follow her path and chose to follow Devi Maa's path instead.


Ansh: To woh is baat ka badla lene aayi hain?

Vedashree: Haan. Aur is baat ka badla wo pure sheher ko apna bhakt bana kar le rahi hain. Aur shayad is sheher ke sabhi logon ko apna bhakt banane ke baad wo poori duniya ko apna bhakt banana chahti hain... 

Ansh (turning to Nishant): To in logon ko theek karne ka koi to tareeka hoga na?

Nishant: Nahi aur agar hai bhi to mujhe is baare main kuch nahi pata. After all, Daayan Rahasya Divya ne Prathamayan ki madad se hi likha tha. Aur usne apni koi bhi kamzori nahi batayi hai aur na hi usne apne Prathamayan Mantra ka koi tod bataya hai...


       Pia suddenly got an idea...


Pia: Baba, ek rasta ho sakta hai...

Nishant and Ansh (together): Kya?

Pia: Panditji ne bataya tha ki Devi Maa ki pavitra shankh gayab ho chuki hai... Shivji ke mandir see damru gayab ho gaya hai...

Ansh: Tum kehna kya chahti ho Pia?

Pia: Main ye kehna chahti hoon ki ho sakta hai Prathamayan ne ye sab cheezein isliye gayab ki ho kyonki inki dhwani se Prathamayan Mantra ko kata ja sakta hai?

Nishant: Haan... Ye ho to sakta hai.

Ansh: Wo sab to theek hai par hum ye shankh dhoondhenge kaise? Pata nahi Prathamayan ne use kahan chipaya hai...

Nishant: Hum nahi dhoondh sakte par tum to dhoondh sakte ho.

Ansh (totally confused): Main?? Kaise??

Nishant: Daayan Vriksh ke zariye. Tum bhi to Prathamayan ke vanshaj ho... Daayan Vriksh ke zariye tum uska dimag bhi to padh sakte ho...

      

        And Ansh called the Daayan Vriksh and asked it to reveal the whereabouts of that shankh. He came to know that Prathamayan had hidden that shankh in the Daayan Vriksh itself. Using his powers, he tore open the stem and retrieved the shankh.


Saavi: Dad, shankh to mil gaya par iski awaz sabhi logon tak kaise pahunchegi?

Vedashree: Iske zariye...


       They brought forth several loudspeakers.


Panditji: Lekin Nishantji, kya is shankh se dhwani utpann hogi?

Nishant: Koshish to kar sakte hain na.


      Everyone tried but no one was able to blow the conch. Finally, Nishant turned to Pia.. 


Nishant: Gudiya, ab tum hi humari aakhri ummeed ho... Tum hi koshish karo.


      She blew the conch but no sound came. She tried again but failed... Finally, she invoked Devi Maa's help... 


Pia: JAI HO MAIYA KI!!!


       And she blew the conch with all her might.

      

       Everyone waited with bated breath... One second, two seconds, three seconds lapsed... They were losing hope quickly...


      Finally, when they had almost given up all hopes, the conch sounded, loud and clear... It's waves spread over the entire area breaking the Prathamayan Mantra Kavach and ultimately freeing the people from it's effect...


      They all were happy... Chaitali did a little jig clapping her hands and Pia, Saavi and Vedashree joined in. Everyone thanked Devi Maa for her help and started preparing for Vijaydashami. After all, they had a Herculean task of defeating the Prathamayan in their hands...

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Comments (19)

Okay, will be posting the second part tonight... But mind you guys, it has absolutely no connection with today's episode... Or for that matter with the upcoming episodes too... It is just my imagination. Nikki_srk2019-10-08 11:41:38

4 years ago

your conch theory was spot on they're using the same concept in the episode in a different way.

4 years ago

Yes easily readable now. It's not necessary to use different colour schemes if u don't want to . Just para spacings & use of bold & italics will do. Hallyumint2019-10-07 18:29:07

4 years ago

Nikki i can't believe you wrote this you're really talented. I'm not kidding. This read like a recap of an actual episode. Kudos . I found your choice of story interesting do post the second part. You have a wonderful imagination. Before delving into the story i love that you set up the world of that story before starting it . You gave the right amount of descriptions for me imagine the setting when i read that scene. I could actually visualize the temple & the Rathods house where they had their convo complete with bg music . Might i add yours was an easy read. Love that Ni this time didn't have ready made answers as usual. It was Piya & then Ved who played her part.That was clever of you to add the conch bit to break Pr's mantra.Might i also make a suggestion. Since we don't have font options to distinguish the different scenes can you center your para 's for one. It makes it easier for me to read then. Second one was can you highlight the different scenes or when different characters speak for eg making their names in bold or italics & para spacings. That's all keep writing whenever u can Hallyumint2019-10-07 17:08:26

4 years ago